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Theme 21, There's a 78% chance that he'll sleep through physics on Monday

Apr 20, 2006 15:01

Title: Eight Times a Week [Tory/Colin]
Fandom: Off*Beat
Rating/Warnings: PG for successful library stalking.
Summary: Tory is supposed to wake Colin up, not take his creepy notes.
AN: Mousapelli's Birthday Theme 21: There's a 78% chance that he'll sleep through physics on Monday.

( Eight Times a Week [Tory/Colin, PG] )

Comments 16

I LOVE IT!! *grin* sqkiwibird April 21 2006, 02:13:44 UTC

Oh my! *pinging back and forth in front of the computer screen* Oh my! *going back to reread story* YAY!! :) You made my day!!

I loved this line:

"You do look rather flushed," Mrs. Keplar peers at him closer, and Tory tries to look as diseased as possible."

And I loved this line:

He finds he can only write 'tuna fish' with a question mark before the pen dangles limp between his fingers

I loved, loved, loved this. I loved that Colin asked Tory to wake him up in time for class. I love that Tory handed Mandy the notes he was taking without even looking at them (I'll bet there was something in them about Colin!). I love that Tory's heart just won't stop pounding, so he thinks he needs Ritalin. I love the sticky X button on the game controller. Yay for tuna fish!

Okay, I'm stopping now. *bow* Thanks so much for writing and posting this.

Re: I LOVE IT!! *grin* mousapelli April 21 2006, 15:30:26 UTC

Thanks! God, I really liked writing these two, and I want to do it more but since the series is only one vol in I'm a little hesitant to do it until I have a better grip on exactly what their situation is.

But there needs to be so much Off*Beat fic. Mmm yes. And Tory is so much dork love. "Mom, I need to be medicated because every time I see...uh...I feel...my heart...and...wow, nevermind." "Tory, do you have a girlfriend?" "NO. OH GOD NO."

I don't even have an icon yet! *shame*

krispy_kream July 24 2006, 10:15:30 UTC

This is so wonderfully written~ I can easily see this playing out in the comic and I absolutly love Tory's thought process while Colin was kissing him. Mass ♥ for you! ^_^

mousapelli July 25 2006, 01:08:14 UTC

thanks so much! I liked writing Tory's scattered stream of thought since there's not so much action actually going on. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

midnyte_wolf July 24 2006, 14:16:02 UTC

XDD Baha!! OMG COLIN NO!! YOUR BOOKBAG!! IT'S UNZIPPED!! That was so lame Tory! So lame! ^^;; But what can ya do in situations like that? ...Probaaaably the same thing. Cheers! No shame! *pride ( ... )

mousapelli July 25 2006, 01:15:40 UTC

*blushes* aw, thank you! I can't wait for the next volume to come out so I actually have some idea of what's really going on with these guys, but once in a while i get a little slice of life in someplace.

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

scheherezhad July 24 2006, 15:35:57 UTC

This is so good, and it's all in the little details. Tory taking notes without paying attention, Mandy's pigtails, the two sandwiches, the controller with the sticky X button, Colin's breath. This one's getting saved to my fic folder. :)

mousapelli July 25 2006, 01:43:39 UTC

thank you! All those details in the manga were what made it great, so i'm glad I could reproduce some of that for you here. These are great characters and i can't wait to have more canon about them.

I'm glad you liked it!

cruzle July 24 2006, 19:49:16 UTC

This is so good! I think it really suits the story, more than other fanficitons I've read... it seems very in-character, and I love that. :3 I love Tory's obvious blushes. Maybe Colin smells like tuna because of his cats (I wonder if that was what you were thinking)? And yeah... I like how Tory can't write anything more than tuna fish. SO IC, OMG. You deserve applause. ^^ I love when things are like this... Great job!

(I don't understand the last line, but... maybe my mind is okay with that. XD;;; )

mousapelli July 25 2006, 01:55:01 UTC

thanks so much! tory's pretty obvious, yeah. And you're the first person to catch on about the tuna fish! Good job! That's not surprising though, because unless you read the first volume really carefully you wouldn't probably have even noticed the cats; i didn't until the third or fourth time through. So i giggled when I read that on Jen's new art.

(the last line is about Tory hiding his erection with his notebook :D) I'm glad you enjoyed it!

cruzle August 8 2006, 21:28:08 UTC

Well... NOW I understand! XD;;;

I think I got the cats thing because of Jen's new submissions to DA. Though... it's in the first volume, too...