Brotherhood (19b/27)

[night_spear1287]

Title: Brotherhood ( Table of Contents)
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: Nothing you recognize is mine. I gain nothing of material value from this.
Pairings: Gen
Chapter1 Chapter2a-- 2b Chapter3 Chapter4 Chapter5 Chapter6 Chapter7 Chapter8 Chapter9 Chapter10a-- 10b Chapter11 Chapter12 Chapter13a-- 13b Chapter14 Chapter15 Chapter16a-- 16b Chapter17a-- 17b

Comments

[sg_betty]

Excellent chapter! Very eventful! More friendship with Carter, Daniel-wounded in the heat of battle and his first guaranteed kill, the Ancient tablet... That sarcophagus it tricky, in terms of storytelling, isn't it? I like the way we got to see the attempts to get help, rather than hearing about it. As I was reading about Teal'c training of Daniel, it occurred to me that this Daniel is likely to be a proficient fighter much earlier than canon-Daniel, and perhaps a better one (not that Daniel's any slouch in that department. ;)
PS. I was really hoping that a chapter would be posted today! :)

[night_spear1287]

Glad you liked it--this chapter did cover quite a bit, I guess. I'm not sure I'd compare mini!Daniel to canon!Daniel in terms of soldiering skills, but I do think there's more of an element of trying to fit into the military lifestyle (with varying degrees of success) that Daniel wouldn't have done in canon; there's a tension between military and academic-civilian that my Daniel observes but doesn't really feel. That will actually be addressed in an upcoming chapter, too.

Thanks!

[sg_wonderland]

"This was Freeman’s second time already, and there were quiet concerns whispering through the base that the sarcophagus’s presence was making people more reckless. Even after witnessing Skaara’s withdrawal, Daniel thought privately that people with those concerns should get dragged into a fight with several Jaffa and see if they were more excited about being shot just because they’d been shot once before."

Coming on the heels of the recent sarc discussion and meta, this was especially thought-provoking. Would you be just the least bit careless if you knew there was a get-out-of-dead-free card back on base?

High points for me was General Hammond's concern about Daniel's mental state, in the wake of his first confirmed kill and the missing Jack thing. And, of course, any Daniel/Teal'c scene is always great.

Was your High Councillor visit a "Shades of Grey" omen? Or am I just overly suspicious?

[night_spear1287]

Oh yes, omens all over this chapter, to be sure :)

It *is* interesting, that sarcophagus. Throughout the series, there's a lot of the theme of temptation and power in any form, and it seems that the sarcophagus is one representation of that, at least on some level.

Thanks!

[sg_fignewton]

Oh, lots and lots to like here! Daniel with Teal'c. Daniel with Sam. Daniel with Hammond. Daniel with Ferretti. Daniel with Robert. Whee! :)

"going upstairs" for Ascension... ::grins::

Very nice with the hints of the Curia realizing that Jack must be innocent of the thefts, and therefore worth involving. And I really like how you've portrayed the Tollan here in general, and Thor's answering machine! :)

It's lovely to see Daniel slipping seamlessly back into the SGC - with purpose, now, instead of as a means to an end as it was before. Great stuff.

ETA: I forgot to mention how much I liked your treatment of Daniel's first kill with Tau'ri weapons - how he deals with it, how the others react, and most of all, his longing for Jack. Superb.

[night_spear1287]

Glad you liked. This was a big chapter that was lots of fun to write :)

[acarlgeek]

I LOLed when they encountered the garrulous Asgaard holograms, :-). It was sad to lose the one in the previous chapter, but encountering them in this chapter had that much more impact for underscoring Daniel's anxiety about Jack. :-)

How SG-2 hovered guiltily over Daniel in the infirmary, and Hammond was RIGHT THERE to make certain Daniel has help dealing with his first confirmed kill. Well done: realistic concern but not too sappy.

Most everything else has already been commented on ("...went upstairs"), :-).

Great job!

[night_spear1287]

The Asgard are so much fun--they're definitely my favorite of the advanced races (or at least the most easily likable) :)

Thanks!