[Fic: RPF] Headfirst, Fearless

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Title: Headfirst, Fearless
Pairing: Selena Gomez/Taylor Swift, background Demi/Selena, Taylor S./Taylor L., Nick/Selena
Rating/Word Count: PG-13/6239
Disclaimer: I do not own Selena Gomez or Taylor Swift, nor any of the other real people used and/or mentioned in this fic. None of the portrayed events actually happened (no matter how much I wish

Comments

[moderndaywendla]

So I kind of loved this.
For most of the things i.e. plot development and such I had no problems. It was predictable; but that's helped more than hurt you; because it wasn't so predictable that it was boring, you kept the reader's attention which was good. I loved your characterization as well, because for the most part it was how I imagine them to be from interviews..etc. I like how you picked up on Selena not being as happy as a celebrity, because that's something not a lot of people touch on and they usually either make her cold or just make Demi have all the problems. Speaking of Demi, I love how you wrote in their relationship! Yay Semi. I like how you touched that she would always love her but they're growing apart, and I thought it was interesting how it was Demi who walked away because in most of what i've read from other it's been selena, so it was a new point to the story. NOW I do have to point out the thing that did bother me..but it was minor. Most of the time your descriptions and imagery was beautiful especially of the cold air (love winter imagery), though a little more imagery could be added to the story as a whole. Like I said, most of the time the imagery was good, however there were sometimes where you would write imagery that sort of clashed with your personal voice AND that sounded cliche(not in the good way) Like when you said things like, 'only selena's strong arms' it just seemed very Juvenile. The other thing was Jump then fall being used but that's not against you a lot of other authors use the same song is all. All in all it was a good read, and it is in my memories. I apologize for my logic at times because i'm scattered and it's also 1am where I am.