4431: Ice Princess - Unnamed
Title: Ice Princess
Perpetrator: D_W_Slytherin
Sue-O-Meter: Toxic
Cover/Banner Art: N/A
Summary: There is no summary where it is supposed to be. For the prologue though the summary reads, “the night where everything changed, it all started on Halloween…”
Full Name: Life, Death and their child.
Species: Apparently the child of Life and Death is also Harry’s twin sister and the child of Lily and James.
Hair: Life’s hair is at one point described as “golden hair floating around her in a halo.” The twin has “golden blonde hair, white at the tips, went up to her shoulders in short, uneven patches.”
Eyes: The twin has “a pair of pale, cloudy blue eyes with wisps of gold swirling around in an eternal pattern, her gaze alert and calculating.”
Markings: The twin has “soft, rosy lips”.
Possessions: Nothing specific.
Connection to Canon: The prolog opens up with Life and Death holding hands and talking about their daughter on Earth that Fate was so kind to give them, but poor Sue is subject to Fate making her life miserable. Voldemort appears in the room of the twins and starts whining about how he doesn’t like killing children, but that none of this would happen if they hadn’t been “turning their backs on our wizarding traditions, instead replacing them with muggle ones.Tonight is an example, where iwzards and witches used to celebrate Samhain, a celebration of the dead, but now it’s all about Halloween. And with you alive, especially in a position where it’s easy to have Dumbledore manipulate you to his will to do his bidding… I am truly sorry.” It gets worse though, as the one-year old girl knows to call him Tom. We’re then told that Dumbledore is presenting Harry publicly to the wizarding world, but I think the goal is to say that Harry’s not the real hero, but this so far unnamed Sue is.
Origin: “I’m a young girl still attending school, and Harry Potter is like, my favourite fandom!
Special Abilities: She’s Harry’s super beautiful twin! Of Life, “her voice cut through the eerie silence, smooth like honey, no different from that of a melodic angel.” Obviously Harry’s twin is super special, because she makes Voldemort super OoC simply by existing.
Notes: On the positive side, the writer used their own words and the opening scene is unique. However, the Harry Potter doesn’t need to sparkle in the manner Stephanie Meyer made vampire different in Twilight. In fact, adding a bunch of sparkle to something - yeah, just don’t make things sparkly unless you need to, which is going to be most of the time.
Sample:
The Dark Lord, otherwise known as Lord Voldemort, made his way to the nursery in Godric’s Hollows, after stunning the two adult Potters. Making his way up the stairs, two by two, he blasted the door open. Gliding towards the crib with his hooded cape billowing around his, his took his time to study the two infants.
Turning to look at the one on the left, he was greeted with disgust. It was a boy, a carbon copy of James, apart from the small tufts of bright, red hair on top of a shiny head. His almond, brown eyes were scrunched up with ushered tears, and snot dribbled out of his nose.
Voldemort, turning his Jose up in distaste, turned to the other child. Studying the second child, he immediately recognised it as his equal.
The child, a young girl, started up at his with a pair of pale, cloudy blue eyes with wisps of gold swirling around in an eternal pattern, her gaze alert and calculating. Her soft, rosy lips were curved upwards in a smile and her golden blonde hair, white at the tips, went up to her shoulders in short, uneven patches.
Voldemort sighed heavily. “I really don’t like to murder infants, due to the fact that they can’t protect themselves. However, you must forgive me, as I am not lying when I say that I have no other choice. This is necessary in order for me to achieve my goal, to restore the wizarding world to its former glory. Mud bloods and hallfblood, and heck, even some purebloods are turning their backs on our wizarding traditions, instead replacing them with muggle ones.Tonight is an example, where wizards and witches used to celebrate Samhain, a celebration of the dead, but now it’s all about Halloween. And with you alive, especially in a position where it’s easy to have Dumbledore manipulate you to his will to do his bidding...” He paused his rant, before sighing. “I am truly sorry.”
