4489: Into the Fire - Asteria Dames
Title: Into the Fire
Perpetrator: booj2018writer
Sue-O-Meter: Bad
Cover/Banner Art: The cover is part of the castle with the title spalashed on.
Summary: “Asteria Dames is the daughter of a well-known auror and a muggle. She was thought to be a Slytherin through and through, but when she is sorted into Gryffindor, everything seems to go along perfectly. Except that she found a strange note in an abandoned corridor. People all around the school began to disappear mysteriously. Asteria's the only one who can figure out what's going on”
Full Name: Asteria Dames
Species: I’m not sure what to call this one.
Hair: She’s “a little girl with copper colored hair.”
Eyes: n/a
Markings: n/a
Possessions: Nothing so far.
Connection to Canon: The only chapter up is her sorting. More specifically, her sorting only involves her sorting. It’s all about her name being called, us getting a brief description of what she looks like and her talking to the sorting hat and getting sorted.
Origin: According to the writer of this fanfic, “I write books that are easier to read and yet for teenagers from ages 13-24.” I think the writer thinks this means super short chapters and super simple plots. This chapter for example is about 250 words, but is so simple it is boring.
Special Abilities: We’re supposed to believe this character is special. After all, she has an entire chapter dedicated to her sorting and her sorting alone. There is also supposed to be a mystery which only she can solve.
Notes: This writer underestimates the intelligence level of thirteen-year-old readers.
Sample:
In her head, she heard a slightly snide male voice, Ah, I see. One who would normally be put into Slytherin, but. . .you don't want that, do you? She bit her lip, shaking her head as she thought. I want to be in Gryffindor like my mom was. The hat paused, going through her head. Crap. She shook her head, not liking that it was hesitating so much.
Perpetrator: booj2018writer
Sue-O-Meter: Bad
Cover/Banner Art: The cover is part of the castle with the title spalashed on.
Summary: “Asteria Dames is the daughter of a well-known auror and a muggle. She was thought to be a Slytherin through and through, but when she is sorted into Gryffindor, everything seems to go along perfectly. Except that she found a strange note in an abandoned corridor. People all around the school began to disappear mysteriously. Asteria's the only one who can figure out what's going on”
Full Name: Asteria Dames
Species: I’m not sure what to call this one.
Hair: She’s “a little girl with copper colored hair.”
Eyes: n/a
Markings: n/a
Possessions: Nothing so far.
Connection to Canon: The only chapter up is her sorting. More specifically, her sorting only involves her sorting. It’s all about her name being called, us getting a brief description of what she looks like and her talking to the sorting hat and getting sorted.
Origin: According to the writer of this fanfic, “I write books that are easier to read and yet for teenagers from ages 13-24.” I think the writer thinks this means super short chapters and super simple plots. This chapter for example is about 250 words, but is so simple it is boring.
Special Abilities: We’re supposed to believe this character is special. After all, she has an entire chapter dedicated to her sorting and her sorting alone. There is also supposed to be a mystery which only she can solve.
Notes: This writer underestimates the intelligence level of thirteen-year-old readers.
Sample:
In her head, she heard a slightly snide male voice, Ah, I see. One who would normally be put into Slytherin, but. . .you don't want that, do you? She bit her lip, shaking her head as she thought. I want to be in Gryffindor like my mom was. The hat paused, going through her head. Crap. She shook her head, not liking that it was hesitating so much.