4165: The Scamander Chronicles: The Philosopher's Stone - Alicia Ellanor Scamander
Again, it’s the holiday season, so updates may not be very frequent this month.
Title: The Scamander Chronicles: The Philosopher's Stone
Perpetrator: peachmystcan
Sue-O-Meter: Toxic
Cover/Banner Art: The writer’s avatar is an Anime character, or a character done in Anime style. Not sure which.
Summary: “Alicia was confused when her acceptance letter from Hogwarts came in, especially when living in the U.S. Introduced to a whole new world filled with magic, a mother with many secrets, a father she never met, a kid with a lightning scar, and a magizoologist. This sure is gonna be a bumpy ride of a lifetime. Join Alicia Ellanor Scamander and our golden trio in The Philosopher’s Stone”
Full Name: Alicia Ellanor Scamander
Species: She’s an American.
Hair: She has “wavy brown medium length hair into a ponytail”
Eyes: Here eyes are Hazel.
Markings: A bunch of birthmarks. Pretty much expect an American knockoff of Hrary Potter
Possessions: She has a special necklace. She has red pajamas, and “my normal home attire which consisted of a black long sleeve shirt that hid the extensive amount of birthmarks on my arms, a red knitted cardigan that was too large for me, a pair of sneakers and a normal pair of jeans that fit perfectly at the waist but at the same time baggy around the legs.” She’s an American with a Hogwarts letter.
Connection to Canon: She’s related to Scamander some how, but gets… well, see the summary. Richard and Levi, the convenient Dursley knockoffs of course attempt to grab her letter. She sends a letter to McGonagall for help.
Origin: Alicia has abusive parents/legal guardians who threatens to lock her in the basement, yet has her watch the little kids. Add to this, it is delivered by a letter.
Special Abilities: If your character is complaining that someone is leaving them - an eleven year old kid - to babysit, you’ve yet again made an exception for your character for the convenience of the plot and making them special. Just exceptions include them getting a Hogwarts letter despite being from America. Also, it is pretty bad when, “her green eyes pierced through me as if I were some kind of diseased animal she wanted to get rid of.” Worse, it turns out that Amanda’s two sons are thirteen.
Notes: Look. Making your OC aware of the fact they shouldn’t be getting a letter from Hogwarts, even confused as to why they’re getting a letter does not in any way negate the issue of them receiving a letter when they shouldn’t have. The point stands, but in some ways this makes things worse because you’re making the OC aware of the fact they’re getting special treatment, but trying to justify their being a reason why they’re an exception.
I’m trying to think of why Suethors think this is a good plot device, when there are ways which are more believable.
Also, when Suethor's name their story after the books, that tends to send off warning bells.
Sample:
"A..cia"
"Al..cia"
"Alicia..."
"ALICIA!"
"Alicia, my dear, you must keep the necklace at all costs, if it falls in the wrong into the wrong hands.. It will endanger everyone around you.. Watch out my dear, for I have to leave you-"
"ALICIA!"
I opened my eyes in a sudden jolt. Blinking, I rubbed my eyes, trying to get them to adjust to the sudden sunlight that escaped my closed window. I sat up and yawned, stretching as suddenly, my bedroom door opened, revealing a tall jet black haired women. Amanda wore a matching black and white blouse and pencil skirt with black heels due to her job working as a office lady. Her green eyes pierced through me as if I were some kind of diseased animal she wanted to get rid of. "Alicia, I've been calling your name for the past hour, why haven't you responded?" She said, hands on her waist. I rubbed my arm and looked the other direction "Well , I actually just woke up.." She shook her head "You better be glad I'm not having my monthly meeting today, now get up, you'll be managing the house today, and you better make it quick before I lock you back in the basement again." I nodded as she left the room. 'Yeah, leave the 11-year-old to babysit the house, wise idea butt-head." I sighed and shook my head. I quickly changed out of my usual red pajamas into my normal home attire which consisted of a black long sleeve shirt that hid the extensive amount of birthmarks on my arms, a red knitted cardigan that was too large for me, a pair of sneakers and a normal pair of jeans that fit perfectly at the waist but at the same time baggy around the legs. After changing, I ran down the stairs and found Amanda waiting for me by the front door. She turned and eyed me, "You better not pull anything like the last time you got it kid, or I swear your time in the basement will be 2 days longer then usual, got that?" I slowly shook my head. "Good, now I'm off. If you leave this house you're done for, understand?The kids will be here in a few so don't try to make a mess like last time."
I yet again nodded as Amanda shut the front door, locking it on the way. After I heard a car leave the drive way, I exhaled tiredly "Finally!". I turned and walked towards the kitchen putting my wavy brown medium length hair into a ponytail. I whistled as I entered the kitchen "Alright Alicia, breakfast first."
I poured myself some cereal and sat down at the dining table, beginning to eat in peace and quiet. That was till my peace and quiet was interrupted by sudden bang coming from a small window that was in front of the kitchen sink. I looked up from my cereal and just stared.
