3538: The Perfect two - Queenie Askoy
It's tme for Tropes Sue Week either. I'm looking for help finding entries for said week.
Today we have an Einstein Sue, or sort of. Here is a quote from the TV Tropes page.
“Never mind how grossly unqualified he is, how totally unconnected he is to the situation, he knows exactly what's going on, if only he could get them to believe him. It seems in a big world full of know nothing experts, he is The One Guy With A Brain. In a What Could Possibly Go Wrong? situation, he's the only one who sees it besides the audience. ”
Here though is a quote from Wikipedia.
“Further variant names have been suggested based on the specific personality of a Mary Sue, such as Einstein Sue (a highly intelligent character), Jerk Sue (a short-tempered character who lashes out), or Sympathetic Sue (an angsty character who wants the reader's sympathy).”
The best definition comes from the link of the day. Today's link of the day is The many different types of Mary Sue
“Like the way Mary Sue is perfect at her job, Einstein Sue is the most intelligent character… ever. She (or he) will be the one that always comes up with the best solution to a problem, despite a team of equally qualified scientists thinking about the same problem.”
Should I then go with a Parasite Sue, or a super smart Sue? I'd like to go for both, but they're not easy to find. I almost jumped on Hazel Lily Potter when I first found the story a couple of days ago, and I almost jumped on it again.I don't want to go with a story where Harry's made super smart because he's supposed to technically be the main problem solver in the series anyways. Hermione's supposed to be the smartest. I then read the summary for today's Sue and decided to go with that one.
Turns out I'm rather glad I did.
TITLE: The Perfect two
PERPETRATOR: WorksOfVividImaination
SUE-O-METER: Toxic
COVER/BANNER ART: The cover is Cedric from the movies and some blond girl who looks like Marilyn Monroe.
SUMMARY:”Cedric Diggory was the Hogwarts' golden boy-he was tall, handsome, kind and intelligent. Queenie Askoy was very similar. She was both internally and externally beautiful, smart and a social butterfly … and together they were perfect, the perfect two. *Contains Sexual Scenes*”
FULL NAME: Queenie Askoy
SPECIES: She's the girl everybody wants to be.
HAIR:
EYES:
MARKINGS: “This spot was solely occupants by a girl, who at first glance appeared to be 5' 5" toddler. Like an infant her eye sockets were too deeply set in her skull, causing her eyes pop out slightly. Normally in children these things pass with age but this girl was eleven and it had still not passed, so probably never would. She had the body of toddler too, she was slightly chubby in the limbs and stomach area much like a 2 year old. She had a beach complexion. Her wavy hair as white as the Mediterranean sands, Eyes that replicated the azure waters of the Seychelles and a lovely golden tan, that only natural sun can achieve.” “After a long night Queenie was finally in her dorm, her bedroom for the next 7 years that she shared with Rita Rocheleau, a curvy Blonde with blue eyes who was the epitome of the 'dum blonde', Harriet Sims, a 5 foot fireball, with the temper of a short fuse with ginger hair and green eyes, Leah Thorton a shy girl with shoulder length mousy brown hair and grey eyes and Jenny Hix a sporty girl who was driven by success. Jenny had short black hair in a pixie cut and had hazel eyes.” Here's the first paragraph of chapter five. “Queenie shuffled through the train must like last year but now she was 13 (Queenie was the eldest in her year being born on September 2nd. She had a huge garden party to celebrate the event, inviting both her Turkish and Hogwarts friends and obviously Cedric and his family). Being older meant being was taller and Queenie was now 5' 8" and that meant her puppy fat was starting to stretched out into non-existence as her body grew. She'd also developed a B chest over the 2 month break and knew puberty (and all its spots) would hit her soon. Queenie had also chopped off her hair so it now fell just under her newly bigger chest.”
