This fic is annoying. Period.
Now, the fic I was currently aiming for was starting to burn my eyes just way too much that I had to take a break from it and look for something that won’t take the strength of a million Son Goku’s to spork. Now, I’d like to personally thank quietladybirman for pointing me to the direction of this freaking sue. This one is totally asking for it and hooray for me since it’s so far three chapters long. My eyes
won’t have to burn so much.
Title of The abomination of nature Fanfic: Wanted Brown Eyed Girl with Black Hair Can you guys see the neon WTF sign yet?
Name of The culprit Author: Ashkebulashke
How the abomination of nature fic goes: A girl with a dark past and an ability to make bad jokes finds Sanzoikkou in a restaurant by accident. What will happen to all of them? Find out by reading the rest! OcxHakkai And here, if you check her profile - her sue is a blatant self-insert. Really nice. /sarcasm
Your fic makes me want to say:
Name of Sue: Lu Ruriko
Age: 22
Classification: Wangsty Demon.
Vibrant Orbs: Brown eyes… that sparkle. (No. I’m not kidding. Check the fic yourself)
Luxuriant Tresses: Not really mentioned. But they are dark, long and wavy.
Mary Sue Powers: The ability to make absolutely a fic non-sensical. The ability to make the canon characters so fucking OOC it’s just not funny. She’s also a powerful demon of sorts - or something like that. She kills people when she gets angry. Oh, boo-fucking-hoo.
Annoying Wangsty Past and Origin: I am 22 years old. One night, some 2 years ago, I woke up to a strange noise, like a grinding of a tree and my parents, slightly wounded and singed. My family, my mom, dad, elder brother, four sisters and I evacuated but I was left behind. None of us could do anything about it. My brother, who would protect me with his life was killed while trying to save me. I thought the demons would kill me but no, they spared me, at a cost. I was knocked out. Later, I woke up and felt an evil presence surrounding me. I had a scratch on my neck, wrist and cheek, and a strange mark on my hands. I suspected they tried to kill me, but it later dawned on me that I was their tool, their instrument for killing others. Everything in the village was on fire; every body I found was dead. My family, my friends, all dead. Those who I killed were killed by a knife, which I later found beside where I lay, and the bodies all were marked on their wounds by the same symbol found on my hands. Their blood flowed in the same symbol.'
You may be asking what this has to do with me being alone here. My sisters, they weren't found dead, they weren't found at all. I guess they took me for dead. I travelled 25 miles to look for them by foot, but occassionally by hitch-hiking. I only heard recently that they had been killed long time ago by a monk, a Sanzo at that. Strange, no? Then, I changed my reasons. Ever since that day I heard my sisters died, I have been travelling to look for their murderer. Sanzo is the only monk I've ever heard of who handles a gun. He killed them. I know it.
I think he was doing the world a favor. Maybe he figured they’d be sues just like you are.
Reasons For Sporking
1. Let’s start with the crap formatting. I don’t see why anyone would read this fic without getting an eyesore. We don’t know if she wants to use paragraphs or if she wants to use script. She obviously can’t write proper and coherent paragraphs. Let’s forget dialogue while we’re at it. She tries to be clever and fails. Miserably. Coming up with nicknames like ‘Senor green headband’? Yeah. Sure. Whatever, ficcer.
2. The detail of this fic is absolutely non-existent. It’s just about as poetic as a chatlog. There’s just absolutely no point to this fic and it’s basically an excuse to get a wangsty sue to join up with the Sanzo-ikkou. There is no story. I was supposed to question it’s existence in the Pit, but then I remembered. It’s the Pit. It would make sense that something like this would be found there.
3. Okay, everyone is OOC. For one thing; Hakkai does not call Gojyo and Goku “Those two idiots”. He never has and he never will because the man has the patience of an ant. Sanzo is the one who calls them names. He won’t call them doofuses either. Neither will he be caught thinking about how cute your so said sue is. He won’t complain about putting up with Goku and Gojyo nor would he bitch about Sanzo’s smoking. Sure - he taught them a lesson ONE time (See Gunlock). But, that’s about it. Gojyo and Goku hardly appear anywhere except if they’re making complete asses of themselves.
