1478: Gobling Kings and Magical Things - Sarah Willams
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Thank you to the minion who sent in this lovely bit of sue!
TITLE: Goblin Kings and Magical Things
PERPETRATOR: Queen of the Nymphs
SUE-O-METER:
(awful)
FULL NAME: Sarah Williams
SPECIES: the One-who-defeated-the-Labyrinth-and-won-David Bowie's-Jareth's-heart
HAIR: not described
EYES: not described
MARKINGS: not described
POSSESSIONS: Sarah: a smashed magic mirror, a baby brother newly reclaimed from the Goblin King, a letter of recommendation from The Salem Institute of Wizardry located in Oregon.
ORIGIN: somewhere in New England
CONNECTIONS TO CANON: none at all
SPECIAL ABILITIES: can smash things like the Hulk with the sound of her voice...and her fists. She will be summoned to Hogwarts to be the new DADA teacher because of her experiences in the Underground, where she recieved Jareth's powers as a prize for defeating the Labyrinth
NOTES: Seriously, as a fan of Labyrinth I can't for the life of me figure this crossover out. Like, sure, maybe it could co-exist with the HP-verse (in fact, I've seen that done fairly well in fic)...but to make it a movie and a real life kind of deal in the same 'verse? Not so much. Also the line breaks gave me headaches so I stopped reading after the first chapter.
SAMPLE:
FLASHBACK
Viktor lay on the plush rug of his Bulgarian mansion, sipping hot chocolate from a large mug. Hermione sat in a plush armchair, staring at a letter in disgust.
“Herm-i-ninny, what is wrong? You haf been reading that letter for the past half hour!” She said somewhat angrily.
“Oh, it’s just that.DUMBLEDORE!” She spat out the name as if it was something vile. “He refuses to let Harry stay with the Weasley’s for the summer.”
Viktor exhaled and dropped down onto the carpet at the mention of HIS name..
“Her-mi-ninny, does it really matter what this Harry does in his summer? You are here with me, there is nothing that you are able to do.”
“Excuse me for caring about my friends!” she replied, standing up.
“If you want to be with them so much, then what are you doing here with me?” He got up, and looked down on her, furious with jealousy.
She slapped him hard across the face, and stormed out of the room to send an owl to her parents. As she left, Viktor shouted one last reply that rung in her ears.
“Go to your precious Harry Potter! You two deserve each other!”
END FLASHBACK
His last remark still puzzled her.
Harry and I are just friends, I was just concerned for his safety, that’s all! Its not like I care for him in that way…
IT was strange though, that whenever she thought of his raven hair and emerald eyes, there was a tingling in her stomach. She couldn’t be falling for her best friend. Impossible.
“Hermione dear,” her mother called up the stairs. “Dinner time! Come quickly, we want to spend as much time with you as possible before you leave tomorrow!”
“Yes mum!” she called, putting her long brown hair into a ponytail. “Well goblin king.” She whispered. “I guess it will soon be time for you and I to say our farewells as well.
She turned off the lights, slammed the door shut, and run downstairs to where her parents waited.
YAY!!!! BREAK TIME!!!!!!!!!!! RUNS TO TOILET
Sarah lay on her bed, looking up at the red canopy above her bed, contemplating the universe.
Her father opened the door
“Sarah honey, Karen and I are leaving now, but we’ll be back in a couple of hours. Toby’s been fed and put to bed, so just check up on him every now and then, or if he cries” he said gently.
“Yes dad, I know. I’ve looked after him plenty of times before” she said, before sitting up to look at her father, wrapping her arms around her now hunched up knees. “You and Karen have a nice time now, ok? I’ll see you when you get back.”
Her father hadn’t gotten a reply like that for a long time. In fact, for the past week, Sarah had become more considerate of her stepmother, rarely complaining, and often picking Toby up and holding him tight. He was glad, but wondered what had brought about this sudden change.
“Are you ok honey?” he asked warily
“Yeah dad I’m fine. You’d better hurry though, or you’ll be late.”
“Alright, alright. Call us if you need us.” He replied, coming over to kiss her on the forehead. She smiled up at him absentmindedly. He waved as he walked to her door, letting himself out, shutting it behind him. Sarah flopped back onto her bed. She heard their car pulling out of the driveway.