POSSESSIONS: She has a younger brother named Crete. There are also six year old girl twins, and everybody has the same complexion. Eventually we find out their names are Bubble and Squeek, and they act like two year olds. “ They were dressed as if they were leading an Arctic expedition. Queenie herself in: black leggings, white long sleeve top, purple zip up hoodie under a light denim jacket. Red Doc Martin boots and a red snood style scarf.” “They'd been at Hogwarts for just over a month now and Queenie was really seeing her pets' true nature. Her white speckled tawny owl, Utah had already flown to and from Turkey 18 times where as her blue Russian kitten, Pablo had barely left her dorm.”
CONNECTION TO CANON: We start off with eleven year old Queenie going to school for the first time. Cedric is a year above them, and they meet on the train. We then get this bit at the end of the chapter. “Going to bed that night Queenie dwelled in Ivy's words. Did the whole school love Cedric? Queenie was ashamed to admit it but she'd developed a bit of a crush in the short time she'd know him and wanted to know her chances of actually been noticed.” (She's eleven to twelve years old for crying out loud. I'm not saying she's not going to have a crush, but she's already self-concious about crushing on a guy.) “Queenie skipped to charms with Rita, her muggle born dorm friend singing 'Hakuna Matata' from the muggle film the lion king.” “In that month her and Cedric had become firm friends, him finding her optimism and laid back attitude refreshing as his parents were constantly breathing down his neck about grades and Quidditch. With Queenie, or 'little one' as he'd taken to calling her, he felt like he could let go and it wasn't a secret in the Hufflepuff boys dorm that Cedric had a crush on the bubbly Blonde but being in Hufflepuff where a key trait is loyalty, Cedric really didn't have to worry about one of them running off to tell her.” By the second chapter they're already going on a date because Cedric senses how perfect she must be for him. (I officially can't read anymore. One of the reviews for chapter thirty indicates she may be pregnaunt with Cedrics baby. Soe I decided to skip to chapter thirty.) Here is the first paragraph. “When Cedric and Queenie returned to Hogwarts, it was the start of the summer term which for Queenie meant the start of O.W.L's. Granted she was sitting two less this year, after sitting Ancient Runes and History of Magic last year but it was still a daunting prospect. All her school life so far had led up to now and she either failed or she passed. Obviously the school had been building them up for the exams for quite some time. Since mid way through fourth year, Queenie had been sitting mock papers and previous exams but now it was the last push, the final sprint. However Queenie was worried how she's fit revision into her already hectic day. Not only was there lessons and the Tri-Wizard preparations but also the amount of people attending the clubs that Marie, Gemma, Rohm, Jeremy, Leah, Joshua, and of course Rita, ran had doubled in numbers since the delegations from the other schools arrived. It seemed muggle life skills, dance and music appealed to the Beauxbaton girls most, large numbers turning up. Whereas the Durmstrang boys preferred the computing skills element- mainly to play games that some of the muggle borns and half bloods had got them hooked on. However muggle sport was a club they all liked and meant every Friday, in between last lesson and dinner, the Great hall was alive with activity as a great range of muggle sports were played.” I then decided to read the next chapters after all only to find myself annoyed at how PERFECT Queenie is made out to be. She instantly makes friends with Hermione, and is friends to all. By chapter eight she's butting in on Harry, Ron and Hermione's activities, and I finally had enough with the fake “Queen Bee”. It's apparently one of her nicknames.
ORIGIN: “Cedric was on his way to Defense Against the Dark Arts when he saw Queenie and another girl, who he believed to be called Rita skipping down the corridor singing about mottos, grubs and Huna kataka? Cedric shook his head he'd never understand that girl but that was part of her appeal. […] Said appeal is why Cedric had chose to go to DADA via Charms-Cedric had decided to ask her on a date purely to see if she were as perfect a romantic partner as she was friend. Cedric had no doubt she was but would rather be safe than sorry.” (He's what - twelve to thirteen?)
