round 05, challenge four: results

Sep 19, 2010 19:12

Sorry for the very late posting. I've been terribly busy these past few days, thus the lack of activity. That said, here are the results for Round Four!


round 05, challenge four: eliminations
#01 (-05) Letting go by sensiblecanary

#02 (-03) Mirrors are the devil's eyes by almondkicks


round 05, challenge four: people's choice
#03 (+01) Compulsive liar by alwaysinlike


round 05, challenge four: tallies


Round Five, Challenge Four
01. Letting go by sensiblecanary
02. Mirrors are the devil's eyes by almondkicks
03. Compulsive liar by alwaysinlike
04. Sights and smells by thundersquall
05. Tell me how I'm supposed to by saengie


round 05, challenge four: elimination comments
#01 - The exploration of Kibum's feelings and thought processes seemed very superficial, not enlightening. The 'reason' for Kibum's departure could have applied across the board.
#01 - There's a whole lot of telling instead of showing in this drabble, and as a result, it doesn't have much of an impact or a lasting impression.
#01 - the strikethroughs make the fic look awkward. there's also a tense change halfway through the piece.
#01 - It's confusing, from how the tone changes around. You make Kibum sound like he's some emotionless monster by focusing only on his want for freedom. Nothing on his connections with the other suju members, except in the end where it sounds like you're trying to make us dislike him.
#01 - this is a concept that has been written a few times, and this one doesn't hit as hard as it could've. the tone, while it's supposed to be of gain and it suggests that it's good he left super junior, is more dismissive and not as hard hitting as it could've been. basically, it didn't achieve its purpose.
#02 - there are too many unnecessarily flowery phrases, metaphors and adjectives through the drabble. it's overkill for such a short piece.
#02 - Wording is confusing at times. Word choice also, makes the fic awkward in some moments where I feel as if you didn't mean for it to be awkward.
#02 - The writing is messy and disjointed to me, and the line "a few thoughts meander through his grey matter" took me right out of the story.
#02 - It took me many many reads to realize what was going on. The choppy sentences and style made this difficult to read.
#02 - i really can't explain why i didn't like this, except for that the pairing is a favorite of mine, and there really must be something wrong/not right with it for me not to like it. idk, but the best i could come up with is it left a niggling thought at the back of my head, the same thought even after a couple of reads through--what's the point? was that it? simply said, it failed to content.
#04 - The drabble was sweet, but I felt it lacked substance. It's not bad, but the other ones just stood out more with me.
#04 - while the writing is good, the actual plot doesn't seem very believable -- what suggests that henry, who doesn't like coffee, likes sweet things? why must sungmin assume that straight up? and even the way henry addresses sungmin so casually at a first meeting is a bit far-fetched, in my opinion.
#05 - I felt as if the piece were cut from a bigger fic. I was not able to fully understand the conflict though I got a vague concept from the scene. Perhaps this was done on purpose or perhaps it's because I am not familiar with fandom.
#05 - i think the author meant for the abrupt start and end to be a stylistic choice (and i honestly don't know if this would have worked for a longer piece or something else) but all it looked to me was someone randomly c&p-ing a snippet from a whole document.


round 05, challenge four: favorite comments
#02 - Made a seemingly awkward or 'porn-like' setup into something mildly comical. I was able to play out the scene in my head.
#02 - this one flowed really well and just provided an overall great story in so little words. it had humour, great dialogue and thoughts and just some really good lines in the narration.
#03 - Out of all the entries, this one had the most emotional impact for me. The writing is solid, and it packs a lot of story into 200 words.
#04 - Nice descriptions, and a constant warm tone throughout the drabble.
#04 - simply because it's safe. there's a meet cute, and there really are only two outcomes to these. the author succeeded with hers. but the real deciding factor for me was the consistency in the tenses--these are drabbles so it really shouldn't be hard to read over one's work and see over this.
#05 - this was very pleasing and refreshing stylistically with the wording of the opening and closing sentences being half cut off like that. loved its take on the prompt too.
#05 - Second person is tricky to pull off, but I thought this was done really well. I liked the creative formatting too.

sashimibaby, paintingseas and formattitude have used one skip for this challenge. subtleslide, dimentionally, perkybird and flickre have used their last skip. discrepance has dropped out from the challenge.

*rd5 chal4, !results, *round five

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