Comments | prisonbreak100: T-Bag/Maytag, fear

kahla_w in prisonbreak100

T-Bag/Maytag, fear

Jan 14, 2006 00:09

Title: A Check Up
Character/Pairing: T-Bag/Maytag
Prompt: #15, "fear"
Rating: PG for a tiny bit of language
Summary: In which hair is groomed, shirts are removed, and Maytag has an embarrassing fear. But maybe not entirely the one he claims.
Author's Notes: Bit more Maytag/Sara interaction, relatively early. I like charting his progression ( Read more... )

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A check up derange_people January 14 2006, 09:53:41 UTC

I really liked this one. All of you stories about T-bag and Maytag are so good. I check the site at least 3 times per day hoping you have wrote something more.
You really good at writing, I can just hope that you sometime will write a bit longer story. All you stories are so short, and that's too bad.

Anyway, I can't wait for your next one.

Re: A check up kahla_w January 14 2006, 09:57:16 UTC

I can just hope that you sometime will write a bit longer story. All you stories are so short, and that's too bad.

It's funny because my problem used to be that my stories were way way too long. And I'd either lose interest somewhere towards the end, or other people would lose interest (it is, after all, a huge commitment on the reader's part to start in on a massive fanfic). That, combined with the fact there will be 100 of them, has led them to be shorter little scenes based on the prompt rather than a long story.

BUT, I do adore writing longer, more developed stories, and have a bit of a plan for one. Just want to get it finished, or nearly finished, before posting any ('cause I hate waiting a long time for other people to update their multi-part stories and won't make anyone else do that).

Thank you. :) I'm glad people like my stories 'cause I'm always so nervous when I hit that "update journal" button.

Re: A check up derange_people January 14 2006, 11:20:52 UTC

I understand that now, when you're going to write 100 it's the easiest way to write short stories. It's just that I always get the feeling *no! Where's the rest? I want to know more! Ahhh!* You know, that kind of feeling.
But it would be really nice to sometime read a longer story of yours. You always manage to write the characters so real. (couldn't come up with a better way to explain it, after all, english is not my native language).

'cause I hate waiting a long time for other people to update their multi-part stories and won't make anyone else do that).

I know exactly what you mean. I hate that too...

Re: A check up kahla_w January 14 2006, 11:24:58 UTC

Well, I promise I shall write a longer one. I like plot development and working out all the little details, so it'll be fun. I admit, I always have to fight off the urge at the end of a story to keep going with "and then this would happen, and then this, and then he'd do this..." Which is generally how I used to get myself into massively complex stories that started out with just an idea for one scene. -_-

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angelrose493 January 14 2006, 14:54:56 UTC

Yay! I was wondering where all the Maytag/T-Bag fics have gone!

T-Bag hummed low in his chest, “Can’t blame a guy for putting his name on his property.”

Hehe, that is so T-Bag! I loved all his comments.

skekzok January 14 2006, 18:51:52 UTC

t-bag/maytag AND sara! :D omg, that made me happy. XD maytag's defensiveness = *squee!*

He was going to destroy the kid, and she was going to have to put him back together without question.

*flails* great line.

youaremysushine January 14 2006, 21:57:11 UTC

First off, you have made my day for finally posting again. <-- my fangirl-ness must be getting pretty annoying now... but I can't help it :D

“What’s wrong with you now?” T-Bag watched Maytag fidget at the mirror, adjusting and readjusting his hair. He tugged at his sleeves and smoothed the blue shirt down.

Haha. Self-concious pretty little Maytag :)

“You’re losing weight,” Sara observed as she jotted down some notes. Maytag shifted nervously on the table.

“Am I?”

“Not uncommon. You’ll get used to the food.”

LOL! Nice one. Now I really wanna go to jail LOL. I can lose weight and be T-Bags cellie.

Anyways, once again you've captured all of the characters perfectly. Good job :)

rhymeswithghoti January 14 2006, 22:15:54 UTC

Yay for having your fics back! I'll try not to fangirl too much.

I like your Sara. She's believable in her desire to help, but also believably squicked out, and I like the combination. And I agree with you, I really like seeing how Maytag changes through his interactions with other people.

And lol for everything T-bag says. He's so mean.

kahla_w January 14 2006, 22:40:06 UTC

For as much as I kinda roll my eyes at Sara's parts in the show, writing her and giving her something to worry about besides Michael is rather fun. And in show Maytag was pretty damn creepy with that "yeah, I'm his bitch" grin. :D

rhymeswithghoti January 14 2006, 23:40:55 UTC

I'm secretly a devout Michael/Sara shipper, but yes, it is nice for her to have something to do besides stalk him. All the good parts of her character are so wasted on having scenes with only Michael. She would be a really good character to further some of the religion/morality issues through, if the writers weren't so interested in all the flirting. I don't read a lot of fics with Sara in them because of that, so I love you for writing her.

And the look on Maytag's face in your icon always cracks me up. Him and T-bag are such a cute creepy couple.

kahla_w January 14 2006, 23:44:31 UTC

She would be a really good character to further some of the religion/morality issues through, if the writers weren't so interested in all the flirting.

Exactly. I had very little wrong with Sara for about the first half, right up to his saving her 'cause I get that. But main characters that rely entirely on another for them to exist are so...blah.

If we can see T-Bag/Westmoreland interaction and Sara trying to dig up information about Michael, surely we could see her interact with someone else. :(

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