FIC: Not Even a Hint Left Behind

[scribblinlenore]

First, I want to say to all those in the path of Hurricane Katrina that my thoughts are with you. I hope everyone stays safe and well.

Here's my story for the Writers' Workout Challenge, using the first person subjective, a completely new fan fiction writing experience for me. I loved this challenge. It really did push me to consider new things.

Comments

[yavannauk]

That totally gave me the shivers. Beautifully written.

[scribblinlenore]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! This was an interesting challenge. Writing from the first person really is a different experience.

[suzvoy]

*sniffle* This was such a great idea, and very well written.

[scribblinlenore]

Thank you! I was a little afraid no one would want to read this since it's from Lana's POV. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. :)

[feliz581]

This was excellent, great introspection.

"If I'd known where each step was leading her, I would have made her sit back down, stay there forever . . . "
What happened to Chloe?!

Ironically, I was far more upset about the poor boys than I was Lana. But I consoled myself with the idea that they are somewhere safe together having lots of sex, beacuse of the not aging and the happily ever after, right?! *g*

[scribblinlenore]

Glad you enjoyed this!

I was trying to give the impression that Chloe gets killed in the line of work, but I wanted to leave it a little mysterious. *smiles*

And yes! You know, time works differently out in space, so Lex and Clark still have a lot of lovin' and togetherness ahead of them. :)

[mecurtin]

Now *this* is what I call a story with a happy ending! *blissful sigh* Although it's a *leetle* hard to swallow a Lana who didn't make their lives all about Her Drama. But maybe this is the difference between AlMiles!Lana and the "true" Lana, Lana as she should have been: a supporting character in the Epic Drama of Clark & Lex's lives, not the Star.

erm, also -- starlings don't build twig nests, they nest in holes, and usually communally. Blue Jay, Robin, Mourning Dove (particularly careless nesters, often within view of a window, and nests fall apart easily) are all possibilities. None of them will feed their young seeds, though: it's a high-protein diet only for them all until fledging at least. And the sound of the babies isn't really a squawk, it's always pretty high-pitched.

[scribblinlenore]

Hee! Obviously I'm not a bird person. Too bad about the starlings. I really like the word "starling." Hmm. Will have to find another bird. Robins will always belong to "The Secret Garden" for me. Doves have too much symbolism. And Blue Jays are nasty, nasty creatures. We had a nest of them at one of the houses where we lived when I was a child, and they used to swoop down at my cat and peck him on the back. Nasty creatures!

[digitalwave]

What about sparrows? They build a nest and have a really pretty birdsong.

[scribblinlenore]

Sparrow works! Still has the same poetic sound to the name. Thank you! I would have been googling birds all day. *g*

[kelly_girl]

The title says it so well. Lovely story. It seems so quiet, like Lana herself, with so many things hidden in layers.

Great story, though I wonder what happened to Chloe. I also like the starling nest reference you make in the beginning and the end.

[scribblinlenore]

I'm glad you enjoyed it. I really enjoyed this challenge. Left to my own devices I'd never think it write in the first person or from Lana's POV. It was good to try something new.

As for Chloe, I wanted to give the impression that she was killed while following a story. And I'm glad you liked the starling reference. That's actually my own favorite part of the story.