[Fanfiction] "Bergamot"

[oreo_ornament]

Title: Bergamot
Characters: France, and mentions of a certain unnamed someone...
Rating: PG
Summary: A short AU one-shot in which Francis is being himself and refusing to be tethered down.

Comments

[nekoian]

While I didn;t have time to read the whole thing (but still felt the need to comment) I have to say you really captured Frances attitude and the sluggish feeling of sitting in airports is so familiar and you capture it so perfectly in so few lines.

I WONDER who could have been trying to get in touch. I wonder if they deserved such a cold shoulder!

I'll be sure to read this in closer detail later. Just thought I'd drop you a message and let you know how much I liked it!

[oreo_ornament]

YOU DON'T KNOW HOW LOUDLY I SCREAMED WHEN I SAW THIS COMMENT FROM YOUUUU.

I think you also don't know how much I stalk your fics, uhuhuuuu...

Really, thank you for the compliment! I'm still getting used to writing in English, so I think I've been overcompensating by abusing my thesaurus and throwing myself into imagery and setting, making sure to get the feel done properly.

AND YES I WONDER WHO THAT COULD'VE BEEN, HM. Certainly not the other half of my OTP or anything. And no, that person probably didn't deserve it, but you know how Francis is flightly and prone to taking off when he gets a bit out of his desired depth.

I'll look forward to further commentary from you and thanks again!

[nekoian]

I had no idea you were a reader, haha, I assume my stuff goes mostly unread. (Thank you for reading it, I'm glad if you enjoy them!)

I think it's very well written for English not being your first language, I certainly couldn't tell! As a note if you ever want something looked over feel free to PM me, I'm not the best editor but the offer is offered out gladly! (We must stick together us Scotlancers, we are a rare breed!)

As I say, I apologise for skimming it, but I will be back to read more and can't wait to see further pieces.

Sadly I do get the feeling I know France too well, (Poor unnamed other!) I imagine Francis gets through so many phone numbers that way....Also, I only just noticed WHERE France was actually headed to. I hope he behaves himself while he's there.

[oreo_ornament]

I've made my own commentary a few times! (Your Northern Ireland captured my heart, wee little tosser that he is.)

I tried. My English is getting better, I think! That probably sounds obnoxious, but I'll gladly take you up on your offer. ♥

(SCOTLANCERS UNITE!)

And no worries, this is really the first thing I've written with Francis making an appearance that I'm not utterly ashamed of--don't you DARE click that tag, I'll never forgive you. ;A;

But yes, poor unnamed Scotland other, having such a flighty husband...lover...person to deal with.

And yes again, Amsterdaaaam. I think he's just being petty.

[moonlighten]

I really like the way you've written France here, and how you've managed to say so much about his life and who he is in so few words.

And I can't help but feel a lot of sympathy for whoever it was who was texting him, and can only hope that the guilt sticks at some point because I'm nothing if not biased.

I really enjoyed reading this!

[oreo_ornament]

NO WHAT IS THIS, ALL MY IDOLS APPEARING TO MAKE COMMENTARY I feel a mixture of joy and the urge to go crawl in a hole and die. No, I legitimately screeched. Hello. I hope I haven't frightened you off with how awkward I am when presented with people I admire.

But thank you! I really have enjoyed dipping my toes into France's Mind Theatre™ as of late, because it really is an interesting and lovely place (and the decor is fantastic). It's especially interesting to write him from an AU perspective where I have to mentally justify his action and thoughts using a fabricated human background as opposed to French history. (I wonder if that statement made any sense...weh.)

And yes, poor whoever it was, though we can't always blame Francis because I'm certain that person has a way of being a bit overbearing. A lot overbearing. But well-meaning. I'm certain status quo will resume upon Francis' return to Paris. But that's not necessarily a good thing, is it

[moonlighten]

Haha, not frightened off, just very flattered to be admired!

I think you do it very well! And find myself fascinated by this AU you've created, and think you've created a great sense of place and character in such a succinct piece; one which makes me very intrigued about this iteration of Francis (and, of course, his relationship with the mysterious texter. I've toyed with writing a human AU for my guys for a long time, as I too think it would be a really interesting exercise to see if I could make sense of their various relationships without the weight of history behind them.

I imagine they can... Although I think, perhaps, they don't entirely recognise that about themselves (and it also may be reactionary, in some part). And, no, probabably not the best...

(Haha, I think it was largely writing that that made me so. Though I am planning writing a portion of it (along with some of their earlier history) from France's POV soon, so maybe my allegiances will shift a little accordingly afterwards though I suspect it will only be a

[oreo_ornament]

Oh dear God, any continuation of LIAV would probably make me cry in joy. I rec that to everyone and their mothers and their grandmothers and so forth and so on into eternity. (This may or may not be a slight exaggeration on my part.)

I did write this only intending it to be a stand alone piece for practice, but now I also find myself toying with the idea of something longer. But it's difficult thinking up a love story plot that isn't cliché and stale. Any suggestions you have there would be fantastic, aha. I also might call on you for help with the...ahem...unnamed other person, since the one you write has largely occupied my brain and I adore him, if that's fine with you? I wouldn't wish to impose. (And thank you again for reading!♥)