Original Fic: She Wore A Blue Ribbon

[sarahyyy]

Since I am submiting this for a magazine, I thought to post it to see what kind of reactions (*wink nudge* you know to leave a comment when you read this, seriously) I would get. =D It started out as part of my procrastination, a Dramione actually, and then I turned it into my assignment. Talk about lazy... =D

Be nice, my dear, dear friends. I

Comments

[returnofthegaze]

I'm trying to figure out how this was ever a Dramione...ah, no matter.

I was just trying to show you how sad you looked so that you might decide on smiling.
Awwwww.

I really liked it. Your writing style reminds me of something, but I can't figure what it is. In any case, it was really good (I particularly liked the ending).

If you want any concrit...I would make the mother more hesitant about telling Hyacinth, but I'm not sure if that would ruin the flow (it probably would).

[sarahyyy]

Haha. The idea was from it. It was originally going to be that Draco, in a twist of events, realised that he couldn't make Hermione happy so he obliviated her, changed her memories and sent her back to her muggle world. Big change from the original, I know. =D

I'm glad you liked it. =D I thought I overdid it. Lol.

Hmm... I'll keep that in mind and try to mould it in for the next draft of it. =D Thanks!

[strawberrimelon]

You're amazing like woah and you know it.

Of course I do, honey. You never cease to remind me XDDDD
And you are too! I'm sure you'll get the best of the best reviews from your school!

[sarahyyy]

Of course! With me around, you can continue dreaming of not being reminded of how awesome you are. =D

I <33333 you to bits and pieces. Honestly. =D

[strawberrimelon]

Lol! I'm sure that will happen :)))))))
Don't worry, doll. I'd remind you every second of your awesomeness as well!

I <3333333 you tooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Dead serious. :DDD

[electric_z]

THIS IS GOOD BUT IT DEPRESSED ME AT THE END LOL,

BUT I LOVE IT ANYWAY <3

[sarahyyy]

Thank you! I was wondering if I overdid it at first, but I'm glad you didn't think so. =D

<333333

[stardustii]

ohmygosh. i loved it so, SO much.
and you know what? i was going to copy and italicize all the parts i LOVED but then like, i liked too many parts and there were so many parts that were so poetic and lovely and yeah. <3333333
i loveeeee it. lovelovelove.

[sarahyyy]

Hahaha. This comment made me grin like an idiot. And now everyone's looking at me like I'm some sort of crazy person. =DDDDDDDDDD THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU!!!!

<33333333333

Just as a survey though (because honestly, your comment already has me up in the air), which part was your favourite?

[stardustii]

hehe. i'm just telling the truth :)

okay. so i was kind of like, "i think i know what's going on" and i love the way you wrote this part:

“My father sent me over to make sure that you were happy. Now that you are, he says it’s time for us to leave.” Joanna’s eyes were fixed onto her shoes, not wanting to look Hyacinth in the eye.

“I… I don’t understand.” And truly, she didn’t.

Joanna didn’t answer her, but just wrapped her small arms around Hyacinth and said, “I’ll miss you…” Her voice was muffled by her silent crying and Hyacinth’s hair.

Hyacinth thought she heard Joanna say “mum”, but she was sure it was just a figment of her imagination.

…wasn’t it?

especially teh part where Joanna and Hyacinth are like, hugging and yeah and the "mum" . i was like. O___________O sldkfjlkdf ♥

and then this:
...for she had never noticed that the colour of the ribbon was that of her own eyes. HERE I WAS LIKE CRYCRYCRY TOO POETIC AND BEAUTIFUL and the ending is always like the most important and it was developed so well so that i was

[stardustii]

okay. so. um. that ^ was me :DD