Whispered Screams - Chapter 33

[redrosesblack]

At long long last, another chapter... and with an Extra, too, no less! Yes, okay, it's kinda short, but I hope you get a kick out of it, anyway. I'm still very inexperienced with writing lemon parts, but I will get some more practice with the rest of the story. Consider that a spoiler, if you want. I suppose it was always kind of obvious

Comments

[distorted_r]

Thank you so much for updating! I throughly enjoyed this chapter as well as the one that came so quickly before it.

Just wanted to say, I like how it is progressing. I was afraid Laguna might end up taking center stage over Squall and Seifer's relationship and do all the heroics of getting Squall out his situation. (Not that I would have complained if that had been the case, mind you! XD But I'll still admit I prefer how you have dedicated more time to just the two of them.)

I don't think the lemons are coming too soon, actually. You are one of the few fanfiction writers that I can name that have managed to handle such delicate topics (rape, child abuse, etc) with maturity and reality. Not all sexually abused teens avoid sexual contact with others, some seek it, some don't, and some are just in the middle. In all, different people react to such traumas differently based on individual circumstances and personality. You've managed to characterize Squall very well and empathetically IMO. All this so called "slow pacing" I see some reviewers bitching about has been you having Squall emotionally adjusting and trusting Seifer enough to the point of this being natural. Even so, you still show that Squall still has some deep emotional problems that are not just going to be simply fixed by Seifer's penis. I don't know exactly where you are going with it, but I get the feeling you are having Squall finally recognize the difference and the closer be gets to Seifer physically the chances of Seifer catching on and Squall taking a stand against his abuser increase a whole lot, just by Squall simply understanding himself and Kato's fucked up nature.

Heck, I haven't seen many writers tackle the mind of a rapist and actually bother to characterize him/her any further then "oh, he/she's just evil and fucked up." He's a morbidly interesting character, and I look forward to what he has to say if/when he is confronted. I bet it shall be quite interesting.

All and all, wonderful job! I have only praise and the deepest gratitude to you for keeping this fanfiction going. I don't care how long you need. The way I see it; take your time. I hope you have as much fun writing it as we do reading it.

Oh, and hello, btw. XD I've been mostly a lurker on your journal and deviantart page, but I've always kept up with it. I hope things off the Internet are going fine for you and belated Happy New Year to you!

[redrosesblack]

"Squall still has some deep emotional problems that are not just going to be simply fixed by Seifer's penis" I loved that line, it actually made me laugh out loud :) I'm really happy to hear that you like the way things have been progressing at a slower pacer rather than a rushed one. I know I can't please everyone, but it's always so nice to hear when someone agrees that problems of Squall's magnitude cannot be fixed in a matter of a few weeks.

Thank you kindly for that massive and sweet comment, I appreciate it lots and lots :)