Perpetrator: D_W_Slytherin
Sue-O-Meter: Toxic
Cover/Banner Art: N/A
Summary: There is no summary where it is supposed to be. For the prologue though the summary reads, “the night where everything changed, it all started on Halloween…”
Full Name: Life, Death and their child.
Species: Apparently the child of Life and Death is also Harry’s twin sister and the child of Lily and James.
Hair: Life’s hair is at one point described as “golden hair floating around her in a halo.” The twin has “golden blonde hair, white at the tips, went up to her shoulders in short, uneven patches.”
Eyes: The twin has “a pair of pale, cloudy blue eyes with wisps of gold swirling around in an eternal pattern, her gaze alert and calculating.”
Markings: The twin has “soft, rosy lips”.
Possessions: Nothing specific.
Connection to Canon: The prolog opens up with Life and Death holding hands and talking about their daughter on Earth that Fate was so kind to give them, but poor Sue is subject to Fate making her life miserable. Voldemort appears in the room of the twins and starts whining about how he doesn’t like killing children, but that none of this would happen if they hadn’t been “turning their backs on our wizarding traditions, instead replacing them with muggle ones.Tonight is an example, where iwzards and witches used to celebrate Samhain, a celebration of the dead, but now it’s all about Halloween. And with you alive, especially in a position where it’s easy to have Dumbledore manipulate you to his will to do his bidding… I am truly sorry.” It gets worse though, as the one-year old girl knows to call him Tom. We’re then told that Dumbledore is presenting Harry publicly to the wizarding world, but I think the goal is to say that Harry’s not the real hero, but this so far unnamed Sue is.
Origin: “I’m a young girl still attending school, and Harry Potter is like, my favourite fandom!
Special Abilities: She’s Harry’s super beautiful twin! Of Life, “her voice cut through the eerie silence, smooth like honey, no different from that of a melodic angel.” Obviously Harry’s twin is super special, because she makes Voldemort super OoC simply by existing.
Notes: On the positive side, the writer used their own words and the opening scene is unique. However, the Harry Potter doesn’t need to sparkle in the manner Stephanie Meyer made vampire different in Twilight. In fact, adding a bunch of sparkle to something - yeah, just don’t make things sparkly unless you need to, which is going to be most of the time.
Sample:
The Dark Lord, otherwise known as Lord Voldemort, made his way to the nursery in Godric’s Hollows, after stunning the two adult Potters. Making his way up the stairs, two by two, he blasted the door open. Gliding towards the crib with his hooded cape billowing around his, his took his time to study the two infants.
Turning to look at the one on the left, he was greeted with disgust. It was a boy, a carbon copy of James, apart from the small tufts of bright, red hair on top of a shiny head. His almond, brown eyes were scrunched up with ushered tears, and snot dribbled out of his nose.
Voldemort, turning his Jose up in distaste, turned to the other child. Studying the second child, he immediately recognised it as his equal.
The child, a young girl, started up at his with a pair of pale, cloudy blue eyes with wisps of gold swirling around in an eternal pattern, her gaze alert and calculating. Her soft, rosy lips were curved upwards in a smile and her golden blonde hair, white at the tips, went up to her shoulders in short, uneven patches.
Voldemort sighed heavily. “I really don’t like to murder infants, due to the fact that they can’t protect themselves. However, you must forgive me, as I am not lying when I say that I have no other choice. This is necessary in order for me to achieve my goal, to restore the wizarding world to its former glory. Mud bloods and hallfblood, and heck, even some purebloods are turning their backs on our wizarding traditions, instead replacing them with muggle ones.Tonight is an example, where wizards and witches used to celebrate Samhain, a celebration of the dead, but now it’s all about Halloween. And with you alive, especially in a position where it’s easy to have Dumbledore manipulate you to his will to do his bidding...” He paused his rant, before sighing. “I am truly sorry.”