4. Another annoying thing of OOC-ness which deserves it’s own section. Sanzo would not really introduce himself to a stranger who he just shared an argument with. He’d most likely be annoyed and shoot her for aggrevating him. Or he’d completely ignore her. He will not start a fight over who occupied a table first. Look, they may not be the most mature people on earth, but they won’t stoop THAT low. Sanzo would NOT introduce or start conversation with a stranger who pissed him off even if Hakkai is there. No. He won’t be caught dead having a laugh and cracking a smile either, no matter how speshul your sue maybe.
5. You must think that your spawn is pretty speshul just because she’s wearing guy’s clothes. Uhm, not really. And no, she can’t be more powerful than Goku to be able to punch him hard enough to make his nose bleed. You forget that he’s Son Goku. The heretic kid who gives Kougaiji such a hard time, the kid who beat Homura Taishi in a fight. I doubt that a punch from your sparklypoo speshul sue, is enough to give him a scratch.
6. Okay, so we hear her wangst and try to kill herself - And conveniently Hakkai stops her. Then we have them exchanging the stories of their past. WTF?! No, ficcer. Hakkai maybe a bit warmer than Sanzo or Gojyo, but he’s very secretive. And he will NOT reveal his whole past to anyone in a sitting. He didn’t even reveal his past to the girl who looked like his sister in episode 23 (Houfa) and her past hit a little close to home in his case - still he said nothing. So, I don’t see why he would pour his heart out to her even if she was a bit the same.
7. There is no SUTRA GUARD. Do you want to know why, ficcer? It’s because Sanzo’s are supposed to guard the sutra’s themselves. In case you missed the whole point of the existence of a ‘Sanzo’ - they are there to protect and guard the five sutras of heaven and earth. So, we really don’t need your sue to do a job that Sanzo can do himself and twice as better at that. By the way, suethor? It’s Sutra. Not Sultra. I don’t know if you were paying attention or not. Based on this fic, I don’t really think you were.
8. So Sanzo killed her sisters and I think she wants revenge. But instead, she ends up traveling with them. WTF? Her motivation makes no sense. She makes no sense period. No, I don’t think the Sanzo-ikkou would be caught dead making a fuss over your sue, either. It’s just wrong. They have their own lives to live - and they REALLY are NOT looking for another member of the ikkou. The four of them are pretty much fucked up on their own, they’ve got problems the size of China itself. They don’t need another headache, a.k.a your speshul spawn.
Yes! Yes! Do the world a favor and kill yourself, sue! Make me happy at least
It’s Sutra, suethor. S.U.T.R.A.
Thanks again to quietladybirman you saved my eyes!
won’t have to burn so much.
Title of The abomination of nature Fanfic: Wanted Brown Eyed Girl with Black Hair Can you guys see the neon WTF sign yet?
Name of The culprit Author: Ashkebulashke
How the abomination of nature fic goes: A girl with a dark past and an ability to make bad jokes finds Sanzoikkou in a restaurant by accident. What will happen to all of them? Find out by reading the rest! OcxHakkai And here, if you check her profile - her sue is a blatant self-insert. Really nice. /sarcasm
Your fic makes me want to say:
Name of Sue: Lu Ruriko
Age: 22
Classification: Wangsty Demon.
Vibrant Orbs: Brown eyes… that sparkle. (No. I’m not kidding. Check the fic yourself)
Luxuriant Tresses: Not really mentioned. But they are dark, long and wavy.
Mary Sue Powers: The ability to make absolutely a fic non-sensical. The ability to make the canon characters so fucking OOC it’s just not funny. She’s also a powerful demon of sorts - or something like that. She kills people when she gets angry. Oh, boo-fucking-hoo.
Annoying Wangsty Past and Origin: I am 22 years old. One night, some 2 years ago, I woke up to a strange noise, like a grinding of a tree and my parents, slightly wounded and singed. My family, my mom, dad, elder brother, four sisters and I evacuated but I was left behind. None of us could do anything about it. My brother, who would protect me with his life was killed while trying to save me. I thought the demons would kill me but no, they spared me, at a cost. I was knocked out. Later, I woke up and felt an evil presence surrounding me. I had a scratch on my neck, wrist and cheek, and a strange mark on my hands. I suspected they tried to kill me, but it later dawned on me that I was their tool, their instrument for killing others. Everything in the village was on fire; every body I found was dead. My family, my friends, all dead. Those who I killed were killed by a knife, which I later found beside where I lay, and the bodies all were marked on their wounds by the same symbol found on my hands. Their blood flowed in the same symbol.'
