Forgive the blabberingpattitooSeptember 9 2015, 18:40:40 UTC
HNNNGGGG WHERE TO BEGIN??? THIS IS GOING TO BE INCOHERENT. FORGIVE ME.
First off, thank you so, so much for this story. I love you. I know you're a pinch hitter because my original author backed out on me so I'm very grateful that you volunteered to write instead. Again, I love you. And no offense to my original author but maybe it was meant to be because I love this story so much!
Honestly, I love all my prompts, as in I wanted to see them all written (heh). But I never realized how much I wanted this particular prompt after I read this story. I'm weak for narratives that involve natural enemies having to fight the tide because of some sort of attraction and you NAILED IT. My heart broke at the reveal that Seungyoon was a cop (even though it was part of the prompt) because I knew the angst was coming and I loved it? YES I'M A MASOCHIST. And I'm so happy/sad/happy that you fed my angst-loving soul LOL. And I don't know why you made that disclaimer that you veered away from the prompt because this was exactly what I wanted. Or maybe I just didn't notice because you made me want this story, my dear author. Hihihi.
I usually hate writing oneshots because I like building characters and making sure no detail is missed, and I find it hard to tightly pack it in just a short story. But goodness, this is why I envy the way you were able to convey everything the reader needed. The pace was just right. Their attraction felt real, the falling for each other part didn't seem rushed at all. I loved the tension, the smut (hell yeah, hey author I feel you know me. You know I like these things, don't you? HAHA), the dynamics between the Song family, their backstory, even their rivalry with the Kims -- all these things I felt were sufficient.
Now let me go to the characters. I love Mino. He wrestles a lot with who he is, and that was evident in the story even though the realization hadn't fully hit him until the end. He's doing this for his family, like he had no choice to do what he does, be who he is. Beautiful things do not reside in the world he lives in, even though he clearly loved beauty. The fact that he's so aware of that, and has consciously repressed the side of him that dared want these things made my heart bleed for him -- even though he's technically a criminal. Enter Seungyoon. The thing is, I knew I was gonna lowkey hate Seungyoon because he's the one who's bound to deceive Mino in this scenario. But I did understand where he was coming from (and I love that you inserted that backstory of why he became a cop, why justice was important to him) because his motivation did lessen my dislike for his character. Still, there was enough room for me to hope that maybe there was a chance that Seungyoon would forego his moral obligation in favor of Mino. Which is why, to be honest, I didn't feel so much for Seungyoon when he realized he was manipulated by Taehyun. Because that became the trigger for why he ran to Mino instead of the fact that he loves Mino. Granted, it didn't dawn on him that he was in love with Mino until he found out Taehyun had deceived him, but still. SEUNGYOON. You should have known, and you should have stopped it. :(
But the ending, while it may not be for everyone, was something I liked. Not because I'm a sucker for angst lol but because it was realistic. I'm glad there was no attempt at letting Mino escape from prison (LMAO) or Seungyoon killing Taehyun to get rid of the evidence (honestly it crossed my mind because I'm gruesomely romantic like that), or anything else grand just to force a happy ending. The truth is, what's done is done. Seungyoon was doing his duty. Mino was a bad man and he deserved to go to jail for his crimes, and not even a love story can get in the way of that. I liked how Mino was able to reflect in jail and know for a fact that his anger was more at himself and who he is than at Seungyoon, which made the story less about just losing his love, or feeling betrayed, but more about Mino's life as a whole. This is even emphasized by the last sentence, which talks about a Song crying. The flowers was a nice touch, like it was the only connection to Seungyoon he has, so it did tie up the love angle of the story.
Forgive the blabbering (2/2)pattitooSeptember 9 2015, 18:41:41 UTC
But to be honest, my heart ached for their love. Even if I felt Seungyoon deserved to lose Mino, I wanted Mino to have a shot at his happiness, now that he's decided to take that leap. The death of Jinwoo, I felt, was used very well in this way. Like it was a turning point for Mino. And I really, really wanted him to have the love Danah had with Jinwoo. It's just Seungyoon UGH SEUNGYOON. You're my bias but UGH. Hahaha. Don't worry, I love that I dislike him -- I felt it was necessary in this story.
