Fic: Words Like Smoke for sugaredarsenic

[l_stone]

Title: Words Like Smoke
Author: L. Stone
Written for: sugaredarsenic 
Rating: PG-13 for war themes
Prompt: I officially wrote for prompt #1, AU of any sort, although the story is also for prompt #2, the making of the Marauders’ Map, and I tried to get a bit of #3, MWPP inventing/carrying out their own festive traditions.
Summary: It’s almost Christmas and Sirius is

Comments

[leafyaki]

Wow. I read through this a few times, and I still don't think I've got it all yet. Just, wow. Lots of bits I liked, but this one in particular, Sirius saying "it's okay" at the beginning, and ending, sort of full circle, with Remus too saying "it's okay". That just particularly struck me.

Oh, can't forget "Moony face" too, uttered by Harry and then Sirius. And this again, tugged at my heartstrings: Remus who Sirius will let find him. X)

Wow, this whole piece is just so complex and rich and amazingly well written, I can imagine I will discover new things everytime I read it (:

[l_stone]

Thank you! I was so flattered to hear that this fic had led to multiple re-readings and it would be more awesome still if you ever feel like looking at it again. I'm glad you liked the "Moony face" part; that was one of the original ideas from which I built the rest of the story.

Thank you again!

[fullmoon_dreams]

Well, I for one am very glad you went over the word count with this. I think you could do an entire series about this particular AU, it is so rich with possibilities.

Heartbreakingly sad at times, but beautifully written.

My heart clenched when the wand snapped. That image is going to be staying with me for a very long time I am sure.

[fullmoon_dreams]

Forgot to mention, the link to the journal entry appears to be locked. *hint hint*

[l_stone]

Thank you! It would certainly be interesting to work more in this universe, and I've been thinking up some still half-formed ideas. I'm glad the high word count wasn't a problem, and that you enjoyed the story.

Oh, and I've unlocked my notes, though they're really just some short thoughts I wrote up when I was posting the story; hope they're actually interesting.

[fullmoon_dreams]

I would be the last person to complain about going over the word count. I have done two fics for this fest and both of them went over, too.

Thanks for unlocking the notes. I'll go have a look through them right away.

[secretsolitaire]

Wow. What a rich, beautifully written piece. As someone else said, I could definitely read this a few times and see something new each time. (If I didn't have to go to work. *g*) I too would love to read your thoughts on this particular AU if you care to make them public. :-)

[l_stone]

Thank you! I hope you do have a few moments to reread it, but it's awfully flattering that you'd even like to. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

I've unlocked my notes, as well, if you're still interested in looking at them. Sorry about that; they were only locked because I felt weird about having them up before the story itself was available.

[laroseminuit]

This makes me so glad I decided to check for today's small gifts before getting cracking on my paper.
I love that the whole tone of the piece reflects the uncertainty and broken edges of the character's own emotions.
I love Moony as a cartologist.

[l_stone]

Thank you! I understand the paper thing; I should have been working on one when I was writing this; and I hope yours went well. I hope Moony (and his maps) were a welcome distraction...

My dear Mrs. Dalloway

[brighty18]

Oh, my... there really are no words here... just... oh!

This may just be one of the most sophisticated and well-written r/s pieces I've ever read. And, yes, my dear, so very Virginia Wolf! The half-realized moments of romance and self-awareness are fantastically rendered. And Remus as a cartographer? How appropriate is that?

I love the idea of Magic as being antiquated - or at least of moving away from it and toward Muggle society. I've thought about that before. Western Civ encroaches upon so many other cultures, so why not the Wizarding one? And, yet, what happens when one abandons one's own culture? IS anyone happy? Did anything good come from James and Sirius joining the war? That really resonated for me; not just the hopelessness of the war itself, but the affect on Wizarding culture.

And I loved the AU parallel of a fragile, war-broken (PTSD?) Sirius and low lovingly (and longingly) Remus handles it. Even Remus' interaction with James felt very real and very heart-breaking.

Fantastic!

Re: My dear Mrs. Dalloway

[l_stone]

Thank you very much