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Carrot Cake 5, Coffee 4: Cradle

Aug 21, 2010 23:53

Title: Cradle
Main Story: In The Heart
Flavors, Toppings, Extras: Carrot cake 5 (whisper), coffee 4 (fan), butterscotch, whipped cream, rainbow sprinkles.
Word Count: 600
Rating: PG
Summary: Five babies Gary Hawkins held, and the one he never did.

( Cradle )

[topping] sprinkles, [challenge] carrot cake, [topping] whipped cream, [extra] pocky chain, [topping] butterscotch, [inactive-author] bookblather, [challenge] coffee

Comments 9

sarcasticsra August 22 2010, 04:32:16 UTC

Aw, I like Gary! He's sweet. And poor Lynne, with the miscarriage. Poor Gary, too, actually. Clara is a definite yay, though, since she's amazing. Nice job.

bookblather August 23 2010, 04:36:18 UTC

It was a tough time, definitely, but more emotionally hard than physically, fortunately. Clara was a very lucky accident. :D Thanks for reading!

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bookblather August 23 2010, 04:36:47 UTC

Thank you! It's a very bittersweet moment for him, I think. Most of these are, actually. Thanks for reading!

ssundaysunday August 22 2010, 18:36:08 UTC

I love how much of each character comes through in this - even when they're babies. I'm glad they got Clara in the end, and the last line is so powerful.

bookblather August 23 2010, 04:37:09 UTC

Gary and Gwen showed their personalities early, it's true. Thanks for reading!

smoothiegarten August 23 2010, 21:15:47 UTC

So the babies in the first pocky are Gary and Gwen, then? I was a little confused but it made more sense after I reread the chain.

Most of this is absolute hilarity. Clara just keeps getting awesomer. Nursing is awkward, Ethan will just have to deal with it. I also love Gary and Gwen's relationship. I also like the contrast between the fun sections and the more reserved, somber ones. It seems like Clara was an extra special gift for her parents, which was so nice to see after Lynne's miscarriage. Lovely :D

bookblather August 24 2010, 05:20:26 UTC

Yes, they are. Sorry about that, probably should've used names. And yeah, Ethan... deals awkwardly with the fact that his sister has working reproductive organs. *pets him*

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it a bunch. Gary's a new character for me, at least being in his head, so I'm glad that it worked well all around, even with the mood whiplash. Thanks for reading!

kay_brooke August 26 2010, 14:13:40 UTC

I really like the progression through Gary's life. It's sweet (and a little sad as he's remembering at the end).

bookblather September 6 2010, 06:32:33 UTC

Thank you very much!