The Dark Night

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Prompt: #1: Taub's past suicide attempt.
Words: 3,507
Rating: R; see above and below.
Warning: Graphic desription of suicide attempt by overdose.  
Spoilers: For Season 5 episodes: "Painless" and "Simple Explenation" 
Summary: A week after Kutner's unexpected suicide, Taub meets a clinic teenager in the clinic who oddly reminds him of himself.
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[thelonemascot]

I know it's totally late on this, but I didn't even see this until a short while ago...then I saw that last episode of House and then decided Taub was a jerk.

This is good, though I do have have some fixes and questions:

“She---feinted…” = Should be fainted.

his wives was here, right by his side, in bed with him = his wife was there, singular. Never know though, he might have more squirreled away somewhere, lol.

Taub was going on sixty (he was fifty-six now)= Really? That would make him older than House. The actor is only 45...

He’d never had any kids. Always wanted them, but never had= Actually, I thought he didn't want kids. I remember he and his wife talking about it, maybe it was her, I can't remember their conversation completely.

There's a few bits of unnecessary information and a few capitalization/punctuation errors. The story felt a little rushed at certain parts and the ending was kinda ambiguous.

I did read your post about what happening in your life and I hope my comments don't upset you at all. As I said before, I'm happy to beta your work, all you have to do email me your story before you post it.