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[michablack]

Hey everyone ^^ It always annoys me that I never get around to getting as much done creatively as I'd like, so this is really a great way to get at least sit down and get a little something done. I mostly write so that's probably what you'll see most of from me, though I can't say anything about the quality heh

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[bird_mom]

I think this is an interesting way to write a scene/short story. It begins in the abstract where there are so many possible situations, and it takes your choice of words to make the reader focus in on what has happened. I think it really allows the reader to bring a lot to the story as well - what one person pictures as a disaster, as well as the participants, could be entirely different than what another reader pictures.

[michablack]

Thanks :) I really liked the idea of the reader being able to fill in a lot of the story too, instead of spelling out exactly what's happening.

[himmapaan]

I found myself actually very moved by the end. I like the way the situation unfolds as you read simply with the dialogue. That same simplicity was enough to provoke sympathy as the reader realizes the plight of the speakers. The subtlety and stillness of the whole makes the tragic end all the more poignant, I feel.

[michablack]

Thank you :) I wanted to make the end poignant, so I'm glad you find it so!