'Um...Okay?'
I was about to go back to eating my cereal but before I could, another bang occurred.
Title: The Scamander Chronicles: The Philosopher's Stone
Perpetrator: peachmystcan
Sue-O-Meter: Toxic
Cover/Banner Art: The writer’s avatar is an Anime character, or a character done in Anime style. Not sure which.
Summary: “Alicia was confused when her acceptance letter from Hogwarts came in, especially when living in the U.S. Introduced to a whole new world filled with magic, a mother with many secrets, a father she never met, a kid with a lightning scar, and a magizoologist. This sure is gonna be a bumpy ride of a lifetime. Join Alicia Ellanor Scamander and our golden trio in The Philosopher’s Stone”
Full Name: Alicia Ellanor Scamander
Species: She’s an American.
Hair: She has “wavy brown medium length hair into a ponytail”
Eyes: Here eyes are Hazel.
Markings: A bunch of birthmarks. Pretty much expect an American knockoff of Hrary Potter
Possessions: She has a special necklace. She has red pajamas, and “my normal home attire which consisted of a black long sleeve shirt that hid the extensive amount of birthmarks on my arms, a red knitted cardigan that was too large for me, a pair of sneakers and a normal pair of jeans that fit perfectly at the waist but at the same time baggy around the legs.” She’s an American with a Hogwarts letter.
Connection to Canon: She’s related to Scamander some how, but gets… well, see the summary. Richard and Levi, the convenient Dursley knockoffs of course attempt to grab her letter. She sends a letter to McGonagall for help.
Origin: Alicia has abusive parents/legal guardians who threatens to lock her in the basement, yet has her watch the little kids. Add to this, it is delivered by a letter.
Special Abilities: If your character is complaining that someone is leaving them - an eleven year old kid - to babysit, you’ve yet again made an exception for your character for the convenience of the plot and making them special. Just exceptions include them getting a Hogwarts letter despite being from America. Also, it is pretty bad when, “her green eyes pierced through me as if I were some kind of diseased animal she wanted to get rid of.” Worse, it turns out that Amanda’s two sons are thirteen.
Notes: Look. Making your OC aware of the fact they shouldn’t be getting a letter from Hogwarts, even confused as to why they’re getting a letter does not in any way negate the issue of them receiving a letter when they shouldn’t have. The point stands, but in some ways this makes things worse because you’re making the OC aware of the fact they’re getting special treatment, but trying to justify their being a reason why they’re an exception.
I’m trying to think of why Suethors think this is a good plot device, when there are ways which are more believable.
Also, when Suethor's name their story after the books, that tends to send off warning bells.
Sample:
"A..cia"
"Al..cia"
"Alicia..."
"ALICIA!"
"Alicia, my dear, you must keep the necklace at all costs, if it falls in the wrong into the wrong hands.. It will endanger everyone around you.. Watch out my dear, for I have to leave you-"
"ALICIA!"
I opened my eyes in a sudden jolt. Blinking, I rubbed my eyes, trying to get them to adjust to the sudden sunlight that escaped my closed window. I sat up and yawned, stretching as suddenly, my bedroom door opened, revealing a tall jet black haired women. Amanda wore a matching black and white blouse and pencil skirt with black heels due to her job working as a office lady. Her green eyes pierced through me as if I were some kind of diseased animal she wanted to get rid of. "Alicia, I've been calling your name for the past hour, why haven't you responded?" She said, hands on her waist. I rubbed my arm and looked the other direction "Well , I actually just woke up.." She shook her head "You better be glad I'm not having my monthly meeting today, now get up, you'll be managing the house today, and you better make it quick before I lock you back in the basement again." I nodded as she left the room. 'Yeah, leave the 11-year-old to babysit the house, wise idea butt-head." I sighed and shook my head. I quickly changed out of my usual red pajamas into my normal home attire which consisted of a black long sleeve shirt that hid the extensive amount of birthmarks on my arms, a red knitted cardigan that was too large for me, a pair of sneakers and a normal pair of jeans that fit perfectly at the waist but at the same time baggy around the legs. After changing, I ran down the stairs and found Amanda waiting for me by the front door. She turned and eyed me, "You better not pull anything like the last time you got it kid, or I swear your time in the basement will be 2 days longer then usual, got that?" I slowly shook my head. "Good, now I'm off. If you leave this house you're done for, understand?The kids will be here in a few so don't try to make a mess like last time."
I yet again nodded as Amanda shut the front door, locking it on the way. After I heard a car leave the drive way, I exhaled tiredly "Finally!". I turned and walked towards the kitchen putting my wavy brown medium length hair into a ponytail. I whistled as I entered the kitchen "Alright Alicia, breakfast first."
I poured myself some cereal and sat down at the dining table, beginning to eat in peace and quiet. That was till my peace and quiet was interrupted by sudden bang coming from a small window that was in front of the kitchen sink. I looked up from my cereal and just stared.
'Um...Okay?'
I was about to go back to eating my cereal but before I could, another bang occurred.