5008: Tained Blood - Geumji Doen "Taya" Tayag

[pottersues]

Title: Tainted blood
Perpetrator: redsonic123
Sue-O-Meter: Toxic
Cover/Banner Art: There is a drawing of some guy with what I suspect is wolf ears, but this is a basic line drawing.
Summary: “Imagan that you just found out you are a wolfblood in the worst posible way. Furthermore you killed your own parents. And to top it your best friend saw it

Comments

[auregan]

"I don't remember much of my childhood. Then again who does?"

I love how after this statement, the author has the character conveniently remember something that happened in their infancy. I am not sure if this is canon for the other fandom, but I am fairly certain that we can't remember what our lives were like as week old babies.

This story is definitely hard to follow. At least, I find it very hard to follow.

"This is for all you horny people" ~Chapter 2

Lolz... wat? How did we go from this character waking up to the author telling us all about what the naked body of her sixteen year old character looks like? And why exactly do we need to know the size of this character's breasts? Why is this necessary for the story to be written? I don't know what is going on anymore.

So apparently, this author thinks it's absolutely necessary for the entire world to know what breast size ALL of her female characters have.

This just makes the story so cringy, to be honest. It's sad that I've got to say that, but it does and the writing of the story is just... awful. Now, I understand the author is very young and they obviously don't have a lot of experience with writing, but the writing in this story is very bad.

It also seems that this author wanted to write a diverse character into a story but decided not to bother with doing any research. That within itself makes this story a little problematic. I feel that with time, this author can really grow as a writer, but right now the story they've written is just bad.

[pottersues]

Considering what the writer thinks smut is my guess is the writer of this one is including such description because they think this makes them look mature yet what it really does is show the lack of maturity on their part.

I also wonder if their comment regarding "I have created around 300 oc all different in a certain way" is simply more of this attempt at making a diverse character without doing their research, but giving them odd hair and eye colors rather than actually coming up with a well rounded OC.

Those are two of the hurtles I see for them, that and the fact they're far more focused on their OC and original content than the canon material. It took too long for just one fandom to be introduced, but the fandom which got the story featured here isn't even on the radar ten chapters in.