1111: New Girl - Alyssa Blood
TITLE: New Girl (*sigh* Do we have to go through this again?)
PERPETRATOR: insanenthemembrain
SUE-O-METER:
(toxic)
FULL NAME: Alyssa Blood
SPECIES: New girl.
HAIR: "golden hair."
EYES: Not described.
MARKINGS: None.
POSSESSIONS: None.
ORIGIN: Somewhere undescribed thus far.
CONNECTIONS TO CANON: Goes to Hogwarts.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Gets easily knocked off her feet by Draco Malfoy. WHO IS NOT THAT CHARMING OKAY SUETHORS?
NOTES: This reads like there are two authors, or at least multiple personalities. The first chapter was written by the format-challenged moron half, and the second was written by the Malfoy lusting moron half.
SAMPLE:“God you scared the bloody hell out of me, you know that?” exclaimed Alyssa as she tried to get her breathing back to normal but she knew as well as he did that it would never return normal as long he was around her especially in front of her with his muscular body, cold gray eyes that makes you feel like you’ll never ever going to be warm again, and his brilliant blond hair that hangs in his face.
“Um… have we met?” he asked curiously while he blocked her path with an outstretched arm as he looked into her deep blue eyes that looked as cold as his did.
“I’m Alyssa, Alyssa Blood” she smirked as she tossed her golden hair over her shoulder, turned, and started to walk in the other direction as she felt his soft hand roughly grab her wrist which caused her to spin around abruptly.” Yeah, that’s it Lyss make him want you…” she thought to herself before he opened his mouth to speak.
While still holding her wrist so she couldn’t escape he finally spoke in his usual smooth voice “The name’s Malfoy as in Draco Malfoy.” Then he pressed her up against the wall and whispered “I know you’re new here so you better make friends and enemies with the right people, cause’ I’d really hate to hurt someone as beautiful as you are… okay?” Finally he released her wrist after what seemed ages and turned on his heel and retreated down the little train corridor with Alyssa wondering what had just happened.
She wandered her way back to her compartment to find a new girl sitting there, laughing loudly with Ginny, Harry, Luna, and Ron. The girl was the same height as Lyss but unlike Lyss the girl had brown hair that was put up in a messy ponytail with a hairclip that she noticed that was a very nice black dragon with gleaming red eyes. She also noticed that she had a golden badge pinned to her robes that said ‘PREFECT’ in capital letters.Who is that? Why is she in here with them? Do they know her? The famous Harry Potter friends with a nerd? Or is she a nerd? She’s a prefect. God, I’m so mean sometimes…
Her thoughts were interrupted by the girl’s voice that stopped dead when she saw that Alyssa was standing in the doorway. The girl smiled kindly at Alyssa while standing up so that Alyssa could have somewhere to sit since there was no more room plus she had her duties as a prefect to do. Alyssa returned the smile when the girl stood up and offered Alyssa her seat.
“Hi, I’m Hermione” the girl said as she pushed a strand of brown hair out of her face so she could see properly but ended up poking herself in the eye. Instantly the whole compartment was filled with laughter as Hermione rubbed her now damaged eye that was a little swollen and red. “Damn, bloody hair keeps getting in my face” Hermione screamed as she continues to rub her eyes.
“Are you okay?” asked Ginny sincerely as she got up to check Hermione’s eye. While Ginny did that Alyssa noticed that Ron was still cracking up so hard that his face was starting to turn red almost as red as his hair. Then out of nowhere Luna slapped him hard on the head with her magazine that she was holding upside down for some reason. At last, Hermione stopped rubbing and quickly left the compartment without another word. The rest of the train ride was a blur to Alyssa because she was staring out the window, thinking about what house she was going to be in, and drifting in and out of Harry and Ron’s conversation. Finally, the train stopped and Alyssa got off the train into the blistering cold and got in a carriage while Harry, Ginny, Luna, and Ron wiated back to see if Hermione was okay. What the hell is so special about her? She looks like a beaver for god's sake. Stop it Alyssa, stop being mean. Okay? Okay...
