creative writing

[rodion_kjd]

I have to write a dramatic monologue (its a kind of poem), its due wednsday. Heres my first attempt / draft. Brutal honesty apreciated.
Thanks friends.

<3 Ken

I would have it be a different way,
If all I dreamed came true;
Youd have never loved another,
Or had love destroy a part of you.

Youd be starry-eyed; naive
As fresh as morning dew;
Steady as a Lakeland ship,
A course in life locked true.

But that can never be, alas,
For cynicism reigns;
And jaded introspection shows,
Only a physical heart remains.

But I cannot be thwarted merely,
But a heart sealed shut by rage;
My Quixotic quest continues,
Through enigmatic ways.

And I will triumph one day,
Let the truth be heard today;
Because as every poet knows at heart,
Love will find a way.