SPECIAL ABILITIES: “Parents and children pushing and shoving, toing and throwing as they tried to navigate the magically concealed platform at Kings Cross. In the middle of it all there was a spot of serenity. A small circle of calm and tranquillity, the peace in the eye of the storm.” Don't forget the fact the Suethor plays up the fact her Sue is the perfect match for Cedric. Cho is forgotten about in favor of the writers perfect self insert. Chapter six we find out she's in dance club, and sadly from chapter five the writer thinks Muggle studies is a home ec class which includes sewing.
NOTES: The way the writer tries to describe the character as an over grown toddler bothers me. The first thing popping into my head was to ask what genetic abnormality this girl had, but then I realized the Suethor didn't mean for this to be a negative trait, but something which makes her character look gorgeous and exotic. Why point out how beautiful the character is in the summary? The second thing popping into my head was how inaccurate the actual description is anatomically.
Then I got to the part where the writer claims Queenie's family is dressed for an Artic expedition only for the description of the clothes not to match at all.
I'm also going to add here that Queenie's personality is annoying.
SAMPLE:
Platform Nine and three quarters, was bustling. Parents and children pushing and shoving, toing and throwing as they tried to navigate the magically concealed platform at Kings Cross. In the middle of it all there was a spot of serenity. A small circle of calm and tranquillity, the peace in the eye of the storm.
This spot was solely occupants by a girl, who at first glance appeared to be 5' 5" toddler. Like an infant her eye sockets were too deeply set in her skull, causing her eyes pop out slightly. Normally in children these things pass with age but this girl was eleven and it had still not passed, so probably never would. She had the body of toddler too, she was slightly chubby in the limbs and stomach area much like a 2 year old. She had a beach complexion. Her wavy hair as white as the Mediterranean sands, Eyes that replicated the azure waters of the Seychelles and a lovely golden tan, that only natural sun can achieve.
"Q … Q … Queenie!" The young of a young boy called, knocking the girl, Queenie out of her trance. She whipped around to face him, her waist length, fine hair catching the wind and surfing it as she did.
The boy had much the same features as her. White blonde hair, deep set azure eyes and tanned-they were obviously related.
"Crete" the girl sighed, her voice sweet and smooth.
"Mum says to come now"
"Ok" She replied taking the younger boy-but probably only by a year-hand and started off through the ground.
The two parted through the hectic human traffic until they reached four others, a young man and woman both in their 30's and too young girls, identical twins, who were about 6. All of them donned the same complexion as Queenie and Crete. The family was clearly not from England, their wardrobe gave that away. They were dressed as if they were leading an Arctic expedition. Queenie herself in: black leggings, white long sleeve top, purple zip up hoodie under a light denim jacket. Red Doc Martin boots and a red snood style scarf.
"Now dear you promise to owl us?" The older woman-Jasmine, enquired while embracing her tightly.
"Of course, mum. I'm more concerned about doing you proud!" Queenie explained
"Darling I'll always be proud of you, as will your father even if he doesn't fully get all the magical stuff" Jasmine reassured, leaving her eldest to let out a shaky laugh as the drew apart.
"Dad?" Queenie whispered, eyes glassy, her tears resting precariously on her thick, long, black lashes. He pulled her into a tight hug, swaying her back and forth.
"Don't forget your old muggle dad now will you now?" He whispered into her hair. She just shook her head from its position buried into his chest.
2 sets of little arms through themselves around her waist and she parted with her beloved father to bid farewell to her youngest siblings, Bubble and Squeak.
Crouching down to their level, she embraced them both properly-all 3 of them crying just like her mother, father and brother who were watching on.
"Don't leave!" Bubble gurgled through her tears, the mole under her left eye differentiating her from her sister when she pulled away.
"No don't!" Squeak agreed
"Stay" Bubble pleaded
"Stay" Squeak reinforced
"STAY!" They both chorused, crying even more.
A sharp whistle cut through the platform and the doors of the Scarlett engine opened. Queenie pulled herself up, and hugged her brother, Crete, quickly whispering in his ear:
"I'm leaving you in charge, you best maintain my domain of craziness" he just smiled at her, nodding.
