May I ask which comedies or tragedies you were thinking of when you wrote this? And which Romantics (I'm assuming the later generation). Personally I don't think Ciel would ever consider himself in a comedy. Not unless he means the term sarcastically or with some sense of foreboding.
It's a cute concept, but I think you just made Ciel into a teenage girl.
What I had in mind was the classic concept for Tragedy and Comedy. I admit I may have twisted the original concepts to fit my idea, but what I originally thought was a confused Ciel in puberty reading Romanticism (the literary period that took place between the 18th and beginning of 19th Centuries) plays and all the study he had on it playing a part in him trying to understand all the unknown, unwelcome feelings.
I know what Romanticism is which is why I'm confused. The "classic" concepts for Tragedy and Comedy come from the Greek plays. In English canon, which probably had just been established in Ciel's time, it would also include Shakespeare. These have rather clear definitions to them which I don't see integrated into your story. I asked which pieces you had in mind because the Romantics were not labeled as such until about 50 years after they stopped writing (so also, probably quite recently in Ciel's time) and the big figures were better known for their essays and poetry than their plays. Or is this an imaginary Romantic play that Ciel is reading? Sorry for being such a geek. Romantic and Victorian era literature just happens to be my fav.
I didn't have any particular piece in mind, although Shakespeare was the name in my mind most of the time. I'm sorry if I raped history, haha. I'm a Literature student so I tried to include my studies somewhat in my story. I did google the history period of Kuroshitsuji and Shakespeare, but I think I lacked a lot more contextualization to make it accurate. Sorry about that.
There are a few grammatical errors here and there. The best way to refer to that era of literature in your sentence would be "Romantic". It's grammatically incorrect to refer to it as "Romanticism" literature. The italics are also overused. I'll refrain from further commentary on the grammar, unless you want it.
It's rough around the edges and Ciel seems OOC, but it's up to you how to interpret him, as long as you explain enough to make his train of thought believable.
Ah, so it's wrong to call it Romanticism? I had to google to find the actual term, and it seems I found the wrong one. My apologies about that. The italics are something I like using, so yes, they might be overused. It's just part of my style, I'm afraid. I wouldn't mind comments about the grammar, I'd actually appreciate it very much.
To make Ciel so full of emotion is something very hard, so it was quite an effort on my part. Since puberty can be such a turmoil, I thought I could give it a try. I may have ended up making him OOC, but it was merely a try.
Thank you for the criticism, it's highly appreciated ^^
Romanticism was the movement, but if you're going to talk about it in reference to something it would be correct to use the word "romantic."
If you'd like, I can read it over, change what I think is off and highlight my changes (so you can see the differences) in a word document which I can send to the email address on your profile (the hotmail one).
There's nothing wrong with trying. Practice is what makes perfect, after all. I thought I'd add that you're taking the criticism quite well.
Ah, I understand now. Thank you for clearing it up.
If it wouldn't be bother, I'd love if you could do that.
Thank you. You and tasukigirl were actually great at giving criticism, it's better to listen and gain from you than ignore you and be lost in my own little world where my story's perfect.
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That was beautiful. Oh, Ciel. What a dear. I hope everything turns out alright for him in the end.
Anyways, a wonderful ficlet! Great job! ♥
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It's a cute concept, but I think you just made Ciel into a teenage girl.
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Anyway, this is a really awesome fic. It's kind of chilling but sweet. Mostly creepy. xD; Poor Ciel. Maybe butlers can double as therapists.
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It's rough around the edges and Ciel seems OOC, but it's up to you how to interpret him, as long as you explain enough to make his train of thought believable.
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To make Ciel so full of emotion is something very hard, so it was quite an effort on my part. Since puberty can be such a turmoil, I thought I could give it a try. I may have ended up making him OOC, but it was merely a try.
Thank you for the criticism, it's highly appreciated ^^
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If you'd like, I can read it over, change what I think is off and highlight my changes (so you can see the differences) in a word document which I can send to the email address on your profile (the hotmail one).
There's nothing wrong with trying. Practice is what makes perfect, after all.
I thought I'd add that you're taking the criticism quite well.
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If it wouldn't be bother, I'd love if you could do that.
Thank you. You and tasukigirl were actually great at giving criticism, it's better to listen and gain from you than ignore you and be lost in my own little world where my story's perfect.
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