Anyway, I just loved it from start to finish. Reading all these minyoon stories, THIS STORY SPECIFICALLY, makes all the writing frustrations worth it. Haha. Thank you dear author. And sorry if I exhausted you with my lengthy ass comment. <3
First off, thank you so, so much for this story. I love you. I know you're a pinch hitter because my original author backed out on me so I'm very grateful that you volunteered to write instead. Again, I love you. And no offense to my original author but maybe it was meant to be because I love this story so much!
Honestly, I love all my prompts, as in I wanted to see them all written (heh). But I never realized how much I wanted this particular prompt after I read this story. I'm weak for narratives that involve natural enemies having to fight the tide because of some sort of attraction and you NAILED IT. My heart broke at the reveal that Seungyoon was a cop (even though it was part of the prompt) because I knew the angst was coming and I loved it? YES I'M A MASOCHIST. And I'm so happy/sad/happy that you fed my angst-loving soul LOL. And I don't know why you made that disclaimer that you veered away from the prompt because this was exactly what I wanted. Or maybe I just didn't notice because you made me want this story, my dear author. Hihihi.
I usually hate writing oneshots because I like building characters and making sure no detail is missed, and I find it hard to tightly pack it in just a short story. But goodness, this is why I envy the way you were able to convey everything the reader needed. The pace was just right. Their attraction felt real, the falling for each other part didn't seem rushed at all. I loved the tension, the smut (hell yeah, hey author I feel you know me. You know I like these things, don't you? HAHA), the dynamics between the Song family, their backstory, even their rivalry with the Kims -- all these things I felt were sufficient.
Now let me go to the characters. I love Mino. He wrestles a lot with who he is, and that was evident in the story even though the realization hadn't fully hit him until the end. He's doing this for his family, like he had no choice to do what he does, be who he is. Beautiful things do not reside in the world he lives in, even though he clearly loved beauty. The fact that he's so aware of that, and has consciously repressed the side of him that dared want these things made my heart bleed for him -- even though he's technically a criminal. Enter Seungyoon. The thing is, I knew I was gonna lowkey hate Seungyoon because he's the one who's bound to deceive Mino in this scenario. But I did understand where he was coming from (and I love that you inserted that backstory of why he became a cop, why justice was important to him) because his motivation did lessen my dislike for his character. Still, there was enough room for me to hope that maybe there was a chance that Seungyoon would forego his moral obligation in favor of Mino. Which is why, to be honest, I didn't feel so much for Seungyoon when he realized he was manipulated by Taehyun. Because that became the trigger for why he ran to Mino instead of the fact that he loves Mino. Granted, it didn't dawn on him that he was in love with Mino until he found out Taehyun had deceived him, but still. SEUNGYOON. You should have known, and you should have stopped it. :(
But the ending, while it may not be for everyone, was something I liked. Not because I'm a sucker for angst lol but because it was realistic. I'm glad there was no attempt at letting Mino escape from prison (LMAO) or Seungyoon killing Taehyun to get rid of the evidence (honestly it crossed my mind because I'm gruesomely romantic like that), or anything else grand just to force a happy ending. The truth is, what's done is done. Seungyoon was doing his duty. Mino was a bad man and he deserved to go to jail for his crimes, and not even a love story can get in the way of that. I liked how Mino was able to reflect in jail and know for a fact that his anger was more at himself and who he is than at Seungyoon, which made the story less about just losing his love, or feeling betrayed, but more about Mino's life as a whole. This is even emphasized by the last sentence, which talks about a Song crying. The flowers was a nice touch, like it was the only connection to Seungyoon he has, so it did tie up the love angle of the story.
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Anyway, I just loved it from start to finish. Reading all these minyoon stories, THIS STORY SPECIFICALLY, makes all the writing frustrations worth it. Haha. Thank you dear author. And sorry if I exhausted you with my lengthy ass comment. <3
- Patti
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