Today we have an Einstein Sue, or sort of. Here is a quote from the TV Tropes page.
“Never mind how grossly unqualified he is, how totally unconnected he is to the situation, he knows exactly what's going on, if only he could get them to believe him. It seems in a big world full of know nothing experts, he is The One Guy With A Brain. In a What Could Possibly Go Wrong? situation, he's the only one who sees it besides the audience. ”
Here though is a quote from Wikipedia.
“Further variant names have been suggested based on the specific personality of a Mary Sue, such as Einstein Sue (a highly intelligent character), Jerk Sue (a short-tempered character who lashes out), or Sympathetic Sue (an angsty character who wants the reader's sympathy).”
The best definition comes from the link of the day. Today's link of the day is The many different types of Mary Sue
“Like the way Mary Sue is perfect at her job, Einstein Sue is the most intelligent character… ever. She (or he) will be the one that always comes up with the best solution to a problem, despite a team of equally qualified scientists thinking about the same problem.”
Should I then go with a Parasite Sue, or a super smart Sue? I'd like to go for both, but they're not easy to find. I almost jumped on Hazel Lily Potter when I first found the story a couple of days ago, and I almost jumped on it again.I don't want to go with a story where Harry's made super smart because he's supposed to technically be the main problem solver in the series anyways. Hermione's supposed to be the smartest. I then read the summary for today's Sue and decided to go with that one.
Turns out I'm rather glad I did.
TITLE: The Perfect two
PERPETRATOR: WorksOfVividImaination
SUE-O-METER: Toxic
COVER/BANNER ART: The cover is Cedric from the movies and some blond girl who looks like Marilyn Monroe.
SUMMARY:”Cedric Diggory was the Hogwarts' golden boy-he was tall, handsome, kind and intelligent. Queenie Askoy was very similar. She was both internally and externally beautiful, smart and a social butterfly … and together they were perfect, the perfect two. *Contains Sexual Scenes*”
FULL NAME: Queenie Askoy
SPECIES: She's the girl everybody wants to be.
HAIR:
EYES:
MARKINGS: “This spot was solely occupants by a girl, who at first glance appeared to be 5' 5" toddler. Like an infant her eye sockets were too deeply set in her skull, causing her eyes pop out slightly. Normally in children these things pass with age but this girl was eleven and it had still not passed, so probably never would. She had the body of toddler too, she was slightly chubby in the limbs and stomach area much like a 2 year old. She had a beach complexion. Her wavy hair as white as the Mediterranean sands, Eyes that replicated the azure waters of the Seychelles and a lovely golden tan, that only natural sun can achieve.” “After a long night Queenie was finally in her dorm, her bedroom for the next 7 years that she shared with Rita Rocheleau, a curvy Blonde with blue eyes who was the epitome of the 'dum blonde', Harriet Sims, a 5 foot fireball, with the temper of a short fuse with ginger hair and green eyes, Leah Thorton a shy girl with shoulder length mousy brown hair and grey eyes and Jenny Hix a sporty girl who was driven by success. Jenny had short black hair in a pixie cut and had hazel eyes.” Here's the first paragraph of chapter five. “Queenie shuffled through the train must like last year but now she was 13 (Queenie was the eldest in her year being born on September 2nd. She had a huge garden party to celebrate the event, inviting both her Turkish and Hogwarts friends and obviously Cedric and his family). Being older meant being was taller and Queenie was now 5' 8" and that meant her puppy fat was starting to stretched out into non-existence as her body grew. She'd also developed a B chest over the 2 month break and knew puberty (and all its spots) would hit her soon. Queenie had also chopped off her hair so it now fell just under her newly bigger chest.”
