I love the detailed way you draw the reader into your character's world, and also the details that connect each part of this -- Toni's tapping foot, the way each of the emotions at the end are foreshadowed in the intro, the description of the sofa coupled with the character's imagination
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First, and most importantly, thank you so much for taking the time to give such detailed feedback. You definitely made me think a lot about what I had written here
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My brother says lollerskates sometimes! *smiley* I always steal the cat's; hers come pre-warmed from all the cat-naps she takes. *winking smiley*
No problem; I wouldn't have noticed if you had. I spent today doing house stuff. *big smile* We now have a tentative closing date for the first week of January.
You're welcome! Hopefully things with the house are settling into a less paperwork-heavy stage now, and I'll have more time regardless. I know I could have responded to you sooner if I had gotten online as soon as I got home.
The sixth -- the first Friday. I don't think it's bad luck? We've been telling people, anyway.
It's tentative because we just got the repair request signed today and it won't be to them until Monday morning. But I'm fairly certain we didn't ask them for anything that would take more than a week and a half to fix.
...I just realized it's a week and a half to Christmas. Eeek! I haven't wrapped a thing.
Oh, I missed your last question. This is definitely fiction, although I've certainly included elements from my own childhood. I loved playing hide-and-go-seek as a child, and also had a sofa fortress, but fortunately never got eaten by a shadow demon. LOL If I had, I wouldn't need those special powers Gary's promised to hand out after the vote.
I sort of hoped you hadn't. It would have been difficult to do an exorcism over the internet. *winking smiley*
Lol, I'm hoping we get something better than being munched on by monsters! Maybe an automatic cookie-generating power. That seems like something Gary would enjoy. *smile*
I figure maybe it'll be something like bringing eliminated friends back from the dead. I know one person who's been eliminated that I'd love to bring back.
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My brother says lollerskates sometimes! *smiley* I always steal the cat's; hers come pre-warmed from all the cat-naps she takes. *winking smiley*
No problem; I wouldn't have noticed if you had. I spent today doing house stuff. *big smile* We now have a tentative closing date for the first week of January.
You're welcome! Hopefully things with the house are settling into a less paperwork-heavy stage now, and I'll have more time regardless. I know I could have responded to you sooner if I had gotten online as soon as I got home.
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It's tentative because we just got the repair request signed today and it won't be to them until Monday morning. But I'm fairly certain we didn't ask them for anything that would take more than a week and a half to fix.
...I just realized it's a week and a half to Christmas. Eeek! I haven't wrapped a thing.
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Lol, I'm hoping we get something better than being munched on by monsters! Maybe an automatic cookie-generating power. That seems like something Gary would enjoy. *smile*
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I figure maybe it'll be something like bringing eliminated friends back from the dead. I know one person who's been eliminated that I'd love to bring back.
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