FIC: The Best Damn Thing (or not), Jackal/Marui, PG

[reposte]

Title: The Best Damn Thing (or not)
Author: Ociwen
Rating: PG
Wordcount: 7600
Disclaimer: Konomi owns all.
Summary: Marui doesn't like Jackal's girlfriend.
Author's Notes: Written for Marui's birthday-Happy Birthday, Marui!

Comments

[alice_and_lain]

I completely sympathized with Marui through this entire piece. And I'm a little annoyed at Jackal for not realizing why Marui was so out-of-sorts. Marui wasn't exactly hiding the fact that he hated Olivia and Jackal's smart enough to put two and two together. But I digress.

"He and Jackal-kun, are having issues right now-a girl causing strife," Yagyuu says.

*laughs and laughs* Yanagi and Yagyuu talking in haiku! That is absolutely priceless and inspired.

The whole pop music element really made me grin in this story. I love that song "Girlfriend" and I giggled when Marui and Jackal sing lines to each other. And Marui's conversation with the pop princesses was great.

His laughter makes him stumble over, but when Jackal stumbles into him, it's like the best damn thing.

My heart really warmed at that line. Because you did an excellent great job at evoking Marui's loneliness/frustration when he thinks he's losing his best friend (and oh, how I know how that feels) and so when things turn out all right, it's very satisfying.

Great story, reposoir. So happy to see Marui and Jackal get some attention.

[reposoir]

Thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed this fic, even though there was some miscommunication with Jackal that annoyed you.

[alice_and_lain]

Oh, the annoyance was a product of over-identifying with Marui and in no way inhibited me from enjoying the story. And the miscommunication was necessary to the story to make it work and now I'm just gonna be quiet because I'm spouting things you already know!