POSSESSIONS: She has a younger brother named Crete. There are also six year old girl twins, and everybody has the same complexion. Eventually we find out their names are Bubble and Squeek, and they act like two year olds. “ They were dressed as if they were leading an Arctic expedition. Queenie herself in: black leggings, white long sleeve top, purple zip up hoodie under a light denim jacket. Red Doc Martin boots and a red snood style scarf.” “They'd been at Hogwarts for just over a month now and Queenie was really seeing her pets' true nature. Her white speckled tawny owl, Utah had already flown to and from Turkey 18 times where as her blue Russian kitten, Pablo had barely left her dorm.”
CONNECTION TO CANON: We start off with eleven year old Queenie going to school for the first time. Cedric is a year above them, and they meet on the train. We then get this bit at the end of the chapter. “Going to bed that night Queenie dwelled in Ivy's words. Did the whole school love Cedric? Queenie was ashamed to admit it but she'd developed a bit of a crush in the short time she'd know him and wanted to know her chances of actually been noticed.” (She's eleven to twelve years old for crying out loud. I'm not saying she's not going to have a crush, but she's already self-concious about crushing on a guy.) “Queenie skipped to charms with Rita, her muggle born dorm friend singing 'Hakuna Matata' from the muggle film the lion king.” “In that month her and Cedric had become firm friends, him finding her optimism and laid back attitude refreshing as his parents were constantly breathing down his neck about grades and Quidditch. With Queenie, or 'little one' as he'd taken to calling her, he felt like he could let go and it wasn't a secret in the Hufflepuff boys dorm that Cedric had a crush on the bubbly Blonde but being in Hufflepuff where a key trait is loyalty, Cedric really didn't have to worry about one of them running off to tell her.” By the second chapter they're already going on a date because Cedric senses how perfect she must be for him. (I officially can't read anymore. One of the reviews for chapter thirty indicates she may be pregnaunt with Cedrics baby. Soe I decided to skip to chapter thirty.) Here is the first paragraph. “When Cedric and Queenie returned to Hogwarts, it was the start of the summer term which for Queenie meant the start of O.W.L's. Granted she was sitting two less this year, after sitting Ancient Runes and History of Magic last year but it was still a daunting prospect. All her school life so far had led up to now and she either failed or she passed. Obviously the school had been building them up for the exams for quite some time. Since mid way through fourth year, Queenie had been sitting mock papers and previous exams but now it was the last push, the final sprint. However Queenie was worried how she's fit revision into her already hectic day. Not only was there lessons and the Tri-Wizard preparations but also the amount of people attending the clubs that Marie, Gemma, Rohm, Jeremy, Leah, Joshua, and of course Rita, ran had doubled in numbers since the delegations from the other schools arrived. It seemed muggle life skills, dance and music appealed to the Beauxbaton girls most, large numbers turning up. Whereas the Durmstrang boys preferred the computing skills element- mainly to play games that some of the muggle borns and half bloods had got them hooked on. However muggle sport was a club they all liked and meant every Friday, in between last lesson and dinner, the Great hall was alive with activity as a great range of muggle sports were played.” I then decided to read the next chapters after all only to find myself annoyed at how PERFECT Queenie is made out to be. She instantly makes friends with Hermione, and is friends to all. By chapter eight she's butting in on Harry, Ron and Hermione's activities, and I finally had enough with the fake “Queen Bee”. It's apparently one of her nicknames.
ORIGIN: “Cedric was on his way to Defense Against the Dark Arts when he saw Queenie and another girl, who he believed to be called Rita skipping down the corridor singing about mottos, grubs and Huna kataka? Cedric shook his head he'd never understand that girl but that was part of her appeal. […] Said appeal is why Cedric had chose to go to DADA via Charms-Cedric had decided to ask her on a date purely to see if she were as perfect a romantic partner as she was friend. Cedric had no doubt she was but would rather be safe than sorry.” (He's what - twelve to thirteen?)
