*giggles* im glad you didn't think it sucked so much XD; I still don't think I like it and uhg, I'm kind of...hiding the actual points secret inside small words but...XD;;;
ahahah I will try. I promise. this was more of a Maachin fic than a MachiYone though XDDD; How funny.
I didn't really mind since the way you write Machida would make me want to read it anyway. Although, you should try keeping him happy for a bit. *bricked* He deserves more love and smiles, doesn't he?! :p
Those two lines say way too much. Textbook case of less is more? XD
I didn't know how it'd turn out either when I started writing it. I was thinking it'd make it focus on the Yonemachi more than it did, but I suppose I wrote it too much from the point of Machida and the feelings stood on Yone's side, rather than Maachin's. I tried to keep the balance but sort of failed.
I tried to make it as real as the real timeline was. Kind of missed when Hara left but I suppose it doesn't really matter. I left out Yara because chibi Yara is smaller than usual.
I'm glad you think so! I kind of like how Ohno and Akki had such strong presense in Maachin's life. Both were his partners in dancing and I do remember reading that Machida had his menthal health go wrong kind of situations after Akki left so I tried to portray that into his muscle-illness-thingie. IDK how good i could put that in but...in my mind it was pretty:p
I'm glad you caught on that. The something else begins part. I wasn't sure how obvious that was, that Machida ended up finding his support in Yone. Maybe I will , but
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It's onesided yonemachi until the end ♥ it grows into something after that.
Ah, I suppose you can call it a Happy Ending. Which is rare, so wow. I think you can read too much into it, I didn't restraint the reader from doing so. There are hints for both Ohmachi and Akimachi. But I like the simplicity of Akimachi friendship, which is why that machida refused to go to Akki's wedding sorta hurts. Though I think he would go anyway but this is a fic so. XD;
Isn't it so cute ♥ maybe i should try to write from Yone's point of view later :P
OMG OMG, it's lovely. *tearing up again, lol* Machida so insecure. And Yone such a sweetheart. You are making me ship this too now, and I never really thought about it before.
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Sometimes he shut the world around him and created one of his own.
Sometimes he needed hands to catch him before he fell in too deep.
These two lines.. ;-; Oh Maachin and his need for the support of others.
Akiyama sent them invitations for his marriage.
Machida didn't go.
Ohh, ouch, ouch. It's not that I didn't expect that last line, but seeing it so plainly after the rest of this part kind of stabbed me in the heart.
But! It ended on a note of hope, and it was sweet without being pointlessly fluffy.
Verdict: WRITE MORE OFTEN.
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ahahah I will try. I promise. this was more of a Maachin fic than a MachiYone though XDDD; How funny.
Akiyama sent them invitations for his marriage.
Machida didn't go.
That part is my favourite XD;
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I didn't really mind since the way you write Machida would make me want to read it anyway. Although, you should try keeping him happy for a bit. *bricked* He deserves more love and smiles, doesn't he?! :p
Those two lines say way too much. Textbook case of less is more? XD
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he does, doesn't he? (laugh) but i have hard time imagining him happy XDDDD;
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I didn't know how it'd turn out either when I started writing it. I was thinking it'd make it focus on the Yonemachi more than it did, but I suppose I wrote it too much from the point of Machida and the feelings stood on Yone's side, rather than Maachin's. I tried to keep the balance but sort of failed.
I tried to make it as real as the real timeline was. Kind of missed when Hara left but I suppose it doesn't really matter. I left out Yara because chibi Yara is smaller than usual.
I'm glad you think so! I kind of like how Ohno and Akki had such strong presense in Maachin's life. Both were his partners in dancing and I do remember reading that Machida had his menthal health go wrong kind of situations after Akki left so I tried to portray that into his muscle-illness-thingie. IDK how good i could put that in but...in my mind it was pretty:p
I'm glad you caught on that. The something else begins part. I wasn't sure how obvious that was, that Machida ended up finding his support in Yone. Maybe I will , but ( ... )
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Ah, I suppose you can call it a Happy Ending. Which is rare, so wow. I think you can read too much into it, I didn't restraint the reader from doing so. There are hints for both Ohmachi and Akimachi. But I like the simplicity of Akimachi friendship, which is why that machida refused to go to Akki's wedding sorta hurts. Though I think he would go anyway but this is a fic so. XD;
Isn't it so cute ♥ maybe i should try to write from Yone's point of view later :P
lol wtf, is this a competition?
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This was so beautifully written and just so sad, but I love it all, especially the little bit of hope at the end. ♥ ♥ ♥
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I kind of want to write MA fic now....
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Do eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet =D=D=D=D *cheers you on* pleaseeeeeee
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