Jazz Club Romance (pgs. 1-4)

[jtabon]

Hey all!
First time posting here, so if I'm stepping out, feel free to smack me back in line. ;)

First off, just letting you all know I'm doing NanoMango to complete my entry for TokyoPop's Rising Stars of Manga contest, so I won't be able to post my finished story here. BUT, it's been intimated that if it were to be posted behind an f-lock, it

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[queen_marshed]

Oh my. This is certainly very lovely! I like the unique style!

Good luck with the contest! :D

[jtabon]

Thank you, it's muchly appreciated. :D

[eramundo]

it's a bad month for getting laid up for everyone it seems. Hope you're feeling better. I'm really digging your inking. do you work on bristol board?

[jtabon]

Eh, I have pain meds for it, I'm just trying not to OD on em or kill this month's scrip a few weeks early. lol

Yup, These are all on bristol. I usually use a Hunt 107 nib for inking, but I sometimes use a slim brush for all that damned hair.

[starchildorion]

Wow, the style is just really funky-fresh and I like it a whole lot! *_*

Will you eventually be adding the wording? What's happening on page 4 is kinda confusing. XD

[jtabon]

Well I'd be screwed if I tried sending it in without text, huh? ;)

Yeah, but that's usually the last thing I do. The only text I do by hand are sound fx and the occasional insane exclamation.
Then again, I don't think page 4 would be any less confusing with dialogue, lol.
Thanks!

[starchildorion]

Oh, well I figured that you'd be adding it in, I was just wondering if you were keeping it out because of the contest, or if it was something we'd eventually be looking at!

[jtabon]

Oh.
Well, I'm still not sure, in all honesty. A lot people seem to think that if you post anything at all, you're disqualified. Others say put up a few pages, but nothing with spoilers.
I'm halfway between the second view there and f*** all that, so I'll probably end up f-locking most if not all the pages, just without text.

Shouldn't be so confusing as this last page here, I think. This was the text-heaviest page in the story, I'm pretty sure. And none of it's really exposition, just cheap jokes. =/
So yeah, shouldn't be TOO hard to follow. I hope. lol

[jasoncampbell]

nice line work.
I'm confused about the first panel, though. What are all the lines? Is that rain? (if so, it should all be the same angle)
Is it a ton of bullets?
A whole lot of electric wires?

[jtabon]

Yeah, it's rain.
Never done it before, so I figured this is as good a time as any to learn, lol.
I used different angles mostly to show wind conditions without having to render it all in. I meant to draw a lot more in to clear that up, but my nibs were starting to tear the paper up a little and it would've been a pain to clean the up image up once it was as thick as I wanted it.
So I finished that all with tone, which hopefully won't be as confusing. If it's still an issue after that, I'll clean it up at the end of the month if I still have time. =/

[yampuff]

Bo-chan, your inking = LUUURRRV

:D

My only crit: on the third page, the woman in profile, her face looks a little flat and her necks kinda thick.