3499: Harry Potter and the Witches of Hogwarts
Don't forget about the Thirteenth Annual Pottersue Fanfic Contest. You've got until January 31 to get your entries in.
- The link of the day is Alan Rickman, Harry Potter and Die Hard actor, dies aged 69.
- Flashback Sue This is the first entry tagged as having a Sue version of Severus Snape.
Here is Alan Rickman week, but the focus actually isn't going to be on Severus Snape. One of the things Rickman specialized in was theater. In particular he worked with Shakespeare, so today we have a Sue related to Shakespeare in some manner.
TITLE: Harry Potter and the Witchse of Hogwart and Harry Potter and the Witches of Hogwarts- Snakes Chamber
PERPETRATOR: Lilianpeace
SUE-O-METER: TOXIC
COVER/BANNER ART: Do not care. I really want to forget this one even exists.
SUMMARY:”Juliet Black, granddaughter of Albus and Minerva, niece of Severus Snape the bat of the dungeons. With a chance meeting in Muggle London, her sibling bond forms with a three year old Hermione Granger. Watch them grow and enter Hogwarts while making plans and enemies along the way. Surprises are waiting the girls love, friendship and much more as Voldemort starts to come back.” We also have, “Juliet Black, Harry Potter and all their friends re back for their second year at Hogwarts. All they can do is hope for a normal school year. But the Chamber of secrets has been opened once against, now it's a race against time no blood status is safe when the first victim is a Pureblood. Harry x OC -HermionexTwins- Charlie x Oc. This is the sequel for HPWOH.”
FULL NAME: Cassiopeia Snape, Juliet Black, Hermione Granger
SPECIES: Juliet is the niece of Severus, and the daughter of Sirius Black. Cassopeoa os
HAIR: “My world was running to the sand box, [Juliet's] black curly hair hanging down her back, tamed with Wonderful Witch hair care, her tiny elfish features hiding behind a book.” The aunt has “wine colored hair”
EYES:
MARKINGS:
POSSESSIONS:
CONNECTION TO CANON: The Mary-Sue aunt is in the park with her Mary-Sue daughter, and Hermione shows up with her mother and wants to read a book. Mary-Sue daughter ends up being an excuse to read the books, and Hermione complains about how nobody likes her. The writer thought it was all right to make Hermione's father. Sirius is now in jail for killing the murderer of Snape's sister, rather then the reason he's in jail for in canon. Suddenly, despite the fact Hermione and Harry do NOT live in the same place, Harry and Dudley shows up, and he gets to make friends with Juliet and Hermione. Thus Harry gets rescued. Hermione's instantly allowed into the world because she and Juliet perform a special spell. (I've had enough. This is blatant canon defilement. The writer cares far more about her selfish wish-fulfillment then Rowling's world. It's also really bad when I don't want to know what other Toxic Mary Sue issues are in a story. Blowing the Dursley's away with magic, I've got a mental picture in my head that will seriously not leave.)
ORIGIN: “Okay somehow my story was deleted so here it is again, but without Warren Peace in it. As a warning this story isn't cannon, its 90% not. I was never a fan of the original parings, I think if Harry just had a head strong friend like Hermione and Juliet he would have been different. YES, there will be Ronald bashing, I dislike him greatly, but please give it a read. I don't own Harry Potter, we all know who does, so no money is being made from my writing. So on to the story; Harry Potter and the Witches of Hogwarts.” We also get, “Here is the revised edition for Harry Potter and the Snakes Chamber, still no real clue why it was taken down but hell I am reposting. If you don't like don't read, I can and WILL make Juliet how I see fit so go toss a shit fit elsewhere. I own nothing about Harry Potter other than new characters thank you.”
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Juliet starts off in the first chapter as a copy-cat Sue of Hermione, and “even for a child witch she was powerful.”
NOTES: The writer is old enough to be a mother, and her daughter is at least old enough to have an account on the pit. Despite this the writer seriously lacks in maturity. The original version of the story was deleted by the admins, which means it broke site rules. She also participates in character bashing, and freely admits she does it because she doesn't like the character. She also admits that ninety percent of her story is not canon, which means ninety percent of the story is original fiction, and she might as well be writing original fiction instead. The writer also uses a Polyvore account, something we typically see done by thirteen year old writers, and not adults. Actually, I think this is the first time I remember coming across an adult who uses this site. She also threw a tantrum because someone called her out for writing a Mary Sue.
I get the fact the writer isn't a fan of the original pairings, but that doesn't call for changing 90% of the canon. You only do that when you're creating a special snowflake version of the world for your own personal wish-fulfillment purposes. I think what REALLY bothers me though is this mother is supposed to be setting a good example for her daughter. Actually, when I read the summary, and saw on their profile that the writer was a mother, I really didn't expect things to be this bad. I also keep thinking of the Ultimate Mary Sue Litimus Test, and how bad of a score this one would get. This one is a doozy.
