Re: I have a feeling this is going to be longsandymgNovember 16 2010, 17:37:01 UTC
Thanks so much. I was typing a really long response to your comment and it just vanished so now I'm all grrrr. I appreciate your detailed comments so much. It's a pleasure to read what works and makes me learn and grow as a writer.
I especially all the parts you pointed to. The convention was very important. Jared had taken things as far as he could. It was up to Jensen now. His going to Jared was literal and symbolic and accomplished what needed to be done. You will see that the next section immediately follows this one. No time gaps. It's one fluid section.
Re the real life girlfriends (now wives), yeah, I went AU with this. It's easier, honestly. I set it back a ways in time to not deal with it. I wanted to write a romance, not a threesome or a really sad breakup story. So Genevieve only was at the flirting, questioning stage with Jared. This is why she was okay with it all -- they weren't really involved and so her heart was not hurt. She liked him and if he was happy, then she'd be happy for him. As you might have noticed Danneel doesn't appear at all. No need. If I established Jensen as gay in my AU, then he doesn't need a girlfriend. Of course, she could have been a friend in the story; but given real life I thought that might confuse. Like I said, it was just easier to just go AU with this stuff. The Gen/Jared tease was only to let Jensen understand what he might lose. And really, it worked!
Re: I have a feeling this is going to be longtwirlycurlsNovember 16 2010, 22:56:55 UTC
Oh man, I hate it when LJ eats my comments! A few weeks ago I put together one of my looooong feedbacks filled with quotes and comments and meta and when I posted it -- *CHOMP* -- yes, it ended in tears. :) I've learned to copy/paste anything I don't want to lose into Wordpad.
It was up to Jensen now. His going to Jared was literal and symbolic and accomplished what needed to be done. That was so wonderful and perfect, a fabulous emotional high for the story. And it's such a *long* story that I'm amazed you keep finding these emotional high points, building up to them and then delivering.
I strongly approve of you bringing Gen into the story but not Danneel. She could have taken some of Mac's stuff but it just would have diluted Mac's character and I really enjoyed feeling like I was getting to know her.
Re: I have a feeling this is going to be longsandymgNovember 16 2010, 22:59:13 UTC
I can't wait to see what you think of chapter 13 and the top of 14. I wrote the dang thing 3 times. I don't mean just tweaks. Full out rewrites! I thought the story would just die right there and I started hating it. But now ... well, time heals all wounds. :)
I especially all the parts you pointed to. The convention was very important. Jared had taken things as far as he could. It was up to Jensen now. His going to Jared was literal and symbolic and accomplished what needed to be done. You will see that the next section immediately follows this one. No time gaps. It's one fluid section.
Re the real life girlfriends (now wives), yeah, I went AU with this. It's easier, honestly. I set it back a ways in time to not deal with it. I wanted to write a romance, not a threesome or a really sad breakup story. So Genevieve only was at the flirting, questioning stage with Jared. This is why she was okay with it all -- they weren't really involved and so her heart was not hurt. She liked him and if he was happy, then she'd be happy for him. As you might have noticed Danneel doesn't appear at all. No need. If I established Jensen as gay in my AU, then he doesn't need a girlfriend. Of course, she could have been a friend in the story; but given real life I thought that might confuse. Like I said, it was just easier to just go AU with this stuff. The Gen/Jared tease was only to let Jensen understand what he might lose. And really, it worked!
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It was up to Jensen now. His going to Jared was literal and symbolic and accomplished what needed to be done.
That was so wonderful and perfect, a fabulous emotional high for the story. And it's such a *long* story that I'm amazed you keep finding these emotional high points, building up to them and then delivering.
I strongly approve of you bringing Gen into the story but not Danneel. She could have taken some of Mac's stuff but it just would have diluted Mac's character and I really enjoyed feeling like I was getting to know her.
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