PERPETRATOR: insanenthemembrain
SUE-O-METER:
(toxic)
FULL NAME: Alyssa Blood
SPECIES: New girl.
HAIR: "golden hair."
EYES: Not described.
MARKINGS: None.
POSSESSIONS: None.
ORIGIN: Somewhere undescribed thus far.
CONNECTIONS TO CANON: Goes to Hogwarts.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Gets easily knocked off her feet by Draco Malfoy. WHO IS NOT THAT CHARMING OKAY SUETHORS?
NOTES: This reads like there are two authors, or at least multiple personalities. The first chapter was written by the format-challenged moron half, and the second was written by the Malfoy lusting moron half.
SAMPLE:“God you scared the bloody hell out of me, you know that?” exclaimed Alyssa as she tried to get her breathing back to normal but she knew as well as he did that it would never return normal as long he was around her especially in front of her with his muscular body, cold gray eyes that makes you feel like you’ll never ever going to be warm again, and his brilliant blond hair that hangs in his face.
“Um… have we met?” he asked curiously while he blocked her path with an outstretched arm as he looked into her deep blue eyes that looked as cold as his did.
“I’m Alyssa, Alyssa Blood” she smirked as she tossed her golden hair over her shoulder, turned, and started to walk in the other direction as she felt his soft hand roughly grab her wrist which caused her to spin around abruptly.” Yeah, that’s it Lyss make him want you…” she thought to herself before he opened his mouth to speak.
While still holding her wrist so she couldn’t escape he finally spoke in his usual smooth voice “The name’s Malfoy as in Draco Malfoy.” Then he pressed her up against the wall and whispered “I know you’re new here so you better make friends and enemies with the right people, cause’ I’d really hate to hurt someone as beautiful as you are… okay?” Finally he released her wrist after what seemed ages and turned on his heel and retreated down the little train corridor with Alyssa wondering what had just happened.
She wandered her way back to her compartment to find a new girl sitting there, laughing loudly with Ginny, Harry, Luna, and Ron. The girl was the same height as Lyss but unlike Lyss the girl had brown hair that was put up in a messy ponytail with a hairclip that she noticed that was a very nice black dragon with gleaming red eyes. She also noticed that she had a golden badge pinned to her robes that said ‘PREFECT’ in capital letters.Who is that? Why is she in here with them? Do they know her? The famous Harry Potter friends with a nerd? Or is she a nerd? She’s a prefect. God, I’m so mean sometimes…
Her thoughts were interrupted by the girl’s voice that stopped dead when she saw that Alyssa was standing in the doorway. The girl smiled kindly at Alyssa while standing up so that Alyssa could have somewhere to sit since there was no more room plus she had her duties as a prefect to do. Alyssa returned the smile when the girl stood up and offered Alyssa her seat.
“Hi, I’m Hermione” the girl said as she pushed a strand of brown hair out of her face so she could see properly but ended up poking herself in the eye. Instantly the whole compartment was filled with laughter as Hermione rubbed her now damaged eye that was a little swollen and red. “Damn, bloody hair keeps getting in my face” Hermione screamed as she continues to rub her eyes.
“Are you okay?” asked Ginny sincerely as she got up to check Hermione’s eye. While Ginny did that Alyssa noticed that Ron was still cracking up so hard that his face was starting to turn red almost as red as his hair. Then out of nowhere Luna slapped him hard on the head with her magazine that she was holding upside down for some reason. At last, Hermione stopped rubbing and quickly left the compartment without another word. The rest of the train ride was a blur to Alyssa because she was staring out the window, thinking about what house she was going to be in, and drifting in and out of Harry and Ron’s conversation. Finally, the train stopped and Alyssa got off the train into the blistering cold and got in a carriage while Harry, Ginny, Luna, and Ron wiated back to see if Hermione was okay. What the hell is so special about her? She looks like a beaver for god's sake. Stop it Alyssa, stop being mean. Okay? Okay...