SAMPLE:
Cassiopeia Snape's point of view…
It was a breezy autumn morning in London, England, I walked through the cobbled road leading into the Muggle Park. I watched her tiny legs moving in a hurried pace, her green dress frilly as it hit her knees. My world was running to the sand box, her black curly hair hanging down her back, tamed with Wonderful Witch hair care, her tiny elfish features hiding behind a book. She loved the park but sadly never played with another child, she was content to sit in the sand and read, and even for a child witch she was powerful.
My own clothes resembling that of the Muggles, a long dress with a winter cloak, I sat watching her reading, while they whisper about what an odd the girl she is; I sat watching for any danger to her. When a middle-aged women sat beside me, with a little girl with unruly chestnut brown curly hair, but what caught my eye was the thick book nestled under the girls arm.
"Hermione dear, how about you give mummy the book and go play with the other kids?" she questioned the girl who was looking around.
"Mummy, they make fun of me. I see a little girl reading her mummy let her," she said with chocolate brown eyes, they pleaded for her mum to allow her this small favor.
"Of course Hermione dear, go read with the other little one, kindred souls." She smiled at her daughter as she tottered off heading towards my Juliet. The child sat a few feet from her and started in on her own book, when another little sat with them. He was a chubby little beast, sweets in one hand as his mum sat him down. She was watching now from another bench feet away, she had a long neck, something about her was familiar.
"Your daughter is very pretty, Hermione is it?" I smiled at the lady who looked at me, and my expensive clothes. "Yes her name is Hermione, and thank you she is the apple of my eye," and you saw the truth shinning in her amber eyes, she was stunning with curly brown hair, a little tamed.
"My niece Juliet is the little one next to her reading, I can't tear her apart from her beloved books. No matter if others think she is odd for it," I said waving my hand to the other mothers watching the now two girls reading while their own children played.
"Hermione, my poor girl, she gets picked on for her love of books and knowledge. But it's refreshing to see another child with the same interest. My name is Jane Granger, as you know my daughter is Hermione. She is all I have left after her father was killed near a year ago, he was in a robbery he shielded a child at our dental practice," she said, the sorrow was evident in her tone, as I placed my gloved hand over her knee.
"I am very sorry for your loss, I understand what you must be going through on some level. Juliet is all we have as well. Her mother, my husband's little sister, was murdered; then her father was put into prison while trying to find her murderer." I said looking at Juliet her face was turned to the little girl, then the boy before returning back to her book.
"That's horrible, the poor dear, I am so sorry," she said her hand covering her mouth. She was good company for a Muggle, we didn't believe in all this blood status like other Purebloods.
- The link of the day is Alan Rickman, Harry Potter and Die Hard actor, dies aged 69.
- Flashback Sue This is the first entry tagged as having a Sue version of Severus Snape.
Here is Alan Rickman week, but the focus actually isn't going to be on Severus Snape. One of the things Rickman specialized in was theater. In particular he worked with Shakespeare, so today we have a Sue related to Shakespeare in some manner.
TITLE: Harry Potter and the Witchse of Hogwart and Harry Potter and the Witches of Hogwarts- Snakes Chamber
PERPETRATOR: Lilianpeace
SUE-O-METER: TOXIC
COVER/BANNER ART: Do not care. I really want to forget this one even exists.
SUMMARY:”Juliet Black, granddaughter of Albus and Minerva, niece of Severus Snape the bat of the dungeons. With a chance meeting in Muggle London, her sibling bond forms with a three year old Hermione Granger. Watch them grow and enter Hogwarts while making plans and enemies along the way. Surprises are waiting the girls love, friendship and much more as Voldemort starts to come back.” We also have, “Juliet Black, Harry Potter and all their friends re back for their second year at Hogwarts. All they can do is hope for a normal school year. But the Chamber of secrets has been opened once against, now it's a race against time no blood status is safe when the first victim is a Pureblood. Harry x OC -HermionexTwins- Charlie x Oc. This is the sequel for HPWOH.”
FULL NAME: Cassiopeia Snape, Juliet Black, Hermione Granger
SPECIES: Juliet is the niece of Severus, and the daughter of Sirius Black. Cassopeoa os
HAIR: “My world was running to the sand box, [Juliet's] black curly hair hanging down her back, tamed with Wonderful Witch hair care, her tiny elfish features hiding behind a book.” The aunt has “wine colored hair”
EYES:
MARKINGS:
POSSESSIONS:
CONNECTION TO CANON: The Mary-Sue aunt is in the park with her Mary-Sue daughter, and Hermione shows up with her mother and wants to read a book. Mary-Sue daughter ends up being an excuse to read the books, and Hermione complains about how nobody likes her. The writer thought it was all right to make Hermione's father. Sirius is now in jail for killing the murderer of Snape's sister, rather then the reason he's in jail for in canon. Suddenly, despite the fact Hermione and Harry do NOT live in the same place, Harry and Dudley shows up, and he gets to make friends with Juliet and Hermione. Thus Harry gets rescued. Hermione's instantly allowed into the world because she and Juliet perform a special spell. (I've had enough. This is blatant canon defilement. The writer cares far more about her selfish wish-fulfillment then Rowling's world. It's also really bad when I don't want to know what other Toxic Mary Sue issues are in a story. Blowing the Dursley's away with magic, I've got a mental picture in my head that will seriously not leave.)
