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Eevee Week Series of Five or Six Eevee-Themed Reports, Part 3! Eeveelution of the Day...
Jolteon
Title: Deep in my heart
Culprit Author's Name: Whitewinged demon
Canon: General canon?
Name: Sakura Hikari [BAAAAAAARF]
Species(es): ???
Hair Color: "long chocolate brown hair"
Eye Color: "soft sapphire blue"
Markings: Chances are she has some Pokemon ears or a tail or something as it's implied that everyone laughs at her when they see her. It's not clear, though.
Possessions: NOTHING.
Pokemon Team: Doesn't look like she really has any, but she saved a Jolteon from a flock of Spearow!
Origin: Viridian City? And here's an excerpt from the story: "She hated her life, each day she hated it more. Her father and Mother didn't care about her, they always said, 'I wish you were never born.' But they died in a fire, and Sakura was the only one who lived. No one wanted poor Sakura, so she lived on the streets."
Connections To Canon Characters: None mentioned.
Special Abilities: She probably has something. But nothing mentioned.
Notes: I really wasn't sure whether this was worth reporting or not; it's only 600-some words long, and hasn't been touched in two years. (I've also read one of this author's more recent fics, and while it had its flaws I quite liked it.)
But on the other hand... Sakura Hikari.
Samples:
Sakura held the Oran berry she was able to find, she smiled and was about to eat it then she heard a low whisper.
'Huh..what was that?' She murmured, putting the berry away. She followed the sound to a small clearing. A few hungry spearow were pecking at a small yellow pokemon. [What. I didn't know that Spearow made a habit of eating Jolteons alive!!]
It looked like a fox [A whatsit now?], only its fur was spiked and yellow. Its eyes were a beauitful ruby red, but on its left cheek was a scar that would never heal. [AAAAAAAAAAANGST.] Sparks jumped from its body, trying to get the Spearow away. Scratchs and pecks were on the pokemon's body, blood was also staining its honey yellow coat. [I wouldn't describe Jolteon as being "honey yellow." But I guess that's all up to perspective.]
'Jolt..Jolt...'It panted. Sakura stared in awe of pokemon, but then grabbed a stick nearby. She had fought the Spearow around the city tons of times, for food or just to save a wild pokemon.
'Get away from it you stupid birds!'Sakura yelled, the stick was thrown at the Spearow. The spearow crowed and flew away, knowing that they could not fight a human. [Those are some wussy Spearow.]
Sakura ran over and knet beside it. She wanted to feel its soft fur [Somehow I doubt Jolteon fur would be very soft.], but the pokemon growled as soon as she touched it.
'Jolteon...'It hissed at Sakura, then sparks shot from its body. The sparks hit Sakura's hand and hurt her.
'Please...you have to trust me..'Sakura said sadly. She pulled out the Oran Berry she found, she carefully put it by the Jolteon.
[Random POV switch as Jolteon refuses to trust Sakura but then trusts her a moment later. Then it faints.]
Sakura gasped. 'Oh no! The poor thing fainted.'She murmured. She picked up the small pokemon and ran into the city.
Sakura had seen the pokemon center before, but she never entered it. If anyone saw her they would make fun of her and laugh. [Yeah. I like to laugh at Sues too, especially if they have either "Sakura" or "Hikari" in their names. Bonus points for BOTH.] Sakura hated being laughed at.
She stopped at the Center, but it was closed. Sakura fell to her knees, the Jolteon fell out of her arms. She had fainted. [...Why...?] As the rain fell down onto the city, only a lone nurse saw Sakura and Jolteon.
Rating:
For the name alone.
Eevee Week Series of Five or Six Eevee-Themed Reports, Part 3! Eeveelution of the Day...
Jolteon
Title: Deep in my heart
Culprit Author's Name: Whitewinged demon
Canon: General canon?
Name: Sakura Hikari [BAAAAAAARF]
Species(es): ???
Hair Color: "long chocolate brown hair"
Eye Color: "soft sapphire blue"
Markings: Chances are she has some Pokemon ears or a tail or something as it's implied that everyone laughs at her when they see her. It's not clear, though.
Possessions: NOTHING.
Pokemon Team: Doesn't look like she really has any, but she saved a Jolteon from a flock of Spearow!
Origin: Viridian City? And here's an excerpt from the story: "She hated her life, each day she hated it more. Her father and Mother didn't care about her, they always said, 'I wish you were never born.' But they died in a fire, and Sakura was the only one who lived. No one wanted poor Sakura, so she lived on the streets."
Connections To Canon Characters: None mentioned.
Special Abilities: She probably has something. But nothing mentioned.
Notes: I really wasn't sure whether this was worth reporting or not; it's only 600-some words long, and hasn't been touched in two years. (I've also read one of this author's more recent fics, and while it had its flaws I quite liked it.)
But on the other hand... Sakura Hikari.
Samples:
Sakura held the Oran berry she was able to find, she smiled and was about to eat it then she heard a low whisper.
'Huh..what was that?' She murmured, putting the berry away. She followed the sound to a small clearing. A few hungry spearow were pecking at a small yellow pokemon. [What. I didn't know that Spearow made a habit of eating Jolteons alive!!]
It looked like a fox [A whatsit now?], only its fur was spiked and yellow. Its eyes were a beauitful ruby red, but on its left cheek was a scar that would never heal. [AAAAAAAAAAANGST.] Sparks jumped from its body, trying to get the Spearow away. Scratchs and pecks were on the pokemon's body, blood was also staining its honey yellow coat. [I wouldn't describe Jolteon as being "honey yellow." But I guess that's all up to perspective.]
'Jolt..Jolt...'It panted. Sakura stared in awe of pokemon, but then grabbed a stick nearby. She had fought the Spearow around the city tons of times, for food or just to save a wild pokemon.
'Get away from it you stupid birds!'Sakura yelled, the stick was thrown at the Spearow. The spearow crowed and flew away, knowing that they could not fight a human. [Those are some wussy Spearow.]
Sakura ran over and knet beside it. She wanted to feel its soft fur [Somehow I doubt Jolteon fur would be very soft.], but the pokemon growled as soon as she touched it.
'Jolteon...'It hissed at Sakura, then sparks shot from its body. The sparks hit Sakura's hand and hurt her.
'Please...you have to trust me..'Sakura said sadly. She pulled out the Oran Berry she found, she carefully put it by the Jolteon.
[Random POV switch as Jolteon refuses to trust Sakura but then trusts her a moment later. Then it faints.]
Sakura gasped. 'Oh no! The poor thing fainted.'She murmured. She picked up the small pokemon and ran into the city.
Sakura had seen the pokemon center before, but she never entered it. If anyone saw her they would make fun of her and laugh. [Yeah. I like to laugh at Sues too, especially if they have either "Sakura" or "Hikari" in their names. Bonus points for BOTH.] Sakura hated being laughed at.
She stopped at the Center, but it was closed. Sakura fell to her knees, the Jolteon fell out of her arms. She had fainted. [...Why...?] As the rain fell down onto the city, only a lone nurse saw Sakura and Jolteon.
Rating:
For the name alone.