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Mentors by Starsea

Jun 20, 2007 04:01

Title: Mentors
Author: sea_thoughts aka Starsea
Rating & Warnings: PG for language
Prompts: "Moony, Wormtail, Padfoot and Prongs,” sighed George, patting the heading of the map. “We owe them so much.”
Word Count: 3095
Summary: George and Fred find out about Remus and Sirius, while Tonks finds out about Moony, Wormtail, Padfoot and Prongs.
Author's Notes: ( Read more... )

sea_thoughts, last chance full moon showdown, general, humour

Comments 46

an_ardent_rain June 20 2007, 04:48:58 UTC

Oh, that was GREAT!

I've always wanted to read a fic where Fred and George "meet" some of the marauders, so this was an absolute treat to read! You've really done a good job - not only was it humorous, but I really like your portrayal of all the characters.

Excellent - a very fun read.

sea_thoughts June 20 2007, 16:14:51 UTC

It's good to know that I'm fulfilling other people's wishes as well as my own. ;)

You've really done a good job - not only was it humorous, but I really like your portrayal of all the characters.

Thanks, it's easy to go OOC when you're trying to make things funny but the situation wrote itself, really, so I wasn't too worried!

katyhasclogs June 20 2007, 08:34:13 UTC

That was a lovely read. I thought your insight into the characters was excellent; there was real depth to them.

I liked the combination of humour and poignancy too.

sea_thoughts June 20 2007, 12:33:14 UTC

I thought your insight into the characters was excellent; there was real depth to them.

Yay! I did want every single character to have their time in the spotlight, especially since the beginning of the scene is mainly about the twins and Sirius.

I liked the combination of humour and poignancy too.

That's good, because I did wonder if the mood shifted too abruptly, but when have you have OotP!Sirius in the story, that does tend to happen.

Thanks very much for your review!

dwlikeebeinlost June 20 2007, 09:51:30 UTC

*I never get to use this icon enough*

I loved this so much!

sea_thoughts June 20 2007, 16:26:48 UTC

Thank you! :D

mrstater June 20 2007, 12:32:51 UTC

You should be very proud of this, because apparently it's a wonderful cure for a splitting headache. Well, the caffeine in my coffee couldn't have hurt, but I sat hear reading and sipping and feel in much better sorts than when I woke up!

Anyway, this is lovely and fun; I've always wanted to read the twins finding out Remus and Sirius are behind the Map, and this is just perfect. I really love seeing Remus being proud to be a Marauder whilst doing his best to be an adult. It's cute that he seems buoyed by the hero worship enough to flirt with Tonks.

The dark dimensions to Sirius' moods are very well conveyed, too, and I really like how you've done that through Tonks' POV, where her gentleness and compassion really shine through. It's so easy to see how Remus would look on that from aside and fall for her.

And I hope you write more R/T, because you've captured the chemistry of they're not-together-but-definitely-interested chemistry quite deliciously!

Really nice work!

sea_thoughts June 20 2007, 19:37:17 UTC

You should be very proud of this, because apparently it's a wonderful cure for a splitting headache. Well, the caffeine in my coffee couldn't have hurt, but I sat hear reading and sipping and feel in much better sorts than when I woke up! - wow, thank you so much! Coming from an established R/T writer like you, that means a lot. I do know that reading a good story can make you feel so much better! ^.^

I've always wanted to read the twins finding out Remus and Sirius are behind the Map, and this is just perfect. - hmm, seems like quite a few people have been wanting this scene, so I'm glad I wrote it! And 'perfect', there's no higher praise!

I really love seeing Remus being proud to be a Marauder whilst doing his best to be an adult. It's cute that he seems buoyed by the hero worship enough to flirt with Tonks. - well, it's nice to let the young, energetic rebellious girl know that you also used to be young and rebellious 'back in the day'! ;) And he obviously takes great delight in teasing her.

The dark dimensions to Sirius' moods ( ... )

oneandonlysusan June 20 2007, 14:29:32 UTC

I really enjoyed reading this! I especially liked Tonks' analysis of Remus being liked by everyone at headquarters.

"Tonks wondered if Lupin realised what a compliment it was that they all liked him so much. Probably not: low self-esteem was another thing she’d noticed about him, though he hid it well."

That was a really good sentence because it really brought me back to when JKR said that Remus really likes to be liked. It seems really right to me to think that Remus would really like being liked but never really know when people liked him. I like that you retained the concept too, when Remus says:

“There’s a reason it was ‘Padfoot and Prongs’,” he said quietly. “It was always James and Sirius. I may be his friend, but I’m not James… and that’s who he really wants.”

Oh Remus! I just want to hug him!

Good job!

sea_thoughts June 20 2007, 17:58:37 UTC

What a detailed review, thank you so much!

"Tonks wondered if Lupin realised what a compliment it was that they all liked him so much. Probably not: low self-esteem was another thing she’d noticed about him, though he hid it well."

That was a really good sentence because it really brought me back to when JKR said that Remus really likes to be liked. It seems really right to me to think that Remus would really like being liked but never really know when people liked him.Exactly. He's never quite learned to recognise when he's loved and appreciated. I'm betting that when Harry said "you're the best Defence Against the Dark Arts teacher we've ever had", his immediate thought was "well, look at who's taught you" and he didn't even think of the implication that nearly all his students loved him and would have fought for him ( ... )