Let me know what ya think
a friend of mine asked me to write a poem for him describing how he feels about a girl he's been seeing Here it is any thoughts or suggestions would be appreciated.
Lay it on the line
I know a beautiful maiden; so cunning and rare.
she flows through my mind, like blood in my veins,
and makes me feel as though I don’t have a care.
She haunts my dreams and relieves my hearts pain;
and makes me feel as though I’m walking on air.
Is this feeling real, or am I getting ahead of myself?
Do I stand a chance with that divine beauty at all?
Does she have the very same thoughts about myself?
Or am I just imagining that angels serene trumpet call?
There is so much I want to say to that precious girl,
but scared she might turn away from me forever if I do.
That’s why when I’m near to her my thoughts unfurl;
and everything I really want to say gets broken in two,
I’m just scared of being hurt by that precious girl.
Is this feeling real, or am I getting ahead of myself?
Do I stand a chance with that divine beauty at all?
Does she have the very same thoughts about myself?
Or am I just imagining that angels serene trumpet call?
I know I need to just lay my heart out on the line;
and tell that woman what I have on my mind,
if I don’t I’m only depriving myself of the divine.
If I’m lucky she will respond to me in kind,
and I’ll be able to show her that I can walk the line.
Soon I will know if I’m getting a head of myself,
and if I stand a chance with that beauty at all.
I hope she harbors such thoughts about myself,
I hope she also hears loves tranquil trumpet call.
-Nameless_Me
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