Unintentionally humorous SF

[mistraltoes]

"Sudenly, all the eyes in the room rose from their fixed positions on the floor to stare at him."

"Mona was on the liquilounge, her dark eyes pouring over him like warm jello."

"Ashala's head felt like vermicelli slowly slipping off the platter of her sholders."

"Onion oil! I couldn't imagine anyting worse than a daily bath in onion oil."
Yes,

Comments

[astrogirl2]

Man, that is a thing of terrible beauty. :)

[mistraltoes]

:D

[lonemagpie]

At least three of those lines could definitely be very good ones in the right context (especially the tall and thin guy looking like a cadaver that's forgotten something - I could see that in a Discworld book.)

[mistraltoes]

Yes; context is important. I suspect the story that sentence was submitted in wasn't sufficiently Pratchetty to make it work.

One could make a writing challeng out of these. I'd probably enjoy doing something with: '"Oovil snetch," he growled in his mind.'