That's All the Words I Know (1/1)

[mickeylover303]

Le sigh. I'm really starting to feel the "morning after regret", days later from finishing Juliette. Is it too late to turn back time? Can I still pretend none of it ever happened?

...ugh, I'm just like totally and utterly ugh rn ( back to hiding in my own little corner), but I swear I'm going to finish the next part of EM after this, or at least

Comments

[syrraki]

er, this is great and I like the length but...

So three tables down, only two more away from his destination, he lengthens his stride. The stride of a man who won’t be bested by some rokurokubi, the stride of a man on a mission, it’s the stride of the Great Uzumaki Naruto who’s finally going to confront the Menacing Himiko-bastard once and for all.

have you... lost it?

*facefault*

[mickeylover303]

I feel unduly pressured by that kind of question. You shouldn't ask such a delicate thing so abruptly. |_・)

But to answer said question...maybe. The jury’s still out on whether I even had "it" in the first place. I’ll flip a coin later to decide.

Hmm, I suppose it doesn’t fit. ~(>_<~) Strange thing it is, I think it sounded better when I was thinking it through in Japanese? Because I do that sometimes. Only, too many things make little sense afterwards. That, and writing Naruto confused me very much here. I didn't know what else to do with that part, because I still wanted to keep it to show Naruto was psyching himself up, while making fun of him for it and a lot of other things I won't bore you more with. idk, meh, who knows what it's doing there in the end; I just wanted this to be really silly

Re: *facefault*

[syrraki]

HAHAHAHAHA
it's just, you don't normally channel Naruto's insane thought process. I mean, I on the other hand, do it all the time, so I saw that and I was like... *I* didn't write that. WHO wrote that? ANZA? WHAT? since when?

It fits in the story, it just seemed different to what you normally do, if that makes sense. I think also because you normally don't venture much into their thought processes, but just demonstrate what an outside observer would see, which is a more professional approach but er. not as fun ha ha ha ha.

"I feel unduly pressured by that kind of question. You shouldn't ask such a delicate thing so abruptly"

^ that does sound very japanese. it sounds like how you make Sasuke talk, in a very japanese sort of way.

Re: *facefault*

[mickeylover303]

Funny you say that. I always thought I was channelling him, albeit a more real world-esque version(?), since I like writing an older Naruto; I think he's more suitable to fit my kind of mellow style--subtle, the one thing I actually can do. You had me thinking I done did goofed or something like that. But still, it's definitely a new angle to consider, and I shall ponder this with your insight in mind.

Does it? Ah, I don't think that's not good per se...I think. I need to learn how to speak normally.

Re: *facefault*

[syrraki]

Hmm. Maybe I'm wrong, but you generally seem to stay out of your characters' heads.

if you watch too much anime and read too much doujinshi, you end up talking like a translated japanese person.

Re: *facefault*

[mickeylover303]

No, if that’s how it comes across to you, that doesn’t mean you’re wrong. Again, it’s just something for me to think about, which is a good thing, because I’m always looking for ways to better convey ideas. Being direct is really not one of my strong points, so if you don’t see what I see, I’d still want to try to show you, you know.

Or something like that.

I’m just going to unlearn Japanese and pick up English all over again.