It had been a week since she had been on her… adventure, through the underground. She’d spoken to Ludo, Hoggle and Sir Didymus a few times since then, but hadn’t had a chance. Now she tried to summon them to her mirror
“Hoggle? I need you. Please, will you come?” Nothing happened. “No” she whispered.
“Hoggle? Sir Didymus? Ludo?” she cried, louder now. “anyone? Is anyone there? Please, someone talk to me!”
Still nothing happened. The mirror didn’t even twinkle a little.
“No.” She whispered, laying her head on her desktop. “No!” she screamed, banging her fists. She heard a crash, and felt little pinpricks and slight weight pressing upon her back and hair. She looked up through her tears and saw her mirror was broken, not a single piece of glass remained in the frame.
Must be stronger than I thought…Sarah mused, wiping the tears off her cheeks. She froze when she realised the true damage that had been caused. Her only link left to he Underground was… her, now smashed, mirror. Never again would she see her friends.
Or so she thought.
What have we here? A break line? Indeed!
“Professor Dumbledore, I think you had better see this” McGonagall said, rushing into the Headmaster’s office. Although it was still summer holidays, the teachers were all called back into the in the last week of holidays to ensure they were ready for the next school year.
McGonagall handed the headmaster a piece of parchment, which read, in purple ink;
To Professor Dumbledore, Headmaster’s office, Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry, Ireland, United Kingdom
Professor, it may please you to know that we have found a girl who has come into the possession of a certain power that is rare indeed. Although she is fifteen years of age, her powers have chosen to surface now. It may also interest you that we have just learnt that she is also in possession of powers belonging to those students at your school.
We feel that, if left unattended, she could cause wide destruction and death, without actually knowing she was doing so. We have decided to inform you, and let you deal with it as you will.
We have enclosed her details.
The Salem Institute of Wizardry, Oregon, the United State of America.
“How kind of them” The headmaster said. “Minerva, please send a letter to Miss Sarah Williams, at this address.” He handed her the sheet of paper. “Ask her to come to the school as soon as possible, we need to acquaint her with our ways. Also, could you find me my address book for those of other realms; I feel I may have found us a new Defence Against the Dark Arts teacher.”
Professor McGonagall nodded, before setting off to do as she was bid.
Thank you to the minion who sent in this lovely bit of sue!
TITLE: Goblin Kings and Magical Things
PERPETRATOR: Queen of the Nymphs
SUE-O-METER:
(awful)
FULL NAME: Sarah Williams
SPECIES: the One-who-defeated-the-Labyrinth-and-won-David Bowie's-Jareth's-heart
HAIR: not described
EYES: not described
MARKINGS: not described
POSSESSIONS: Sarah: a smashed magic mirror, a baby brother newly reclaimed from the Goblin King, a letter of recommendation from The Salem Institute of Wizardry located in Oregon.
ORIGIN: somewhere in New England
CONNECTIONS TO CANON: none at all
SPECIAL ABILITIES: can smash things like the Hulk with the sound of her voice...and her fists. She will be summoned to Hogwarts to be the new DADA teacher because of her experiences in the Underground, where she recieved Jareth's powers as a prize for defeating the Labyrinth
NOTES: Seriously, as a fan of Labyrinth I can't for the life of me figure this crossover out. Like, sure, maybe it could co-exist with the HP-verse (in fact, I've seen that done fairly well in fic)...but to make it a movie and a real life kind of deal in the same 'verse? Not so much. Also the line breaks gave me headaches so I stopped reading after the first chapter.
SAMPLE:
FLASHBACK
Viktor lay on the plush rug of his Bulgarian mansion, sipping hot chocolate from a large mug. Hermione sat in a plush armchair, staring at a letter in disgust.
“Herm-i-ninny, what is wrong? You haf been reading that letter for the past half hour!” She said somewhat angrily.
“Oh, it’s just that.DUMBLEDORE!” She spat out the name as if it was something vile. “He refuses to let Harry stay with the Weasley’s for the summer.”
Viktor exhaled and dropped down onto the carpet at the mention of HIS name..
“Her-mi-ninny, does it really matter what this Harry does in his summer? You are here with me, there is nothing that you are able to do.”
“Excuse me for caring about my friends!” she replied, standing up.
“If you want to be with them so much, then what are you doing here with me?” He got up, and looked down on her, furious with jealousy.
