*is nervous*

[liadlaith]

Title: Eight Weeks
Topic: Theft
Wordcount: 959
Notes: This is very, very short. It also doesn't feel like it ended properly. I wanted to put another scene on the end, but I couldn't think of anything that didn't go all overly-explanatory. I think all spelling and grammar and tenses should be right, but if you see anything, point it out.

Comments

[rwh]

Almost seems minimalist. I like it.

If you're going to add a section, just add one line to the end of the last chapter. Something to the effect of her not taking the rat, because she was given permission. Sigh and leave the room - that sort of thing. Of course, I could be quite wrong here and be way off the mark. :-)

[liadlaith]

That is a bit off, actually : ) Fact is, she takes the rat, she breaks up with David and she doesn't see Ethan again. She grows a conscience. It's a "happy" ending.

[rwh]

Stuuupid. Happy endings suck. All stories should end in disaster, dispair and such the like.

[liadlaith]

Says the boy who hasn't seen fit to end any of his stories yet, with disaster or otherwise ; )

[rwh]

I wrote the end of Seb six odd months ago. Just haven't let anyone read the bits that are out-of-sequence, is all.

[liadlaith]

If something is written and nobody reads it, was it actually written? >; )