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[nytel]

Title: Turn Around
Author: Nytel
Rating: PG
Spoilers: None, it's pre-mini.
Genre: Angst
Characters: Kara, Lee, Zak
Summary: It's the one year anniversary of Zak's death.
Disclaimer: I am just borrowing them.
A/N: This fic was inspired by the lyrics of the song Turn Around by Sarah Bettens.
Also, thanks to

Comments

[ez_as_pi]

C- Very nice.....

Reaching up he brushed away tears that he hadn’t even been aware of shedding. See? They needed to go hug each other......

[nytel]

They do. Stupid pilots. *shakes head*

[bsg_rp_apollo]

*kicks the firewall*

OK, lets try that again.

Sorry it's taken me so long to respond - it turns out I needed to be at work to be able to concentrate on anything resembling reading fanfic. Of course, the management board have just shafted me royally, so I'm taking time out to read fanfic instead and calm down, rather than telling them to bend over and frak themselves...

Anyway, first things first; I like this piece. I really like this piece. I think you've created an entirely credible snapshot of Lee and Kara prior to the miniseries. The detached, isolationist Lee in this piece feeds entirely believeably into the arrogant, closed off Lee of the mini. You really hammer that home by showing the way he starts reaching for Kara emotionally, only to close himself down, deliberately stay away

[nytel]

Well, I'd pick reading fan fic over pissing off the boss any day. Well... most days.

I think you've created an entirely credible snapshot of Lee and Kara prior to the miniseries.
-- Thank you. :) That's exactly what I wanted to do. I've always thought that there's not nearly enough information about those two years, and I watned to fill up the holes.

The detached, isolationist Lee in this piece feeds entirely believeably into the arrogant, closed off Lee of the mini.
-- Thank god. I was really hoping that I could write him to match how he was in the mini. It's quite different from how I write him in 'present day' fics.

particularly love the little touches, comments like Adama treating her better than she should, the carefully constructed layers of remorse and guilt, all woven beautifully together.
-- *Blushes*

if they filmed this and put it in a flashback, I'd believe it in a heartbeat.-- *Blushes even more* Thank you. That has to be one of the best compliments I've ever recieved about my writing

[viper_knight]

aww... very nice...

very sad but very poignant and for some odd reason i want to say appropriate although i'm not quite sure that makes to even me... but! that's my impression o-O;;;

Her pain is palpable and even though, at the same time Lee is so controlled, he is hurting so badly as well...

thanks for sharing!

[nytel]

It's extremely odd how you said it was appropriate, I totally see it that way too. It's so hard to explain, but it just is.

Anyways, I'm glad that you liked it. And thanks for the feedback. :)

[viper_knight]

!! i'm glad you understood what i meant!!

:)

[nytel]

Well, I'm glad you got that too. I thought I might have been losing it. Lol.

[scullymulder123]

That was....incredibly and vividly sad; it was also incredibly well written. Great job.

[nytel]

Thank you so much. And thanks for taking the time to leave feedback.

[gimp_homegurl]

Outside of absolutely loving your "Kara, Am Fat. Send help, Lee" icon this was just so tormentingly sad. I tend to forget that two years past between his death and the mini-series so I've never thought about how that time would have been for our couple. I'm glad Lee heard her lamenting, it gives him more reason to forgive her later when she finally confesses to him. I just wish he'd have walked out from behind the tree and hugged her. Then again if he had I doubt she would have taken kindly to it nor would she have let him hug her. To save Lee's sparkling blues from a black eye it was probably best he stayed there.

Is this it? Am I done, done? *whimpers*

-Dani-

[nytel]

Alas yes, you're now all caught up. At least until I get the last fic I wrote back from the beta. But it's kind of set in the middle of LDYB 2, so I don't know if it'll make sense or if you'll want to read it.

And I don't think Kara would have taken very well to Lee eavesdropping on her confession of sorts. He'd be lucky if he made it out only with a black eye.

But since you're caught up you should join those sites now. *nudge, nudge*

Also, there's tons of awesome fic floating around on lj. I'd recommend checking out the people on my friend list, most are authors. And also check out the communities that I belong to. You should be able to find enough to keep you busy for a while.

[gimp_homegurl]

I may not get most of it but I am very good at looking past those things to see the message being displayed. Plus with Ed and Kim that's pretty much all I'm doing. Ignoring the plot parts I don't get and concentrating on the ones I do.

As for keeping myself busy, one of my best friend is having her Birthday soon so I'm going to be writing her a little something as a present. That should take up my time. I will however check out that site you mentioned, see what kind of mischief I can get myself into.

-Dani-

[nytel]

Uh oh. Lol. Don't get into too much mischief because I'm a mod and I'll have to kick your ass. *giggles* Or I'll just send Teyla to do it for me.

[latteaddict]

That was a beautiful capture of a moment in time.

You wrote Kara's grief and remorse so well.

Lee's little burst of stubbornness at the end to stick to his guns and cut off all ties to Zak is pure Lee. But I think Lee from the mini, more than the Lee we know now. He's definitely changed. So your characterisation is perfect for the time setting you have.

Lovely, sad piece. I enjoyed reading it :D

[nytel]

Thank you so much. :)

I'm glad that I wrote pre-mini Lee well. He definitely has changed a lot since then, and I'm glad that I could switch gears a bit and write him in the past.

Thanks for the lovely feedback.