4226: The Triplets of Hogwarts - Cliodhna and her brothers
Title: The Triplets of Hogwarts
Perpetrator: Sergeant Wellington
Sue-O-Meter: Toxic
Cover/Banner Art: None
Summary: “The Quick triplets are the only triplets in Hogwarts history, are best friends with the Weasleys & the Diggorys, & are way too good at Quidditch. Cliodhna sometimes feels like the odd person out when everyone comments on her being a girl, but she's determined to show them. Quidditch, friendship, and school are the most important things! AU AU! [CD/OC (CQ), HP/GW, HG/FW, etc.]”
Full Name: Cliodhna “Klee, at least according to the reviews” Quick, plus Ben and Jack “Jackie” Quick
Species: They’re triplets. Their parents are Angus and Caterine Quick
Hair: Her is a quote from chapter two. “Cedric walked a half step behind his mother, nervous about meeting these neighbors. He became very confused when his eyes settled on the three children who were all similar heights and had varying shades of blonde hair.” There is nothing confusing about that!
Eyes: Jack’s eyes are “golden-brown”. One of the annoying things in chapter one is how the triplets having different eye colors is pointed out. “Cliodhna smiled at the younger boy who was nearly their height,” Just another way we’re different.” Please, writers, when giving your characters special traits, don’t throw it in your readers faces! Her eyes though turn out to be hazel. Funny how the first image which popped into my head wasn’t the “blue hazel”, but the “golden-brown” hazel. In fact, Ben’s are also described as “golden-brown” in chapter one.
Markings: Nothing specific.
Possessions: I believe they received brooms at a very young age.
Connection to Canon: The first chapter involves the annoying Cliodhna moving in near the Weasley family with her mother, father and triplet brothers I suspect only exist to make her super special. Scratch that. The comment regarding their eyes in chapter three confirms it, but I find myself more annoyed than I thought I would be with this character, and we’re not even into the first chapter. (The first chapter of twenty-eight mind you, with 273,628 words.) Later on, they also talk about celebrating half-birthdays. (…) “’I like the Quicks,” Bill told his brother as they flew lazily high above the field, ‘it’s good for the others to know non-Weasley children.’” WTF! We’re not even out of the first chapter, and the “we’re so special” isn’t slowing down! Cedric moves in during chapter two, but the entire thing felt “anticlimactic”. I’m also bothered with this “everybody moving in” plotline. I also just realized the writer is naming their chapters via Roman numerals. Chapter three is best summed up as being about how much Cliodhna loves her perfect family, but has the perfect life with perfect friends. WTF! In chapter four, “’Take care of your brothers,” Angus’ hands were on her shoulders, his green eyes peering into her hazel ones. ‘Make sure Jack makes friends and make sure Ben doesn’t become a prat.” As suspected, they don’t have any true role in the story beyond making their sister super special. Cedric also has to explain what triplets are in this chapter. Looking at chapter five, the story is “sue-what-plot”.
Origin: I wonder if the writer thought something along these lines. “There are already a bunch of twins at Hogwarts. As such, to make my characters unique, they need to be triplets.” I feel this is confirmed as I reread the summary and notice the first line. I’m not even into the first chapter, and the story is screaming toxic rating wise. I’d like to say the writer might surprise me, but I doubt this story will rank lower than an awful.
Special Abilities: Just from the summary, we find out they “are way too good at Quidditch.” I’m also left believing what I believe is the main OC, Cliodhna, is attempting to show people girls can do what the boys can. I’m honestly tired of that plotline, but writers who honestly think being a tomboy is actually something that makes the character unique. Actually, with just the summary, I see the writer already tacking on traits just to make their OC special. I also just reread the summary. They’re apparently the “only triplets in Hogwarts history”. I found out from the reviews that Ben is gay. Something tells me that’s another thing tacked on to be “special”.
Notes: When someone says they can’t believe a story doesn’t have more reviews, do you believe them? I see people saying that so many times on poorly written stories rather than the good ones, so how can you tell if the reader knows what they’re talking about?
