I'm nearly ready to send my final proof my poem off for submission, but I was wondering if someone would mind just giving it a once-over for me?

The poem is PG-13/Rish because of the content, just to give fair warning!

I wrote a poem last week, my first one in... maybe seven years? Well, the first one I've completed, anyway. I'm not a big poetry fan, to be honest. There's very few poets I like, even fewer poems that really impress me. But occasionally one likes to pour out of me, so...

( LOL x. Warnings for swearing and sexual references. )