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Hit - Challenge #25 - Gojyo/? - R

Sep 08, 2008 12:15

Title: Hit
Author: TheToastAlchmst (Toasty).
Rating: R for language.
Warnings: Quite the amount of foul language.
Pairing(s): None.
Notes: Prompt #25: Fight - 35 minutes. I won't give away too much, but this scene was burning a hole in my head, thus explaining why I had to write it. ^__^;

( Left, right, dodge, duck, swing. Hit! )

challenge: fight, char:gojyo, author:thetoastalchmst, rating:r

Comments 14

cornerofmadness September 8 2008, 16:47:44 UTC

wow, just wow. I had never considered that Banri might have been the one to teach Gojyo how to fight. Interesting idea and very well done

thetoastalchmst September 8 2008, 16:51:50 UTC

Thank you very much! ^__^

Gojyo knew some moves before he met Banri, I imagined (that's why Banri wanted him on his team), but I assume he got stronger by fighting while with Banri as well. Like sparring, maybe? Only extremely violently. XD

cornerofmadness September 8 2008, 22:03:55 UTC

yes I'm sure Jien taught Gojyo about as much as a young boy could absorb and i can see Banri captilizing on it

sharpeslass September 8 2008, 23:24:03 UTC

I love your icon... I think jedishampoo could relate to its message. I've heard her screams while she proofreads at work.

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lady_ganesh September 8 2008, 19:45:50 UTC

Nice work! Logical, and a nice take on Gojyo's character.

thetoastalchmst September 8 2008, 21:03:29 UTC

Thank you! X3

andmydog September 8 2008, 20:53:44 UTC

"My stray". Oh damn. This was fantastic!

thetoastalchmst September 8 2008, 21:04:06 UTC

Oh jesss. Banri can be very possessive with his playthings, you know. And thank you very much!

sharpeslass September 8 2008, 23:22:40 UTC

Nicely done. very gritty and real. I don't get fist fights, (Good thing I'm a girl) but god knows in Gojyo's universe, fighting was a much-needed skill. I hope at some point minekura goes back and fills in the blanks between Jien leaving and Gojyo finding Hakkai. Until then I'll just enjoy fics like yours (and I still adore your username).

thetoastalchmst September 8 2008, 23:47:55 UTC

You're not the only one, my friend. I'm hoping Banri shows up again somehow (be he insane from the Minus Wave or just running by~).

Aaaaand once again, thank you! ^___^

eyesofshinigami September 9 2008, 01:44:58 UTC

That was...wow. Very nicely done. I really liked this. And it's not at all surprising that it would be Banri who taught him how to fight, and so viciously.

Very nicely done. ♥