Because according to one reader, “this is a great coming of age story”, yet doesn’t have any form of conflict one would expect of an actual coming of age story. If someone recommended this as a great coming of age fanfic, I’d find myself majorly disapointed.
Sample:
She stood there, on their new front porch with her brothers, looking out over the fields. "This is it," her brother Jack said quietly, "this is where we'll play."
"It's big," her brother Ben smiled, "it'll be great, Jackie!" He took his hand to pull him, "Come on! Stop being so sad. Think of all the adventures we'll have!" He turned to her, his golden-brown eyes bright, "Right, Klee? Tell him!"
Cliodhna grinned, "Ben's right, Jack! There's the wood. I bet there's a stream or a pond! And look!" She pointed up at the sky where a bird was flying overhead. "We're going to have a grand time here!"
Jack's frown faltered slightly as Ben continued to pull him down the porch steps, "It'll be fun you think?"
Both of his siblings grinned as they stepped out into the grass. "Very fun!"
"Not scary?"
Cliodhna patted Jack's shoulder, "Not if we stick together!"
"We'll always stick together."
Angus and Catherine Quick had finally moved their family to the countryside after much debate and difficulty finding a suitable location. They settled on a three-bedroom cottage in Ottery St Catchpole with a decent amount of land, plenty of nearby open space and woods and a handful of Wizarding families.
They were both not surprised by the different reactions their young children had to moving and leaving their London flat. Catherine and Angus knew in time they would grow to love their new home.
"And that family down the lane, I told you, the Weasleys? They have a couple of kids too," Angus told his wife.
Catherine looked out the front window as she waved her wand to organize some picture frames and books on the bookcase, "More than a couple I think."
The knock on the front door sent Ben, Jack, and Cliodhna out of their bedrooms where they were unpacking to the front hall.
"Who is it?"
"Yes, mum, who is it?"
Catherine smiled ruefully, "Well, let's open the door and see, shall we?"
A tall ginger-haired man grinned, "Ah, Angus, welcome to Ottery St Catchpole! This is my family!"
The Quick children stared openly at the ginger family, Ben's mouth agape. "You - you all have -" he went to point at them when Angus intervened.
Perpetrator: Sergeant Wellington
Sue-O-Meter: Toxic
Cover/Banner Art: None
Summary: “The Quick triplets are the only triplets in Hogwarts history, are best friends with the Weasleys & the Diggorys, & are way too good at Quidditch. Cliodhna sometimes feels like the odd person out when everyone comments on her being a girl, but she's determined to show them. Quidditch, friendship, and school are the most important things! AU AU! [CD/OC (CQ), HP/GW, HG/FW, etc.]”
Full Name: Cliodhna “Klee, at least according to the reviews” Quick, plus Ben and Jack “Jackie” Quick
Species: They’re triplets. Their parents are Angus and Caterine Quick
Hair: Her is a quote from chapter two. “Cedric walked a half step behind his mother, nervous about meeting these neighbors. He became very confused when his eyes settled on the three children who were all similar heights and had varying shades of blonde hair.” There is nothing confusing about that!
Eyes: Jack’s eyes are “golden-brown”. One of the annoying things in chapter one is how the triplets having different eye colors is pointed out. “Cliodhna smiled at the younger boy who was nearly their height,” Just another way we’re different.” Please, writers, when giving your characters special traits, don’t throw it in your readers faces! Her eyes though turn out to be hazel. Funny how the first image which popped into my head wasn’t the “blue hazel”, but the “golden-brown” hazel. In fact, Ben’s are also described as “golden-brown” in chapter one.
Markings: Nothing specific.
Possessions: I believe they received brooms at a very young age.
