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[nameless_me]

a friend of mine asked me to write a poem for him describing how he feels about a girl he's been seeing Here it is any thoughts or suggestions would be appreciated.

Lay it on the line

I know a beautiful maiden; so cunning and rare.
she flows through my mind, like blood in my veins,
and makes me feel as though I don’t have a care.
She haunts my

Comments

[brokenangel849]

that is beautiful, well written :) *hugs*

[orion_flight]

you are amazing and talented with words...
I wish I had a bf who wrote beautiful words to me like that!
wow..it's great

Well Done!

[teardrops7]

*hugs* Lovely, beautiful 'description' of a first date...
...excitement, insecurities, longing, waiting, hoping...
YOU DID A 'GREAT' JOB OF TELLING IT ALL!!!..high 5!!