Comments | orangefriday: Creative Writing Assigment #1

orangefriday

Creative Writing Assigment #1

Jan 25, 2012 13:44

I thought I'd post my creative writing assignment here for critique, hoping somebody will read this. It's a 200-400 word assignment, writing a short scene that could serve on its own or be a part of a bigger story and written for children and young adults.

Well, I have some problems with the 'plot' or lack there of. I also feel like the ending is ( Read more... )

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Comments 10

ihanoverian January 25 2012, 23:43:57 UTC

HOLY CRAP. My mind was blown. I thought they were two boys talking to each other, and my jaw literally dropped when he mentioned that he was a tree. I had to read it over, and everything started making sense ( ... )

orangefriday January 25 2012, 23:48:06 UTC

Yay! Don't feel bitchy! It helps a lot to hear what others think :) I have to get used to criticism! I agree with everything you've said to change.

Oh, the shreddin' wasn't a typo. XD It's the way the boy talks!

Thank you soooooooooooo much!!

turtle_realms January 26 2012, 09:54:27 UTC

Yay all great sub-edits by ihanoverian ... beautiful little story and the ending sucker punched me. I enjoyed that! And your icon totally threw me off, I did think it was two little boys talking to each other.

"Why are you so rough?" :D

orangefriday January 26 2012, 22:00:56 UTC

Haha, did you think it was a story of Harry And Ron? XD

And thank you for the kind comments!

rubyelf January 25 2012, 23:48:58 UTC

I like the concept! I must ask... do you just want some quick comments or would you like a real edit? Because I used to do a lot of that. English teacher and all. If you'd like a proper edit, send it over to me as a Word document at rubyelf@yahoo.com. I don't at all mind taking the time to edit short things for a friend occasionally, but that's only if you want me to.

orangefriday January 25 2012, 23:51:09 UTC

Oh that would be awesome!! Thank you so so much! I'll send it right now :)

michaelangelo24 January 26 2012, 00:54:07 UTC

Okay, I'll try my best to give a good critique ( ... )

orangefriday January 26 2012, 22:04:18 UTC

Thank you, thank you! Fixed the tenses! I'm still struggling with the idea of only using the "standard" dialogue tags but it would definitely strengthen my writing if I can convey the more complicated ones by improving my dialogue. :)

michaelangelo24 January 26 2012, 22:15:05 UTC

I struggled with the dialogue tags at first too, but I do find dialogue much better with the focus taken off them. :)

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orangefriday January 26 2012, 22:10:57 UTC

Thank you so much for your comments! It was really great to hear what you thought about the story overall and to know you picked that much out of such a short piece.