Connection to Canon: The first chapter involves the annoying Cliodhna moving in near the Weasley family with her mother, father and triplet brothers I suspect only exist to make her super special. Scratch that. The comment regarding their eyes in chapter three confirms it, but I find myself more annoyed than I thought I would be with this character, and we’re not even into the first chapter. (The first chapter of twenty-eight mind you, with 273,628 words.) Later on, they also talk about celebrating half-birthdays. (…) “’I like the Quicks,” Bill told his brother as they flew lazily high above the field, ‘it’s good for the others to know non-Weasley children.’” WTF! We’re not even out of the first chapter, and the “we’re so special” isn’t slowing down! Cedric moves in during chapter two, but the entire thing felt “anticlimactic”. I’m also bothered with this “everybody moving in” plotline. I also just realized the writer is naming their chapters via Roman numerals. Chapter three is best summed up as being about how much Cliodhna loves her perfect family, but has the perfect life with perfect friends. WTF! In chapter four, “’Take care of your brothers,” Angus’ hands were on her shoulders, his green eyes peering into her hazel ones. ‘Make sure Jack makes friends and make sure Ben doesn’t become a prat.” As suspected, they don’t have any true role in the story beyond making their sister super special. Cedric also has to explain what triplets are in this chapter. Looking at chapter five, the story is “sue-what-plot”.
Origin: I wonder if the writer thought something along these lines. “There are already a bunch of twins at Hogwarts. As such, to make my characters unique, they need to be triplets.” I feel this is confirmed as I reread the summary and notice the first line. I’m not even into the first chapter, and the story is screaming toxic rating wise. I’d like to say the writer might surprise me, but I doubt this story will rank lower than an awful.
Special Abilities: Just from the summary, we find out they “are way too good at Quidditch.” I’m also left believing what I believe is the main OC, Cliodhna, is attempting to show people girls can do what the boys can. I’m honestly tired of that plotline, but writers who honestly think being a tomboy is actually something that makes the character unique. Actually, with just the summary, I see the writer already tacking on traits just to make their OC special. I also just reread the summary. They’re apparently the “only triplets in Hogwarts history”. I found out from the reviews that Ben is gay. Something tells me that’s another thing tacked on to be “special”.
Notes: When someone says they can’t believe a story doesn’t have more reviews, do you believe them? I see people saying that so many times on poorly written stories rather than the good ones, so how can you tell if the reader knows what they’re talking about?
Because according to one reader, “this is a great coming of age story”, yet doesn’t have any form of conflict one would expect of an actual coming of age story. If someone recommended this as a great coming of age fanfic, I’d find myself majorly disapointed.
Sample:
She stood there, on their new front porch with her brothers, looking out over the fields. "This is it," her brother Jack said quietly, "this is where we'll play."
"It's big," her brother Ben smiled, "it'll be great, Jackie!" He took his hand to pull him, "Come on! Stop being so sad. Think of all the adventures we'll have!" He turned to her, his golden-brown eyes bright, "Right, Klee? Tell him!"
Cliodhna grinned, "Ben's right, Jack! There's the wood. I bet there's a stream or a pond! And look!" She pointed up at the sky where a bird was flying overhead. "We're going to have a grand time here!"
Jack's frown faltered slightly as Ben continued to pull him down the porch steps, "It'll be fun you think?"
Both of his siblings grinned as they stepped out into the grass. "Very fun!"
"Not scary?"
Cliodhna patted Jack's shoulder, "Not if we stick together!"
"We'll always stick together."
Angus and Catherine Quick had finally moved their family to the countryside after much debate and difficulty finding a suitable location. They settled on a three-bedroom cottage in Ottery St Catchpole with a decent amount of land, plenty of nearby open space and woods and a handful of Wizarding families.
They were both not surprised by the different reactions their young children had to moving and leaving their London flat. Catherine and Angus knew in time they would grow to love their new home.
"And that family down the lane, I told you, the Weasleys? They have a couple of kids too," Angus told his wife.
Catherine looked out the front window as she waved her wand to organize some picture frames and books on the bookcase, "More than a couple I think."
The knock on the front door sent Ben, Jack, and Cliodhna out of their bedrooms where they were unpacking to the front hall.
"Who is it?"
"Yes, mum, who is it?"
Catherine smiled ruefully, "Well, let's open the door and see, shall we?"
A tall ginger-haired man grinned, "Ah, Angus, welcome to Ottery St Catchpole! This is my family!"
The Quick children stared openly at the ginger family, Ben's mouth agape. "You - you all have -" he went to point at them when Angus intervened.