Feedback Post

[phantomizedacid]

Hello readers!

This post is here for you to comment on my writing. Whether it'd be positive or negative, I'd love and appreciate your feedback on my writing. Please try to be constructive :D It will help me improve greatly.

Anonymous or not, your choice.
Thank you for your time♥

Comments

[phantomizedacid]

ahh thank you~ i definitely need a beta or something. i always have these stupid mistakes XD
i definitely think i'm gonna try write other pairings. hopefully that will turn out well XD

[xxsmiiles]

I don't read a lot of fics... mostly just yours, or ones that people recommend. But honestly, your writing is reallyyyy good. I would give you some tough constructive criticism, but I've got none D: Keep up the good work, bb ♥

[ontokki]

Thank you Jenn ;_; I feel so special~

[hp_groupie]

[ontokki]

SLAFDASF YOU. I LOVE YOU.
thank you so much ;A:

[hp_groupie]

You're welcome. Just keep writing.

on your vamp fic

[anonymous]

ok, actually, i read your vamp fic when you posted it, and i was going to give you feedback on it, but i didn't know how i could do it without sounding mean.

well, first, vampire fic. there's nothing wrong with it, but it's just something that needs to be done carefully. because it's so cliche and overused, you have to be careful with how you portray your characters.

the biggest problem i had with your fic was your approach on death. i don't think anyone, even one so devoted to something, would be ready to die without facing at least some fear of the after-life. and if they had none, i think you kind of need to cover why there isn't any. then jonghyun had no problems with being turned into a vampire, against his will, and being made immortal. even if we say that we want to live forever, i don't think many of us really do. for jonghyun to so easily give away his life almost makes him appear empty

Re: on your vamp fic

[phantomizedacid]

Thank you thank you thank you so much.
It's totally ok if you want to sound mean because I rather have an honest comment.

I think I tried to morph them into something they're totally not. I thought that would be ok since it's AU, but I guess it didn't work lol.
I'm writing more for Halloween so I'll try to do better. Thank you again for this! It'll help me a lot on my next vamp fic.

on your new vamp fic:

[anonymous]

i know you're looking for some concrit, so i came back when i saw that you posted again

Re: on your new vamp fic:

[phantomizedacid]

yea i tried really hard to avoid the cliche, the whole "let me suck your blood now you're dead" thing. but your suggestion sounds great.

yea i got comments about it being rushed :\ i guess that's my fault since i wanted to explain the stuff i didn't show in the side story. key discovering about vampires doesn't fit in the time line of the fic so idk how to fit that in D: there's so much to explain and i was so afraid that it'd seem that i was dragging it out.

i usually don't write a lot of dialogue (idk if you read my past fic) so this was my first try at it.

the whole jinki-minho-taemin thing, i sort of left that unclear on purpose. bad idea? i really wanted to clear that up in another fic.

thanks again!

[tomo_no_unmei]

hi, hi... ^^ i think that you write such great jongkey fics... i'm still reading, and so far, i love everything... even though some are short, it's still so so good and full of emotions... your fics tug at my heart... and i hope you write more... and update 'please call me and say...' soon... you're very creative... <3 really love, love, love your fics... <3

[phantomizedacid]

Thank you for reading my fics and commenting here!
I'll update it asap :D