You may be asking what this has to do with me being alone here. My sisters, they weren't found dead, they weren't found at all. I guess they took me for dead. I travelled 25 miles to look for them by foot, but occassionally by hitch-hiking. I only heard recently that they had been killed long time ago by a monk, a Sanzo at that. Strange, no? Then, I changed my reasons. Ever since that day I heard my sisters died, I have been travelling to look for their murderer. Sanzo is the only monk I've ever heard of who handles a gun. He killed them. I know it.
I think he was doing the world a favor. Maybe he figured they’d be sues just like you are.
Reasons For Sporking
1. Let’s start with the crap formatting. I don’t see why anyone would read this fic without getting an eyesore. We don’t know if she wants to use paragraphs or if she wants to use script. She obviously can’t write proper and coherent paragraphs. Let’s forget dialogue while we’re at it. She tries to be clever and fails. Miserably. Coming up with nicknames like ‘Senor green headband’? Yeah. Sure. Whatever, ficcer.
2. The detail of this fic is absolutely non-existent. It’s just about as poetic as a chatlog. There’s just absolutely no point to this fic and it’s basically an excuse to get a wangsty sue to join up with the Sanzo-ikkou. There is no story. I was supposed to question it’s existence in the Pit, but then I remembered. It’s the Pit. It would make sense that something like this would be found there.
3. Okay, everyone is OOC. For one thing; Hakkai does not call Gojyo and Goku “Those two idiots”. He never has and he never will because the man has the patience of an ant. Sanzo is the one who calls them names. He won’t call them doofuses either. Neither will he be caught thinking about how cute your so said sue is. He won’t complain about putting up with Goku and Gojyo nor would he bitch about Sanzo’s smoking. Sure - he taught them a lesson ONE time (See Gunlock). But, that’s about it. Gojyo and Goku hardly appear anywhere except if they’re making complete asses of themselves.
4. Another annoying thing of OOC-ness which deserves it’s own section. Sanzo would not really introduce himself to a stranger who he just shared an argument with. He’d most likely be annoyed and shoot her for aggrevating him. Or he’d completely ignore her. He will not start a fight over who occupied a table first. Look, they may not be the most mature people on earth, but they won’t stoop THAT low. Sanzo would NOT introduce or start conversation with a stranger who pissed him off even if Hakkai is there. No. He won’t be caught dead having a laugh and cracking a smile either, no matter how speshul your sue maybe.
5. You must think that your spawn is pretty speshul just because she’s wearing guy’s clothes. Uhm, not really. And no, she can’t be more powerful than Goku to be able to punch him hard enough to make his nose bleed. You forget that he’s Son Goku. The heretic kid who gives Kougaiji such a hard time, the kid who beat Homura Taishi in a fight. I doubt that a punch from your sparklypoo speshul sue, is enough to give him a scratch.
6. Okay, so we hear her wangst and try to kill herself - And conveniently Hakkai stops her. Then we have them exchanging the stories of their past. WTF?! No, ficcer. Hakkai maybe a bit warmer than Sanzo or Gojyo, but he’s very secretive. And he will NOT reveal his whole past to anyone in a sitting. He didn’t even reveal his past to the girl who looked like his sister in episode 23 (Houfa) and her past hit a little close to home in his case - still he said nothing. So, I don’t see why he would pour his heart out to her even if she was a bit the same.
7. There is no SUTRA GUARD. Do you want to know why, ficcer? It’s because Sanzo’s are supposed to guard the sutra’s themselves. In case you missed the whole point of the existence of a ‘Sanzo’ - they are there to protect and guard the five sutras of heaven and earth. So, we really don’t need your sue to do a job that Sanzo can do himself and twice as better at that. By the way, suethor? It’s Sutra. Not Sultra. I don’t know if you were paying attention or not. Based on this fic, I don’t really think you were.
8. So Sanzo killed her sisters and I think she wants revenge. But instead, she ends up traveling with them. WTF? Her motivation makes no sense. She makes no sense period. No, I don’t think the Sanzo-ikkou would be caught dead making a fuss over your sue, either. It’s just wrong. They have their own lives to live - and they REALLY are NOT looking for another member of the ikkou. The four of them are pretty much fucked up on their own, they’ve got problems the size of China itself. They don’t need another headache, a.k.a your speshul spawn.
Yes! Yes! Do the world a favor and kill yourself, sue! Make me happy at least
It’s Sutra, suethor. S.U.T.R.A.
Thanks again to quietladybirman you saved my eyes!