ORIGIN: “Okay somehow my story was deleted so here it is again, but without Warren Peace in it. As a warning this story isn't cannon, its 90% not. I was never a fan of the original parings, I think if Harry just had a head strong friend like Hermione and Juliet he would have been different. YES, there will be Ronald bashing, I dislike him greatly, but please give it a read. I don't own Harry Potter, we all know who does, so no money is being made from my writing. So on to the story; Harry Potter and the Witches of Hogwarts.” We also get, “Here is the revised edition for Harry Potter and the Snakes Chamber, still no real clue why it was taken down but hell I am reposting. If you don't like don't read, I can and WILL make Juliet how I see fit so go toss a shit fit elsewhere. I own nothing about Harry Potter other than new characters thank you.”
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Juliet starts off in the first chapter as a copy-cat Sue of Hermione, and “even for a child witch she was powerful.”
NOTES: The writer is old enough to be a mother, and her daughter is at least old enough to have an account on the pit. Despite this the writer seriously lacks in maturity. The original version of the story was deleted by the admins, which means it broke site rules. She also participates in character bashing, and freely admits she does it because she doesn't like the character. She also admits that ninety percent of her story is not canon, which means ninety percent of the story is original fiction, and she might as well be writing original fiction instead. The writer also uses a Polyvore account, something we typically see done by thirteen year old writers, and not adults. Actually, I think this is the first time I remember coming across an adult who uses this site. She also threw a tantrum because someone called her out for writing a Mary Sue.
I get the fact the writer isn't a fan of the original pairings, but that doesn't call for changing 90% of the canon. You only do that when you're creating a special snowflake version of the world for your own personal wish-fulfillment purposes. I think what REALLY bothers me though is this mother is supposed to be setting a good example for her daughter. Actually, when I read the summary, and saw on their profile that the writer was a mother, I really didn't expect things to be this bad. I also keep thinking of the Ultimate Mary Sue Litimus Test, and how bad of a score this one would get. This one is a doozy.
SAMPLE:
Cassiopeia Snape's point of view…
It was a breezy autumn morning in London, England, I walked through the cobbled road leading into the Muggle Park. I watched her tiny legs moving in a hurried pace, her green dress frilly as it hit her knees. My world was running to the sand box, her black curly hair hanging down her back, tamed with Wonderful Witch hair care, her tiny elfish features hiding behind a book. She loved the park but sadly never played with another child, she was content to sit in the sand and read, and even for a child witch she was powerful.
My own clothes resembling that of the Muggles, a long dress with a winter cloak, I sat watching her reading, while they whisper about what an odd the girl she is; I sat watching for any danger to her. When a middle-aged women sat beside me, with a little girl with unruly chestnut brown curly hair, but what caught my eye was the thick book nestled under the girls arm.
"Hermione dear, how about you give mummy the book and go play with the other kids?" she questioned the girl who was looking around.
"Mummy, they make fun of me. I see a little girl reading her mummy let her," she said with chocolate brown eyes, they pleaded for her mum to allow her this small favor.
"Of course Hermione dear, go read with the other little one, kindred souls." She smiled at her daughter as she tottered off heading towards my Juliet. The child sat a few feet from her and started in on her own book, when another little sat with them. He was a chubby little beast, sweets in one hand as his mum sat him down. She was watching now from another bench feet away, she had a long neck, something about her was familiar.
"Your daughter is very pretty, Hermione is it?" I smiled at the lady who looked at me, and my expensive clothes. "Yes her name is Hermione, and thank you she is the apple of my eye," and you saw the truth shinning in her amber eyes, she was stunning with curly brown hair, a little tamed.
"My niece Juliet is the little one next to her reading, I can't tear her apart from her beloved books. No matter if others think she is odd for it," I said waving my hand to the other mothers watching the now two girls reading while their own children played.
"Hermione, my poor girl, she gets picked on for her love of books and knowledge. But it's refreshing to see another child with the same interest. My name is Jane Granger, as you know my daughter is Hermione. She is all I have left after her father was killed near a year ago, he was in a robbery he shielded a child at our dental practice," she said, the sorrow was evident in her tone, as I placed my gloved hand over her knee.
"I am very sorry for your loss, I understand what you must be going through on some level. Juliet is all we have as well. Her mother, my husband's little sister, was murdered; then her father was put into prison while trying to find her murderer." I said looking at Juliet her face was turned to the little girl, then the boy before returning back to her book.
"That's horrible, the poor dear, I am so sorry," she said her hand covering her mouth. She was good company for a Muggle, we didn't believe in all this blood status like other Purebloods.