LONG: 'Show Me,' Narcissa/Andromeda

[caesia390]

Title: Show Me
Author: Caesia
Pairing: Narcissa/Andromeda
Rating: NC17
Length: Long
Warnings: underage incestuous lesbians; victorianness

I blame this story on Victorian sexist porn high art.

For the Porn in Motion challenge.

Dedicated to switchknife, for encouraging me.

And She said,

Comments

*SHRIEKS*

[switchknife]

Oh my God! My dear! My very own Disciple of Depravity! I now dub thee the High Priestess of yummy incestuous angst.

*licks all over*

THANK YOU. THANK YOU THANK YOU.

Loved the repetitive structure of 'Let me show you', with each revelation bringing something new into their relationship (or breaking it, as with the last revelation of the engagement ring). Beautifully done, highly literate, hot, hurting and just WONDERFUL. I loved this, my dear, and you pushed all my buttons--underaged sex, innocent virgins, covertly aggressive older siblings, betrayal, lust, beauty, heartbreak.

Narcissa is done just wonderfully--ice and alabaster indeed, but few would guess what secrets she hides. Andromeda was brilliant--I could see how things turned out in canon, watching you unfold her (in more ways than one!) in your story. I can see how the Blacks must have been determined to burn her out of their family tapestry. A rebel in so many ways--alas, that rebellion did not go over to Narcissa, although I think that if it weren't for Andromeda's

[instrumentality]

... and dulcinea saw that it was good. and she praised it to the heavens.

[dawniky]

Oh wow... sisters share don't they? hehe.

That was hot... nicely done!

[ex_theatrica309]

*pantpant*

That was hot. And it was my favorite (although rarely written) Blackcest pairing! *squee*

The "let me show you" worked very well, becoming more powerful with each repetition.

‘Come on, Andy, let’s go’ she lisped, and met no resistance as she drew her sister back into the garden. They resumed their game of fairies, flitting about the tall grass with their bleached skirts billowing behind them like butterfly wings. Andromeda caught Narcissa into a hug and tumbled them both to the ground, laughing in the ripe summer air.

I especially liked this passage, because it enhances the air of innocence that surrounds the girls at first & then slowly fades.

Absolutely wonderful job. The sex wasn't cliche or overdramatized, but fit in perfectly with the rest of the story.

Brilliant characterization of both of the girls. You really emphasized the bond between them, and the pain at the end when Narcissa realized that Andromeda was really leaving.

Beautiful. ♥

[sweet_sorrow1]

*heavy breathing*
*pant pant*
*puff puff*

Holy shit. That was one of the HOTTEST things I have EVER FREAKING read in my ENTIRE life!!!!!

FANTASTIC WONDERFUL WORK!!!!!

*lick lick*

*heavy breathing continues*
*panting continues*
*puffing continues*

*contineus to lick*

[caesia390]

thanks. :}