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[pottersues]

Here is day three of “follow the reviews”. No, it's not getting a special week tag.

TITLE: The Beginning of the Story and The Demon's We Face
PERPETRATOR: Sonny13
SUE-O-METER:

Comments

[indigoneutrino]

I got four chapters in to the first one and so far the Sue still hasn't contributed anything new. So it's basically a parasite Sue. She's there, but may as well not be. The detail of her being Malfoy's sister never really becomes important and isn't an obstacle to her just tagging along with Harry. It's like she's literally just there to be paired with Harry and follow him round, but her own story with her family never gets much development.

The Suethor also does one of my pet peeves in fanfiction and doesn't have them sorted alphabetically. If Faye's Draco's sister, she'd be sorted right after him, not three or more people later.

[pottersues]

I forgot the parasite tag...

[yemi_hikari]

I've never seen a Parasite Sue that I like and the reason I don't like them is because the writer isn't writing their own story. No, I take that back. Parasites are cute when we're talking really young writers who don't know better and you can tell from the tone of the writing that they are young and don't know better. Most though should know better.

[anonymous]

because faye is her best friend

Well, Ron and Hermione were Harry's best friends and she didn't tell them , did she? Oh I forgot, this is Fanfic!Hermione. Oops. Sorry.

... It's hard to be sarcastic on the internet.

[pottersues]

You mean Ron and Harry were Hermione's best friends.

[yemi_hikari]

“In this story, Metamorphmagi can also transform fully into animals, I know they can't do this in the movies or in the books, but in mine they can.”

Yeah... no. The reason the change was made was to make the character really cool because she has nothing else to add to the plot.