Yay for goopy Transformers stories! :D

[nightwind69]

Well, I posted this on the Cell, so I figured I might as well post it here, too. Even though most of the people who read this journal and would be interested in this story also usually read the Cell... Whatever. :)

Anyway, here is a story that frostymook and I wrote. It's called "Inculpatus", and it's a Transformers fanfic, so those of you who aren't into

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[blazingskies]

Wow, lovely fic, you can really feel the dpeth of emotion...

Which makes it sad, in a way, because you know what's coming..:(

Poor Screampuff *sigh*

[ravenclaw_devi]

That's why we ended it on such an upbeat, positive note because our intention is to accentuate the devastation that will occur shortly thereafter. Losing Skyfire damaged Starscream on many different levels and we wanted to set that up

Oh, I could tell. In fact - and that may just be a matter of personal perception, so please don't take offence - you were perhaps laying it on a bit too thick, IMHO. It felt a bit like (no offence) emotional manipulation to me - like you were laying it on thick with the characters' happiness and basically saying, "Look how happy they are, but we all know what will happen next, don't we? They don't know that the anvil will drop, but we know, don't we, audience?" It's - I'm not saying that having the characters perfectly, blissfully happy when we (but not they) know that disaster will strike next is a technique that doesn't work - I've seen it work. It's just that you were doing it a bit blatantly here, and it might have worked better if you'd done it a bit more subtly, if you catch my drift

[nightwind69]

I think the "difficulty" with the issue might be because this story is meant to be very closely connected with "Redemption," if not an actual, attached prologue to the story. As such, it's meant to set up certain quirks in Starscream's basic personality that will be important later, and it's meant to set up why we believe Starscream acts the way he does subsequent to Skyfire's loss and during the course of the cartoon episodes (i.e. how he can shoot at, injure, curse at, attempt to murder, and just otherwise act like a complete, indifferent jerk to Skyfire...and yet still love him. :) ) In our view, Starscream's behavior is drastic because he didn't just lose a loved one, but the way he sees it, he lost the bright, happy future that he was "supposed" to have. And more. But that would give away "Redemption" stuff...and we certainly don't want to do that! ;)

So, anyway, as a prologue, this is meant to set up the foundation of Starscream's character as it pertains to his relationship with Skyfire and, perhaps, as it will pertain to his

[nightwind69]

Oh, and, I hope you feel better soon, too. Cuddle that Skywarp plushie that Frosty gave you. Just don't get boogers on him 'cuz you'll freak him out. ;)