SPECIAL ABILITIES: “Parents and children pushing and shoving, toing and throwing as they tried to navigate the magically concealed platform at Kings Cross. In the middle of it all there was a spot of serenity. A small circle of calm and tranquillity, the peace in the eye of the storm.” Don't forget the fact the Suethor plays up the fact her Sue is the perfect match for Cedric. Cho is forgotten about in favor of the writers perfect self insert. Chapter six we find out she's in dance club, and sadly from chapter five the writer thinks Muggle studies is a home ec class which includes sewing.
NOTES: The way the writer tries to describe the character as an over grown toddler bothers me. The first thing popping into my head was to ask what genetic abnormality this girl had, but then I realized the Suethor didn't mean for this to be a negative trait, but something which makes her character look gorgeous and exotic. Why point out how beautiful the character is in the summary? The second thing popping into my head was how inaccurate the actual description is anatomically.
Then I got to the part where the writer claims Queenie's family is dressed for an Artic expedition only for the description of the clothes not to match at all.
I'm also going to add here that Queenie's personality is annoying.
SAMPLE:
Platform Nine and three quarters, was bustling. Parents and children pushing and shoving, toing and throwing as they tried to navigate the magically concealed platform at Kings Cross. In the middle of it all there was a spot of serenity. A small circle of calm and tranquillity, the peace in the eye of the storm.
This spot was solely occupants by a girl, who at first glance appeared to be 5' 5" toddler. Like an infant her eye sockets were too deeply set in her skull, causing her eyes pop out slightly. Normally in children these things pass with age but this girl was eleven and it had still not passed, so probably never would. She had the body of toddler too, she was slightly chubby in the limbs and stomach area much like a 2 year old. She had a beach complexion. Her wavy hair as white as the Mediterranean sands, Eyes that replicated the azure waters of the Seychelles and a lovely golden tan, that only natural sun can achieve.
"Q … Q … Queenie!" The young of a young boy called, knocking the girl, Queenie out of her trance. She whipped around to face him, her waist length, fine hair catching the wind and surfing it as she did.
The boy had much the same features as her. White blonde hair, deep set azure eyes and tanned-they were obviously related.
"Crete" the girl sighed, her voice sweet and smooth.
"Mum says to come now"
"Ok" She replied taking the younger boy-but probably only by a year-hand and started off through the ground.
The two parted through the hectic human traffic until they reached four others, a young man and woman both in their 30's and too young girls, identical twins, who were about 6. All of them donned the same complexion as Queenie and Crete. The family was clearly not from England, their wardrobe gave that away. They were dressed as if they were leading an Arctic expedition. Queenie herself in: black leggings, white long sleeve top, purple zip up hoodie under a light denim jacket. Red Doc Martin boots and a red snood style scarf.
"Now dear you promise to owl us?" The older woman-Jasmine, enquired while embracing her tightly.
"Of course, mum. I'm more concerned about doing you proud!" Queenie explained
"Darling I'll always be proud of you, as will your father even if he doesn't fully get all the magical stuff" Jasmine reassured, leaving her eldest to let out a shaky laugh as the drew apart.
"Dad?" Queenie whispered, eyes glassy, her tears resting precariously on her thick, long, black lashes. He pulled her into a tight hug, swaying her back and forth.
"Don't forget your old muggle dad now will you now?" He whispered into her hair. She just shook her head from its position buried into his chest.
2 sets of little arms through themselves around her waist and she parted with her beloved father to bid farewell to her youngest siblings, Bubble and Squeak.
Crouching down to their level, she embraced them both properly-all 3 of them crying just like her mother, father and brother who were watching on.
"Don't leave!" Bubble gurgled through her tears, the mole under her left eye differentiating her from her sister when she pulled away.
"No don't!" Squeak agreed
"Stay" Bubble pleaded
"Stay" Squeak reinforced
"STAY!" They both chorused, crying even more.
A sharp whistle cut through the platform and the doors of the Scarlett engine opened. Queenie pulled herself up, and hugged her brother, Crete, quickly whispering in his ear:
"I'm leaving you in charge, you best maintain my domain of craziness" he just smiled at her, nodding.