As per request... [Thanks to Mnemoscat, KingMob13, and Josabry.] Any further crit is seriously welcome, prior to publication. (Trust me - you can't possibly get any more brutal than 'Cat, Jo, or KingMob...)
This is why I'm a prose writer; not a poet... (smirk) This Royale-with-Cheese (or whatever the fuck Abby calls it) is a direct result of surviving my first week teaching in a new prison, and talking to a good friend from the old prison.