Primevalathon for Chibi-Kaz: "Lines" part 2/2

[rodlox]

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Title: Lines.
part One, Two.

Author: Keenir.

Recipient: Chibi-Kaz

Prompt(s): Beginning of Series 3: Sarah is the new girl in town, and she notices Connor's better qualities right away.

Becker appreciates Sarah's more disciplined approach to science... and other things.

note: the early drafts were more Sarah-centric…Connor took over in the

Comments

[sar_kaz_m]

I've read both parts twice. I have no idea what's going on.

But thanks anyway.

[rodlox]

apologies. I'll do it again. this is for you, after all, and I want to get it right.

you're welcome.
i forgot to put a link to this in the info.

again, sorry.

[sar_kaz_m]

Nah, don't worry about it. I don't keep up with the Denial multiverses (point of fact, if the fandom OCs outnumber the canon OCs in the character list, I skip the story).

If it works in your 'verse, then leave it be.

[rodlox]

I do worry about it, even before you posted. (I think most of the OCs are brief appearances).

i think it works, but I don't know how coherent it is.

and you deserve a coherent fic.

[sar_kaz_m]

Seriously, you really don't have to rewrite, but please allow me to provide some more coherent feedback