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JCKane
Next on you're comment about Kaylie not telling us the story. you see that's where you're wrong. When I write a story (and I've read other books that have done the same) they treat the character as the narrator. This is mainly when it's done it first person view. So in this case, Kaylie is the narrator in this story. She's telling us her story not a narrator telling you her story( even though that's technically the case). I only do it because it's in first person view. Now if it was in third, it'd be a different story.
Quote from the story:
"And the crowd goes wild, " A young girl said in her room. She was playing on the floor with her Pokemon dolls and she was play battling.
"I'll send mine out first, " Kaylie said as she picked up a ball colored to look like a Pokeball. She threw it two the floor, "I choose you, Clefairy." Kaylie quickly placed her Clefairy doll where her ball had landed.
Source.
It is not in first person.
It is being narrated by a narrator.
The author contradicts himself.
He doesn't have a clue.
Splendid.
Also:
With Spell check and grammar. As I said I do those things. i just haven't yet.
...
I suppose admitting to being lazy is better than pretending you did your best and that the errors are due to dangerous magic mice ruining your keyboard.
Next on you're comment about Kaylie not telling us the story. you see that's where you're wrong. When I write a story (and I've read other books that have done the same) they treat the character as the narrator. This is mainly when it's done it first person view. So in this case, Kaylie is the narrator in this story. She's telling us her story not a narrator telling you her story( even though that's technically the case). I only do it because it's in first person view. Now if it was in third, it'd be a different story.
Quote from the story:
"And the crowd goes wild, " A young girl said in her room. She was playing on the floor with her Pokemon dolls and she was play battling.
"I'll send mine out first, " Kaylie said as she picked up a ball colored to look like a Pokeball. She threw it two the floor, "I choose you, Clefairy." Kaylie quickly placed her Clefairy doll where her ball had landed.
Source.
It is not in first person.
It is being narrated by a narrator.
The author contradicts himself.
He doesn't have a clue.
Splendid.
Also:
With Spell check and grammar. As I said I do those things. i just haven't yet.
...
I suppose admitting to being lazy is better than pretending you did your best and that the errors are due to dangerous magic mice ruining your keyboard.