She slapped him hard across the face, and stormed out of the room to send an owl to her parents. As she left, Viktor shouted one last reply that rung in her ears.
“Go to your precious Harry Potter! You two deserve each other!”
END FLASHBACK
His last remark still puzzled her.
Harry and I are just friends, I was just concerned for his safety, that’s all! Its not like I care for him in that way…
IT was strange though, that whenever she thought of his raven hair and emerald eyes, there was a tingling in her stomach. She couldn’t be falling for her best friend. Impossible.
“Hermione dear,” her mother called up the stairs. “Dinner time! Come quickly, we want to spend as much time with you as possible before you leave tomorrow!”
“Yes mum!” she called, putting her long brown hair into a ponytail. “Well goblin king.” She whispered. “I guess it will soon be time for you and I to say our farewells as well.
She turned off the lights, slammed the door shut, and run downstairs to where her parents waited.
YAY!!!! BREAK TIME!!!!!!!!!!! RUNS TO TOILET
Sarah lay on her bed, looking up at the red canopy above her bed, contemplating the universe.
Her father opened the door
“Sarah honey, Karen and I are leaving now, but we’ll be back in a couple of hours. Toby’s been fed and put to bed, so just check up on him every now and then, or if he cries” he said gently.
“Yes dad, I know. I’ve looked after him plenty of times before” she said, before sitting up to look at her father, wrapping her arms around her now hunched up knees. “You and Karen have a nice time now, ok? I’ll see you when you get back.”
Her father hadn’t gotten a reply like that for a long time. In fact, for the past week, Sarah had become more considerate of her stepmother, rarely complaining, and often picking Toby up and holding him tight. He was glad, but wondered what had brought about this sudden change.
“Are you ok honey?” he asked warily
“Yeah dad I’m fine. You’d better hurry though, or you’ll be late.”
“Alright, alright. Call us if you need us.” He replied, coming over to kiss her on the forehead. She smiled up at him absentmindedly. He waved as he walked to her door, letting himself out, shutting it behind him. Sarah flopped back onto her bed. She heard their car pulling out of the driveway.
It had been a week since she had been on her… adventure, through the underground. She’d spoken to Ludo, Hoggle and Sir Didymus a few times since then, but hadn’t had a chance. Now she tried to summon them to her mirror
“Hoggle? I need you. Please, will you come?” Nothing happened. “No” she whispered.
“Hoggle? Sir Didymus? Ludo?” she cried, louder now. “anyone? Is anyone there? Please, someone talk to me!”
Still nothing happened. The mirror didn’t even twinkle a little.
“No.” She whispered, laying her head on her desktop. “No!” she screamed, banging her fists. She heard a crash, and felt little pinpricks and slight weight pressing upon her back and hair. She looked up through her tears and saw her mirror was broken, not a single piece of glass remained in the frame.
Must be stronger than I thought…Sarah mused, wiping the tears off her cheeks. She froze when she realised the true damage that had been caused. Her only link left to he Underground was… her, now smashed, mirror. Never again would she see her friends.
Or so she thought.
What have we here? A break line? Indeed!
“Professor Dumbledore, I think you had better see this” McGonagall said, rushing into the Headmaster’s office. Although it was still summer holidays, the teachers were all called back into the in the last week of holidays to ensure they were ready for the next school year.
McGonagall handed the headmaster a piece of parchment, which read, in purple ink;
To Professor Dumbledore, Headmaster’s office, Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry, Ireland, United Kingdom
Professor, it may please you to know that we have found a girl who has come into the possession of a certain power that is rare indeed. Although she is fifteen years of age, her powers have chosen to surface now. It may also interest you that we have just learnt that she is also in possession of powers belonging to those students at your school.
We feel that, if left unattended, she could cause wide destruction and death, without actually knowing she was doing so. We have decided to inform you, and let you deal with it as you will.
We have enclosed her details.
The Salem Institute of Wizardry, Oregon, the United State of America.
“How kind of them” The headmaster said. “Minerva, please send a letter to Miss Sarah Williams, at this address.” He handed her the sheet of paper. “Ask her to come to the school as soon as possible, we need to acquaint her with our ways. Also, could you find me my address book for those of other realms; I feel I may have found us a new Defence Against the Dark Arts teacher.”
Professor McGonagall nodded, before setting off to do as she was bid.