Watchmen fic: Last Days of an Unreal City, chapter 4 - Cost-exchange

[scarlet_carsons]

Title: Last Days of an Unreal City - Chapter 4 - Cost-exchange
Characters: Rorschach/Nite Owl II
Rating: PG-13
Word count (this section): 6231
Disclaimer: Characters belong to Alan Moore.
Summary: AU. The Cold War reaches its ultimate conclusion, and Rorschach and Daniel are among the survivors when the East Coast is attacked.

Chapter Index.

Comments

[findmyantidrug]

Woo, next chapter! I love that Dan realizes that Rorschach might actually have, oh, feelings. Maybe. The questions the passengers asked Daniel was priceless, and I love how you described Rorschach's dream/memory. Also? I laughed out loud at the 'chasing rabbits in your sleep' 'What?' exchange. XD Great job; looking forward to the next update! :D

[scarlet_carsons]

Rorschach can dish it out but can't take it. I mean, feelings are for the weak.

Thanks. :)

[lady_wormtongue]

This chapter was somewhere between awesome and just perfect! Maybe even both! Loved the humor, the description of the explosion, and the mention of Carl Sagan (which can only ever make things better). ^_^

[scarlet_carsons]

Thank you. :)

Rorschach does not agree with Nuclear Winter theory and the TTAPS study, rrarrl. (But unfortunately for Rorschach, I do.)

[natureslove]

I love the amount of research you do (or make us think you do?) Haha. The length of the chapters is wonderful, you give us enough detail and information but not too much.

I curious to where this will lead in the end. What a wonderful ride this will be.

Also, at time you make me feel as if I am standing next to them.

[scarlet_carsons]

I love the amount of research you do (or make us think you do?) Haha. The length of the chapters is wonderful, you give us enough detail and information but not too much.

Damn, I'm glad to read this. I really have to force myself to be more descriptive, as I was horribly florid writer as a teenager, and now I think I've gone too much in the opposite direction: I constantly have a nagging voice at the back of my head telling me that description makes things too purple, and I should be writing DIALOGUE! and ACTION!

Also, at time you make me feel as if I am standing next to them.

I think that this is what every writer wants to read. Thank you. :)

[mustinvestigate]

I love all the world-building you do with this, like the offhand: The Federal Aviation Authority were probably the only people who had come to hate Nite Owl as much as the NYPD did. It gives this story so much depth and power.

[scarlet_carsons]

Thanks. I'm the sort of saddo who likes to read supehero comics and take note of all the illegal/ethically dodgy things that the characters do, and I like to imagine all the 'offscreen' people who they probably annoy in the process. (I'm still bitter that Garth Ennis took an (IMO) interesting concept like The Boys and used it as a vehicle for unfunny toilet humour. Damn.)

[tuff_ghost]

"Plague of frogs" and Dan's thought about Rorschach being creepy was BEAUTIFUL, great opener. I really loved this chapter. I was enjoying it because I was thinking Dan was paying a lot more attention to Rorschach this time around, and THEN I read the part about Dan wondering about whether "Rorschach had picked up on it". And looking at the back of Rorschach's neck :3

This is so exactly my speed of slash, and I was so pleased to see that you have planned for it to be TEN! CHAPTERS!

[scarlet_carsons]

God, ten chapters. Sometimes I think 'wtf have I started I'm going to be writing this fic forever,' but I can't really see it coming to a resolution much sooner than that. If I can get 4000+ words out every two weeks or so, then I think everything will be okay.

Stupid sexy vulnerable Rorschach neck.

Glad you liked!